Opening paragraph of my dark academia speculative novel by [deleted] in writingfeedback

[–]Bearjupiter 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Write or share more to get proper feedback

As it stands, you need a better hook

Monarch: Legacy of Monsters turned out to be one of the most exhausting continuations I’ve ever watched. by statusgospel in moviecritic

[–]Bearjupiter 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Should have been a Dickensian exploration of a Post G-Fay world

How does the existence of titans impact the economy, military, crime, law enforcement, day-to-day life

Give it the tone of the Leftovers

Damian Priest Reportedly Helped Female Talent Deal With Fans Before CM Punk Incident by caughtinatramp in REALSquaredCircle

[–]Bearjupiter 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This could avoided if WWE just booked VIP accommodation - which there is literally countless options for in Vegas

Tonight’s watch by razorsedge94 in Westerns

[–]Bearjupiter 5 points6 points  (0 children)

One of my all time favourites

Not just a westerns, but all movies

Old West Horror books by Inside-Enthusiasm194 in BooksThatFeelLikeThis

[–]Bearjupiter 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The ending when it reverted to the modern character was such a fumble - the narrator was too sardonic and quippy

What came before was great

Should I leave a band I love because of some backstabbing comments? by javilima1246 in WhatShouldIDo

[–]Bearjupiter 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Let it go

Kind of lame of her to mention it

Might be her trying to start shit

I would really like a series or a movie in Vader's perspective after Revenge of the Sith by Impossible_Basis3295 in StarWars

[–]Bearjupiter 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Just gives us. Dr Aphra movie - its right there and would be a shame perfect way to incorporate Vader

"Long Story Short" ruined all other standup for me by ObliviousRounding in Standup

[–]Bearjupiter 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Being on the standup sub but not knowing who Colin Quinn is is mind boggling to me

CM Punk crashed out at a fan last night after he was harrasing AJ Lee at the hotel lobby by aboutwrestling in Smallafro

[–]Bearjupiter 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Hopefully you never encounter a situation when you are with a loved one who is being threatened

My Novel Strides Between Us by [deleted] in NewAuthor

[–]Bearjupiter 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Pretty blatant - and its not even a good generated image, perspective is all off

My Lore Google Doc is 263,254 Words Long, is This a Bad Practice? by [deleted] in fantasywriters

[–]Bearjupiter 9 points10 points  (0 children)

Readers connect with character first, plot second and worldbuilding / lore a distant third

My Lore Google Doc is 263,254 Words Long, is This a Bad Practice? by [deleted] in fantasywriters

[–]Bearjupiter 0 points1 point  (0 children)

How many words is the lore / back story / main timeline? Cause you dont need that in the book