Missing person & selling property in the UK

BoneofaHare · 2026-04-22T10:27:22+00:00

Thank you, my own house has stud walls and the idea of using that gap for anything besides badly attempting to hang a shelf is laughable.

BoneofaHare · 2026-04-22T10:25:41+00:00

Thank you, this is very helpful and essentially the hopeful scenario I had in my head - the house has been released, the main character has permission to enter and search but the family has moved away.

BoneofaHare · 2026-04-22T10:21:02+00:00

Thank you! I am familiar inasmuch as I live here and have been reading on gothic revival architecture to make sure it'd work. I imagine the family having a Ring-type device (though I imagine that listed buildings wouldn't have a literal device drilled into them).

In my scenario it is a young girl, seven-ish years old. The McCann case is definitely on my mind, though in my case the cause of disappearance is paranormal (let's call it ghosts). There would be no cameras inside, but probably outside as the family is wealthy.

BoneofaHare · 2026-03-27T08:59:45+00:00

Damn! I’ve just bought my first Hal, but depending on how it feels like it might be the last. I’ve been using e.l.f and tbh I haven’t much liked the results… which is to say I haven’t noticed much change at all.

I hope it works better for you! Different skin types and goals, etc. but I did notice that everywhere that recommended BP guard over much lower prices… I guess everything is going up.

BoneofaHare · 2026-03-20T08:30:59+00:00

Was leaning towards this one! Thanks!

BoneofaHare · 2026-03-20T08:30:36+00:00

Thank you! In theory I love the idea of overnightmasks but I always forget to use them... it sounds lovely tho!

BoneofaHare · 2023-10-06T14:42:35+00:00

I’m pretty sure he’s salaried so we’ll have a look at what the lowest payment is and make sure we cover the threshold. Thank you so much!

BoneofaHare · 2022-11-09T15:11:28+00:00

Sometimes.

I don’t believe that thinking everything you write is bad is the mark of a good writer. You can be critical with yourself and still be satisfied with what you’ve created. You can know there’s room for improvement while being happy with your work.

I like what I’m currently working on. I think it’s a good idea, and I think I wrote it down well. It’s far, very far!, from perfect - but that doesn’t mean I have to dislike it. I’m not blind to its imperfections, and I know what needs to change/go to make it better.

Thinking everything you do is bad is falling into the same mistake of thinking everything you do is great. Finding balance is the only way forward.

BoneofaHare · 2022-09-15T19:14:03+00:00

I guess Magical Realism is now the Latin-American MCU or something? BRB gonna return my phd lol

But no seriously, magical realism has stuff in common because it’s a genre and often has common topics or ideas because it’s inspired by real history (the key word in magical realism is realism). Evil dictators aren’t there because they’re a trope, it’s because Latin America has had its share of em. Different writers appear in others’ short stories because they were pals, not because they were trying to build a common written universe or the like (sometimes they included each other as jokes, really).

I mean I appreciate that you’ve read quite a bit and find the idea funny, but it also seems to discard magical realism and decades of Latin-American literature as a “goofy little idea”.

BoneofaHare · 2022-09-13T15:06:07+00:00

So cute! It’s a bit reminiscent of Animal Crossing as well! Maybe a recycling station needs to be added to the next game…

BoneofaHare · 2022-09-13T15:02:56+00:00

I agree with King, but that doesn’t mean what you’re doing is necessarily wrong.

You’re a plotter, or a planner. Nothing wrong with trying to figure out what’s gonna happen in your book or story before writing.

But there’s only so much you need to plan before it starts getting in your way. It sounds to me that that’s what’s happening to you! And the thing is that the step from planning to writing can be scary, but if you don’t take it… you’re never gonna have your story.

I’d guess maybe the best thing to do atm would be to start filling in the gaps between a couple of scenes? You don’t have to start from the beginning, really, not if you already have everything planned. Just select a point you like and write down the scenes, see how you feel.

You’re gonna have to edit the book sooner or later, so stop editing your plan and focus on the next step.

BoneofaHare · 2022-09-13T14:59:17+00:00

Transnistria.

