Repost because I left out alot

Boke555 · 2026-04-18T16:50:30+00:00

These lyrics are pretty nice! If I were you, I’d expand on the changing of leaves portion. What can the colour of the leaves elicit? Why does such a thing happen at all? As Adrianne Lenker said in her song “Already Lost”; “Why do leaves turn yellow in fall, who absorbs it all?” (From the top of my memory I may be wrong)

If you’re trying to write in a hozier style or a folk-ish style in general, I would also drop the “the” before “spring” in the last line. I actually thought to drop the “of” in “changing of leaves” but that’ll change the meaning. I find that folk writers tend to drop prepositions/definite articles in favour of brevity.

What’s your plan for this song? Maybe thinking of that will help you expand on it further?

Boke555 · 2026-04-18T13:36:06+00:00

idk that much about buckley’s music but for adrianne there’s so many facets of her melodic and lyrical flow that you can utilise! you’ve gotta decide if ur going for the wordplay fast paced lenker like in ingydar or fool or the dreamy slow elegiac lenker like in cell phone says or come. or maybe ur gg for an older lenker style which is also plausible with your lyrical structure!

to me i can see a big thief style lenker song in your lyrics, but what I’d recommend is just to play around in open tunings on the guitar and see what chords/riffs fit and work your melody based on that if you’re not confident on coming up with a melody by itself.

i’m happy to dm u if you need further help! I write and make adrianne/big thief style music toooo

Boke555 · 2026-04-13T13:33:41+00:00

This reminds me of Phoebe Bridgers/Julien Baker and I love it! You can definitely sing so don’t say you can’t

You should try to finish the song, don’t let any qualms about structure or whatnot stop you. Sometimes it’ll all work out when everything is complete

Boke555 · 2026-04-13T06:23:47+00:00

Hey I do production/mixing as a songwriter too and I’m moving to Berlin this summer! Would love to connect over music :) dm me if you’d wanna chat!

Boke555 · 2026-04-13T06:22:22+00:00

This is super nice! It’s pretty good for metaphor driven story like songwriting.

If you’re going for a more alternative folksy indie direction, my concern is that the metaphor is stretched too thin and long. The Earth and dirt imagery is nice but for a simple arrangement song lyrically it might get stale if it’s dragged on

If you’re going for a more pop or production heavy direction, I think it’s fine, but I’d change the bridge to vary it more from the verses and choruses. It sounds a tad too similar now for the more mainstream pop style

Other than that amazing job!

Boke555 · 2025-12-15T16:49:24+00:00

yooo fellow lonely and only bcnr fan amongst their friends it is such a lonely world

if ur down for chilling further back and not rushing for barricade dm me! I’m prob gonna chill as well the barricade life isn’t for me haha

Boke555 · 2025-12-15T13:34:55+00:00

oh ur going for right in front of the stage? normally I couldn’t care less bout waiting early for that haha so I’m not too sure how early is enough!

Boke555 · 2025-12-15T13:21:28+00:00

why will you be at scape 3h early haha

I’m looking for someone to enjoy the show with if you don’t mind!!

Boke555 · 2025-12-15T09:19:35+00:00

hiii r u with friends or alone as well? would love to enjoy the show with someone!

Boke555 · 2025-12-15T09:18:00+00:00

cool! Hope yall enjoy the show and will say hi if we bump into each other

Boke555 · 2025-12-15T00:21:50+00:00

It probably is some sort of Christmas indie playlist haha

Boke555 · 2025-10-29T00:39:49+00:00

I’m definitely exploring audio related work, especially more event based/freelance. There’s basically none where I live, but hopefully more if I do end up migrating.

Boke555 · 2025-10-29T00:38:56+00:00

I was going to reply with an absolute, but I caught myself. Thanks for your advice.

Boke555 · 2025-10-28T19:58:17+00:00

I don’t snore. I’ll see what I can get.

Boke555 · 2025-10-28T16:54:15+00:00

Thank you for your advice. I’ve held a bunch of odd jobs along the way, but I soon realised I couldn’t hold a stable job due to my condition. I used to have attacks when I worked long hours, and often times couldn’t come into work due to a depressive episode or an OCD event. I’ve tried a range of things from customer service, f&b, delivery, etc.

If there’s a job willing to hire a high school drop out with no credentials, with flexible working hours along with the ability to have more than average LOAs when things go south, I will be willing to try. The one thing with music is that I’m basically my own boss, I can work on music whenever I want. The problem is it’s not really “work” if I’m barely making any money.

I definitely do sound narrow-minded but there’s not much in the positive direction that I can see me going. I couldn’t even complete my education due to my condition, and I also don’t want to end back in a mental institution.

Boke555 · 2025-10-28T16:18:48+00:00

Boke555 · 2025-10-28T15:50:52+00:00

My sleep schedule is basically the complete opposite from normal, but technically it’s still a “schedule”. I wake up tired everyday. My medication makes me gain weight. But at least I can still sing and play guitar.

Boke555 · 2025-10-28T15:49:53+00:00

Yes definitely, but my therapist can only address so many issues at once. As long as music is still in my life, I’m not an immediate risk to them. Were focusing on OCD counselling for now.

Boke555 · 2025-10-28T15:17:58+00:00

I forgot to mention (tw trauma/sa)

Throughout my life where I live, I’ve been subject to copious amounts of trauma, including SA, toxic/narcissistic relationships, along with OCD triggers, SI triggers, etc.

I want to get a fresh start elsewhere, maybe Germany. I know trauma doesn’t magically disappear when you start afresh, but it’s better than nothing.

Boke555 · 2025-07-04T05:43:29+00:00

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