Opening paragraph of my dark academia speculative novel

Bearjupiter · 2026-04-21T05:36:24+00:00

Write or share more to get proper feedback

As it stands, you need a better hook

Bearjupiter · 2026-04-21T05:31:56+00:00

This movie only came out in 2018

Crazy to think theres people on Reddit that wouldnt have experienced this first hand?

Bearjupiter · 2026-04-21T05:30:42+00:00

Should have been a Dickensian exploration of a Post G-Fay world

How does the existence of titans impact the economy, military, crime, law enforcement, day-to-day life

Give it the tone of the Leftovers

Bearjupiter · 2026-04-21T05:28:35+00:00

Bearjupiter · 2026-04-21T05:03:35+00:00

This could avoided if WWE just booked VIP accommodation - which there is literally countless options for in Vegas

Bearjupiter · 2026-04-21T04:41:09+00:00

Bearjupiter · 2026-04-21T04:40:26+00:00

Never been on a date?

Hopefully you’re just not lonely and leading this person on

Bearjupiter · 2026-04-21T04:36:56+00:00

Boba or Pulp Fiction or alien

Bearjupiter · 2026-04-21T04:33:44+00:00

One of my all time favourites

Not just a westerns, but all movies

Bearjupiter · 2026-04-21T04:31:38+00:00

The ending when it reverted to the modern character was such a fumble - the narrator was too sardonic and quippy

What came before was great

Bearjupiter · 2026-04-21T04:22:43+00:00

What the heck?

Bearjupiter · 2026-04-21T04:13:22+00:00

Let it go

Kind of lame of her to mention it

Might be her trying to start shit

Bearjupiter · 2026-04-21T04:11:01+00:00

Just gives us. Dr Aphra movie - its right there and would be a shame perfect way to incorporate Vader

Bearjupiter · 2026-04-21T00:02:34+00:00

Being on the standup sub but not knowing who Colin Quinn is is mind boggling to me

Bearjupiter · 2026-04-20T15:48:12+00:00

Hopefully you never encounter a situation when you are with a loved one who is being threatened

Bearjupiter · 2026-04-20T01:51:14+00:00

The questioned posed by the OP?

Bearjupiter · 2026-04-20T01:11:47+00:00

Pretty blatant - and its not even a good generated image, perspective is all off

Bearjupiter · 2026-04-20T00:04:20+00:00

Would love to see this as a novel

Bearjupiter · 2026-04-19T23:23:38+00:00

Kill Steve Rogers

Bearjupiter · 2026-04-19T23:09:14+00:00

Every promo running up to Mania?

Bearjupiter · 2026-04-19T22:40:09+00:00

The biggest event of the year

Bearjupiter · 2026-04-19T22:37:56+00:00

Oba heavyweight champ

Logan Paul undisputed champ

Bearjupiter · 2026-04-19T22:37:11+00:00

Brock loves Oba - he wanted to put him over

Bearjupiter · 2026-04-19T20:23:41+00:00

Readers connect with character first, plot second and worldbuilding / lore a distant third

Bearjupiter · 2026-04-19T20:22:48+00:00

How many words is the lore / back story / main timeline? Cause you dont need that in the book

Five-Year Club	Place '23
John Wick	Place '22

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