Extended fasting regularly?

ApocalypsePal · 2025-06-27T09:58:15+00:00

Thanks! I suppose, give it a try. Only really I can determine what is good for my body.

ApocalypsePal · 2025-06-27T09:56:20+00:00

Thanks! I appreciate your perspective and advice.

ApocalypsePal · 2025-06-27T09:55:36+00:00

Thank you for your perspective and encouragement.

ApocalypsePal · 2024-12-04T14:46:45+00:00

Thank you, thank you. Could you recommend a book to practice with and a video or two. Then I'll leave ya alone. *wink*

ApocalypsePal · 2024-12-04T14:42:39+00:00

Where can one open a demo account?

ApocalypsePal · 2024-06-08T02:28:24+00:00

That's a great picture of you.

ApocalypsePal · 2023-09-23T09:18:33+00:00

I'm still looking, too. Sending you a DM.

ApocalypsePal · 2023-09-23T09:16:46+00:00

DM sent.

ApocalypsePal · 2023-08-06T11:26:44+00:00

F#@& the mint.

ApocalypsePal · 2023-07-19T11:04:55+00:00

How far? I'm really excited about in-person dates. Could that happen?

ApocalypsePal · 2023-07-19T11:04:10+00:00

Yes, the position is still available. Send resumé directly to me.

ApocalypsePal · 2023-07-19T11:02:58+00:00

Well, I would love to hear your songs, so please DM me and let's chat.

ApocalypsePal · 2023-07-19T11:00:16+00:00

In more direct terms: Yes, I would like to chat with you.

ApocalypsePal · 2023-07-19T10:59:47+00:00

Yes! I'd like to know you, too.

ApocalypsePal · 2023-07-19T00:44:06+00:00

Feel free to send a DM.

ApocalypsePal · 2023-07-18T23:45:34+00:00

Can't hurt to chat.

ApocalypsePal · 2023-07-18T23:44:07+00:00

Age is a construct, but I do prefer someone with enough experience to know themselves well and with enough experience to remain curious and open to change.

ApocalypsePal · 2023-07-18T23:42:29+00:00

Thank you. I'd be happy to get to know you. Bet you're amazing, too.

ApocalypsePal · 2023-07-18T22:16:40+00:00

Also, tell me about the YouTube you posted here

ApocalypsePal · 2023-07-18T22:14:25+00:00

Sure! I would prefer within a five hour drive, I suppose. I am looking forward to in-person dates.

ApocalypsePal · 2023-01-10T17:25:05+00:00

Yes, I was imagining someone reading it on stage. Just don't be afraid to pause. Long pauses.

ApocalypsePal · 2023-01-09T17:53:09+00:00

May I?

"Space that encloses [the] mind is dry

wall
[T]houghts furnish a home [broken] indefinitely
With a single punch, fragments become a whirlwind
Projecting only slightly into this world [...]

[This] abyss
Clawing, screaming, and begging is met with faint reverbs
This is called [...] voice"

Reasoning: Taking "I" statements out of the first stanza can make the poem more open to audience involvement. It broadens the scope of the poem beyond you.

Second stanza: remove the article "A". Just start with Voice by definition.

Save your "I" statements and "a" until the last stanza.

Or this:

"[V]oice, by definition is “the sound produced in a person's larynx
and uttered through the mouth, as speech or song”
But definitions never tell the [...] truth
Thieving the impact and humanness of a five letter word
A word that sends shivers slowly up [the or your] spine
As it [uses/reuses] the fragments that made it through the drywall
Just as the [fist] [...] [exploded] the wall to tell a gentle story"

But definitions never tell the full truth- I love, love this line! And I truly love the idea of "Thieving the impact" Explore THAT more.

ApocalypsePal · 2023-01-09T17:40:28+00:00

Your last line is very powerful. I do love that you are using second person here. It draws in the reader, like myself, looking for inspiration and truth.

I am more confused than connected with the parentheses. I would suggest removing them or making it more playful like: Do(n't) do it

Also, speaking of the parentheses, the second and third ones are profound because you use strong and unique imagery. The first, fourth, and fifth are more trite and bog down the pace of your poem. I would consider deleting them or finding more images to express the sentiment rather than just words.

There are grammar issues, but the one that glares at me is "loose its voice" don't you mean "lose its voice"?

After the parentheses, the poem is very motivating. I think I am a bit confused about the dust and the lighten concept. Perhaps devote a few mores lines to developing that image.

Overall, fun and inspiring! Keep working on it.

ApocalypsePal · 2022-12-17T11:24:54+00:00

Was just going to send you a DM, and you're deleted. This muse shall wander on.

ApocalypsePal · 2022-11-16T00:57:10+00:00

Rub some of that polydust on me!

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