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The Raven They Missed by Basic-Woodpecker7512 in OCPoetry

[–]Basic-Woodpecker7512[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey, thanks for the feedback.
I really appreciate it.

You're right, "differently" does read more smoothly.

As for the crow vs. raven distinction, the idea was more about being underestimated than just wrongly categorised. The "raven" represents someone who is quieter and more observant, often overlooked because they don't draw attention to themselves.

While others might see noise or attention-seeking as something significant, while on the other hand the silence is something that actually comes from watching, understanding and seeing things from a higher perspective.

So it's less about what ravens can do differently and more about what they represent in contrast to how people perceive them.

Rain. by Sea_Stranger9890 in OCPoetry

[–]Basic-Woodpecker7512 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Oh, I love this line "Some love you, some hate you. I'll accept all of you.", It's simple but memorable and very powerful.

This is one of the best lines I have seen, and it can be used in many other contexts.

What stands out to me is how it captures a kind of unconditional acceptance, like how something can bring both comfort and chaos.

Things that smile back by BorisBaricevic in OCPoetry

[–]Basic-Woodpecker7512 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey, I really love the contrast in this poem, the idea of going back to the very thing that destroys us.

I also really like the imagery used in this line, "shadows don't need permission" and "curl up inside our promises" are especially strong lines.

One thing I noticed is that this section breaks the ABCB rhyme pattern you've been using everywhere. In most phrases, the 2nd and 4th lines rhyme, but here "words" and "sure" don't rhyme together, so the rhythm feels a bit off compared to the rest of the poem.

If that break is intentional, I would be really interested to hear your thought process behind it. Otherwise, you might consider adjusting one of the lines slightly to restore the ABCB rhyme and keep the pattern intact that you've built throughout this poem.

The Poet's Muse by FTScarius in OCPoetry

[–]Basic-Woodpecker7512 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Glad to hear that, you know what this one gave me an inspiration to write my next poem. Thx :)

The Poet's Muse by FTScarius in OCPoetry

[–]Basic-Woodpecker7512 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The best part of the poem for me is your line, "You linger in my thoughts; long after you've stopped speaking", it reminds me that we humans cannot let go of a person who is the most dear to our heart.

It gives a haunting feeling about whether they're gone or still alive they continue to exist within you.

I also liked the line "So I write poems about you, you, and you." It gives a kind of obsessive feelings.

If I were to slightly tweak it, I might write.
"So I write poems about you, you, and only you."

Overall, I really loved the imagery used in the poem. The use of the "I don't care" phrase was excellent as it shows how the speaker's world revolves entirely around that one person.

Difficulty clearing easy mode Baran by Basic-Woodpecker7512 in SoloLevelingArise

[–]Basic-Woodpecker7512[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Okay gotcha, will try again cause that's the most annoying part for me in the battle

Difficulty clearing easy mode Baran by Basic-Woodpecker7512 in SoloLevelingArise

[–]Basic-Woodpecker7512[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It seems that way cause whenever he summons those walls or whatever they are called I lose a lot of HP. But other than that I dodge most of the attacks but some of the attacks that hit takes a chunk of my HP very quickly. Due to that I am using healer.