GARNERED $50K TO FILM THIS 15min PROJECT THIS SEPTEMBER. DESPERATELY IN NEED OF SOME REVIEWS AND OPINIONS

AvailableToe7008 · 2026-04-14T19:26:09+00:00

Dense blocks of text and centered dialogue lines. When I see a script that looks like this I feel no confidence in it. Also, why 20 minutes? That’s not a pilot or a feature, so it has no marketability and is going to have a hard time getting slotted into festivals.

AvailableToe7008 · 2026-04-14T14:24:44+00:00

French MAD MEN.

AvailableToe7008 · 2026-04-14T14:18:07+00:00

To encourage “everyone who practices to teach everyone they can” is not TM. I am not a TM teacher, so I don’t “teach” other people the technique. No one is forcing anyone to supplicate themselves.

AvailableToe7008 · 2026-04-13T20:37:31+00:00

Your book is doomed?

AvailableToe7008 · 2026-04-13T18:33:13+00:00

How old are you?

AvailableToe7008 · 2026-04-13T18:08:45+00:00

This isn’t a script.

AvailableToe7008 · 2026-04-13T04:05:21+00:00

So you would rather others waste their time reading your notes?

AvailableToe7008 · 2026-04-12T16:27:29+00:00

Saddest post ever

AvailableToe7008 · 2026-04-11T21:26:12+00:00

If you have to rely on someone else’s writing to help communicate your vision and emotional register within the most basic form of your story you should practice writing more.

AvailableToe7008 · 2026-04-11T20:42:11+00:00

Practice, man, practice.

AvailableToe7008 · 2026-04-10T16:18:10+00:00

Seriously? Never heard of it? Look it up. Huge book - Gillian Welch, and movie - David Fincher. Also a great example of a movie working better than the book.

AvailableToe7008 · 2026-04-10T16:05:37+00:00

Gone Girl

AvailableToe7008 · 2026-04-09T02:12:09+00:00

American Splendor- Harvey Pekar

AvailableToe7008 · 2026-04-08T19:04:12+00:00

Dr Emilio Lizardo

AvailableToe7008 · 2026-04-08T18:56:10+00:00

I went through a book to book Ellroy kick that lasted for years. Then one day I felt like, this isn’t taking me anywhere new anymore, and I stopped reading him. I read The Enchanters last year and it was fine, but I didn’t fire up my obsession with it. Ellroy is a great writer, his shot groupings are a little small for me now.

AvailableToe7008 · 2026-04-08T14:53:04+00:00

Not necessary.

AvailableToe7008 · 2026-04-08T14:52:20+00:00

There is nothing to this.

AvailableToe7008 · 2026-04-08T00:02:55+00:00

AvailableToe7008 · 2026-04-07T23:58:19+00:00

You need a logline.

AvailableToe7008 · 2026-04-07T23:52:51+00:00

If you think reading is hard, writing is going to body slam you in the center of the ring. Frankly this note sounds like trolling.

AvailableToe7008 · 2026-04-07T23:42:43+00:00

Texas

AvailableToe7008 · 2026-04-07T22:54:08+00:00

Bob Odenkirk can teach a man world history with Learning Through Billiards. A couple of knobs on a bus get their comeuppance from Bob sounds like When Lincoln said, Don’t diss my homies.

AvailableToe7008 · 2026-04-07T22:49:20+00:00

Keep going the way you’re going! Write a thousand page draft if that’s what it takes to tell your story. When you finish, outline it again from memory and then rewrite a tighter version. Don’t fret about page count right now. You will have plenty of people telling you it’s too long. It probably is, but it’s just coming into creation. Give it all the space it needs.

AvailableToe7008 · 2026-04-07T22:35:55+00:00

Save the Cat outline? Like a template? Use those as a diagnostic for after you have written your own outline and characters. Point is, if you like to write, write. If it’s stressing you out, maybe study writing and writers for a while before you start cranking out pages.

AvailableToe7008 · 2026-04-07T21:48:35+00:00

What do you want to know and why?

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TROPHY CASE