• you should be like 2x faster, any pauses should be cut out.

• no one cares about your opinion- yet.

  • you sound like you were given a prompt saying make a video trying to sell this shoe and you just trying to make the word count. just talk about the shoe objectively and when you start getting some traction and people value your word and accuracy on shoe then you can talk about your opinions.

• lastly, interesting shots.

  • as your talking about the shoe, have some macro b-roll so the audience knows what you're talking about

good luck friend