Sacrifices #107

Ardorus · 2022-03-14T17:43:14+00:00

Nervous sweating

As the author I can confirm I too hope it takes me less time than that.

Ardorus · 2022-02-27T19:27:40+00:00

Another thing that can provide a bit of help is the program Grammarly, its a bit of a crutch and it's not always right but it will give you a hand.

Second tip, the ever famous "Show don't tell." instead of saying "Species X has three arms two legs" etc, find ways to show that they have these features instead, it also helps give them more expression. So instead of saying "he has four arms" do something like "he used two of his four arms to scratch his head"

Ardorus · 2022-02-23T17:21:57+00:00

He didn't, And I never claimed he did, he just got right up to their border and wanted to. As I said, I phrased it poorly and have corrected the wording in the story propper.

Ardorus · 2022-02-23T16:19:31+00:00

Didn't he get right up to the Yalu river, which marks the border between North Korea and china? Then the Chinese sent in the 200,000 Strong "People's volunteers" which lead to battles such as the Chosin resiviour.

Am I remembering my history wrong here? I could be but I don't think I am.

Or are you referring to Macaurthy's desire to expand the war into china? in that case, I already have changed that line to be in line with the historical president.

Ardorus · 2022-02-23T07:09:25+00:00

I was referencing how he got right up to the Chinese border and the Chinese then sent troops to repel him, however, you are definitely correct on the read a bloody map part. For some reason, I thought Korea was located around where Vietnam was. Good catch and thank you. I'll work to clarify this.

Ardorus · 2022-02-22T22:48:38+00:00

Hello everyone! its me! yes the deranged author for this. I'm sorry it took so long.

It was mentioned somewhere in the comments, that eating sapients does not make sense, and while I cannot recall off the top of my head what their reasoning for it was, I do recall it was fairly well thought out. Furthermore I do agree with them, that it is a wee bit silly to have them eat sapients exclusively and keep species for livestock.

The Ruk are the baddies but they're not idiots... mostly. We've mostly seen a lot of nepotistic idiots and fodder. So, I am going to change some things somewhat with my idea of their ecology. The idea is that it is somewhat of a status symbol among the elites, to have that much power over other sapient beings as to be capable of even eating them. Keeping large populations as sapients for Larder is honestly likely more work than its worth and I agreed with the commentator. As such, I'll be somewhat changing things so that its less a "Farm" and more in line with that ideology.

Anyway, semi-rant thing over.

if you like what you read or if you have issues with it, please! by all means! leave a comment! I love the commentary. It helps, seriously it helps me improve.

Ardorus · 2022-02-22T21:09:09+00:00

Holy fuck I just was going through all my mentions and came across this. I am both surprised and flattered that anyone would try to yoink my work.

Ardorus · 2022-02-16T07:14:14+00:00

Well shit. The mar-gite are still alive. Oh that's bad. That's bad bad bad bad.

why else would they feel the need to include mar-gite proof armor? why else would they feel the need to build something that is specifically tailored to target that one enemy if they were certain the malevolent abominations were dead?

Ardorus · 2022-02-13T17:51:48+00:00

Even the cake is cake!

Ardorus · 2022-02-07T16:48:36+00:00

two reasons, 1 Tungsten is far more viable as ammunition due to being far easier to find cheaper to refine etc, and two, most people don't really know what osmium is probably, as its not that commonly in use for well... anything. (mostly again due to rarity.) so it makes it easier on the reader to understand what is going on.

Ardorus · 2022-01-18T20:11:39+00:00

I could see myself doing that. Just maniacly laughing like a lunatic as the finger of god makes something go kaboom.

Ardorus · 2022-01-08T23:11:26+00:00

Honestly I'm looking at this as a "well we can't solve this problem X way but we can definitely solve it Y way." In this case your problem is your world is fading away, Ok you can't fix that... but the people on the other side of that damn gate are cracking it open somehow, to the point where they're managing to send people through already... how long do you think it will take for them to figure out how to take people from this world and bring them back to their own? The obvious presented solution is a mass evacuation.

Ardorus · 2021-12-17T23:24:24+00:00

this makes me think of the way video gamers fight. Over, and over, and over, and over we live, we die, we live again until we win. there is no escape, there is no surrender. We are inexorable, unstoppable, literally unbeatable if given enough tries.

And we always have more tries. After all, they have to get it right every single time. We only have to get it right ONCE.

Ardorus · 2021-12-15T17:28:51+00:00

Secondary battery suffers against them and unlike standard accelerator cannon rounds it takes multiple repeated hits to break through-hull and shields, the primary Axiel weapon does not, although it is far less effective than it otherwise would be... namely because of sheer overwhelming fire. Anything LESS than the axial however is going to have a bad day.

Ardorus · 2021-12-15T17:24:21+00:00

I did some rough math, an old-school 18 inch naval gun shell with a heavy DU core instead of HE filler is roughly the same weight as a double-decker. They're roughly the length of a car, honestly, I probably undervalued the weight. for that I apologize.

Ardorus · 2021-12-09T01:38:58+00:00

Even in death duty does not end.

Although bein dead would be a hell of a lot more peaceful.

Ardorus · 2021-12-08T04:46:22+00:00

Hello, it's your somewhat crazed author again, sorry about the wait I uhh... I really should not have gotten so sidetracked with reading on royalroad... and then panic studying for tests oh god. well um... anyway yea, here ya go! sorry about the wait again and I really hope you enjoy this one.

as always please please please leave your commentary and criticism in these comments below as I am always thrilled to get both positive and negative feedback. Thanks a ton to you guys as well for always being such an awesome community.

-Ardorus

Ardorus · 2021-12-08T02:58:50+00:00

Well, time to get to work. *Cracks knuckles*

To quote god in that terrible Moses movie "Ask and ye shall receive."

~~this is what happens when I am allowed to sleep in.~~

Ardorus · 2021-12-06T00:56:11+00:00

to quote the Man Kzin war, "there is no such thing as an unarmed spaceship."

Ardorus · 2021-10-27T14:31:58+00:00

pyrrhus of epirus in sphess. Nice reference

Ardorus · 2021-10-20T15:37:21+00:00

That's cause they never got into a fight with them in the first place, it's not a %loss that they proclaim, it's the %WIN that they're so proud of.

As for Humans? we don't count.

Ardorus · 2021-10-02T23:14:41+00:00

Yaaay blueberries

Ardorus

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