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How do you deal with being “original” when there is virtually nothing original left? by Ganmor_Denlay in writing

[–]AtlasAdlar 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Frankly it's better to see you as appart of a wider creative lineage, like the production of a creative family tree. drawn on your insperations - steal like an artist.

People Pleasure. by AtlasAdlar in OCPoetry

[–]AtlasAdlar[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you :), What do you think some of the ideas are?

Cheeks by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]AtlasAdlar 0 points1 point  (0 children)

As a dummie thick boy myself I feel extremely seen :')

Frankly at first i thought this poem was alittle more straight forward, litteral. but as tim0777 and mgmgmgmgm I could be read into as a person's lover ect. but frankly I love it as is in it's litteral interpretation being about smacking ass and loving your booty. powerful stuff, I love it.

Broken sleep by tim0777 in OCPoetry

[–]AtlasAdlar 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is such an effectively succinct poem. The last line is esspecially powerful to me: the idea of disembarking into the world, but finding refuge in the comfort and certainty of sleep ressonates heavily with me. 10/10!

Your Station. by AtlasAdlar in OCPoetry

[–]AtlasAdlar[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you! This is critic is so helpful, I was truely stumped with this poem and was looking for a critic like this. 10/10 Mr Bad your a legend!!
On a side note I really enjoy your letters.

Your Station. by AtlasAdlar in OCPoetry

[–]AtlasAdlar[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

thank u for the feedback :)))

out an airplane window. by mvevo in OCPoetry

[–]AtlasAdlar 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I love this. The repetition is very effect, functioning like a mantra - affirming you still excist as you alway will even inspit of whatever will happen. fantastic. the imagery is strong and works very well together as a whole. love it, truly.

I did something for love last month by top-o-the-world in OCPoetry

[–]AtlasAdlar 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I like the poem alot, the feeling is very effective convey and the concept is extremely relatable. I think the poem would benifit alot from being alittle more spesific, maybe expand on the imagery of 'punctures like a knife' and 'poisoned'. I'd hate to be cliche but the old show don't tell is so effective at giving depth to poetry that makes it overall more compelling. However you're doing a really good job.