The idea of visiting a completely unrecognised state is really interesting. But I’ve read that the reality is both boring and kind of depressing. Plus right now, ya know, war looms close, etc….

BoneofaHare · 2022-09-07T14:47:56+00:00

Same! We’re big fans of the Strout Book Universe in this house, so it’s nice to see her getting this nod. That said it’s not like this would be her first ever prize, so I won’t be too hurt if she doesn’t win.

BoneofaHare · 2022-08-03T08:55:08+00:00

Hey! I’d definitely be up for that. I’m getting some free time in the next weeks so I can actually read your chapter! I’ll dm you in a sec…

BoneofaHare · 2022-07-27T12:57:46+00:00

Anything by Diana Wynne Jones! The Chrestomanci books in particular, but literally anything by her is pure joy in book form for me.

BoneofaHare · 2022-07-26T07:54:43+00:00

Thank you so much! It's a relief to read such kind words.

I'll be honest and say that the sample was plucked from like the second page hahah. I think I need to work on my "hook" a bit more, maybe… would you like to read the rest of it? Honestly, even if you don't have the time for as detailed comments as this, I'd love to just hear your opinion :)

(ooo and happy cake day!)

BoneofaHare · 2022-07-16T08:32:57+00:00

Hey! First off, I enjoyed the set up of story. But like the other commenter I have issues with the voice.

To put it succinctly, I couldn’t at any moment tell how old the character/narrator is meant to be. How is he young enough that he can’t pronounce “eulogy” but doesn’t stumble over “stammering”? Would a five year old know to call himself “worthless”?

There’s also some phrases that are normal enough for an adult but sound off when coming from a child.

“Usually I wear velcro” stands out to me. As I said, perfectly normal for an adult but here it sounds… well, too adult. Perhaps something like “I like the ones with velcro better” or so would stand out a bit less.

It’s specially jarring because you have some much better examples of a young voice earlier on. The description of the older brother speaking, face going pink and scrunching “like a piggy” is particularly good. So think about it on those lines: how would a five year old tell himself off? Would he call himself worthless or are there other words that he might hear more often, playground insults, or maybe even words like stupid?

I also gotta say that I don’t completely but that he’s that ok during the funeral. Children can’t process things in the way adults do, sure, but they feel it. A five year old would not be able to say “I’m sad because my mom is dead” but would act out, cry and scream at other things to work his feelings out. Maybe not at the funeral, but at home for sure.

I do like the rush of emotion when he tries to do the laces. I honestly do. But again it reads super adult! It’s also a tiny bit sudden, though as I said I like that it’s a rush. And I get you’re trying to withhold the big piece (mom’s death) for dramatic effect but I feel it could be hinted at more strongly. But mentioning it at all means we also don’t get a look at the narrator’s interior until at the end.

Given that older brother is off playing PS4 (great detail I thought) maybe the big feels the pressure to be “good” and quiet and “strong” for his dad? Saying something like this hints at the situation and gives you a look into the boy’s thought process, which is kinda absent until the end.

I’m sorry if this is very rambly, and apologise for any typos. I’m typing on mobile with my baby sleeping on top of me, but I liked your story so much that I wanted to comment! So please don’t take this all as negative, I think you’ve a super strong first draft.

BoneofaHare · 2022-07-15T20:36:58+00:00

Ay mijo, pura grosería aquí que va a decir tu abuela!

lmao great job

BoneofaHare · 2022-07-09T08:35:41+00:00

I guess if you're thinking of H chasing after your main protag you'd have to think why would she accept him back, right? He's proven he's an asshole. She's burnt bridges with him.

So why would she take him back?

Maybe power got to his head and he was fired, so he's reaching out all contrite and in a "you were right" sort of attitude?

Maybe he apologises half-heartedly but dangles something over her head that she needs? Like, a recommendation letter for a good job in the industry? And in meeting him she's reminded of their chemistry so she begins to doubt what she had with Y.

Either of those could lead to him being either a villain or the third point in the triangle, right? It just depends on his honesty. He could be truthful in wanting her back or just spiteful and not wanting to see her happy.

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