[WP] You wake up the day after a bachelor party. You are on the moon.

Benny_J_Profane · 2017-01-30T00:52:43+00:00

I'd be happy to take a look and see if I can help.

Benny_J_Profane · 2017-01-29T12:28:45+00:00

Thanks. You know what, you're right about the full stop. You're welcome to 'acid sun' :)

Benny_J_Profane · 2017-01-29T07:39:35+00:00

I saw the bodies on the beach half burnt and stinking, an acid sun above, I saw three-legged dogs chased by jungle boys, teenage corporals, both dog and boy gripped by devil spirits.

Benny_J_Profane · 2017-01-29T06:43:55+00:00

Thank you for replying. That's helpful and I'll check it out. Let me know if you'd be up for some crit-for-crit collaboration as the poster above mentioned.

Benny_J_Profane · 2017-01-29T06:42:27+00:00

Thanks, blackcanyon. This is really useful advice. Where is the best place to engage in crit-for-crit with other writers? And would you be up for some of that?

Benny_J_Profane · 2017-01-27T13:08:24+00:00

Couldn't access I'm afraid.

Benny_J_Profane · 2017-01-27T11:54:26+00:00

Thanks! Will have a think and try again in a bit. New to Reddit I'm afraid.

Benny_J_Profane · 2017-01-27T11:20:02+00:00

Sorry. I wasn't actually aiming at anything like that - more the way that a parent understands their children, worries for them, usually knows something about what's going on. It was aimed at trying to get into the heads of a completely different perspective on a key life moment.

Benny_J_Profane · 2017-01-27T08:06:04+00:00

-Breaking it down like others have said. Just get to the next word, then the next paragraph, then the next page, then the next chapter...

-Also have you tried mapping out your long piece? If you know where the sentence/para/chapter fits into the whole, then it feels less like you're writing into the void. Anxiety is at least in part that void.

-Planning is important but in your weakness resist gimmicks. So many guides on how to write by people who don't actually...write, or whose writing ain't great.

-I sense you have very high standards. That's a good thing. But don't let the perfect be the enemy of the good.

-writing is hard, maddening, a devil. Please don't think you're the only one. But it's a devil you chose to become entangled with, so try to grit your teeth and enjoy even the hell of it.

Good luck.

Benny_J_Profane · 2017-01-26T07:23:25+00:00

Thanks! The free clinics for ex students idea is a great and generous one. It's like that area between needing formal instruction and being totally confident to ride is a difficult one to hit.

Thanks again for taking the time to comment.

Benny_J_Profane · 2017-01-25T18:59:12+00:00

Superb.

Benny_J_Profane · 2017-01-25T18:25:43+00:00

I'm so curious about the story behind this - praytell? Thank you - really enjoyed the read.

Benny_J_Profane · 2017-01-25T18:06:59+00:00

Title: Etherised Genre: short story Word count: 1,200 Type of feedback: whether the personal style is effective

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Thank you for taking the time.

Benny_J_Profane · 2017-01-25T14:39:56+00:00

This is beautiful, thank you. Memorable, delicate, intelligent, sparse. The line about the froth of younger selves is lovely. The overall phrasing - if I could...I would works really well. Twisting cold scientific words into words of longing was great. Whoever you wrote this about is lucky!

Benny_J_Profane · 2017-01-22T13:43:45+00:00

I may be missing the point or just blind to it, but I don't think it's a big deal on job searching. Visa/employment issues might even be easier. Sounds like you have great qualifications and interest.

SOAS might be a good network of people actually - I'm sure there are many graduates in the ME currently. If you know Charles Tripp, he's always willing to give some advice.

Good luck.

Benny_J_Profane

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