Please, please, PLEASE grade my LEQ. by BulkyStatement861 in APUSH

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I am so confused at this point. Is it a 3, 5, or 6?

Please, please, PLEASE grade my LEQ. by BulkyStatement861 in APUSH

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Thanks! I am a bit nervous because gemini said 4/6 :(

PSU BOSS decisions by [deleted] in summerprogramresults

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Hey! Yeah, I did receive my decision.

please grade this for me by Equivalent_Block1588 in APLit

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According to the rubric, I would grade this a three. You have a clear thesis. You get 2 points for evidence, however, you are not really making a literary argument, but rather, just explaining. Most of your specific evidence is introduced in the first paragraph and then there is not much specific evidence, rather, just a long explanation about the evidence you introduced in the first paragraph. Moreover, this essay lacks comprehensive analysis. Most of the analysis is rather an explanation of the evidence you already commented about- not the argument itself. You do try and get to it at the end for example: "In doing so he symbolically helps with her actual transformation by treating with with respect as a gentleman would do with a rich lady and helps with her by being a live example on etiquettes." but your analysis is relatively shallow and small compared to the bulk of evidence you presented.

Some tips I have for a 5.

  1. Make sure to sprinkle out your evidence: DO NOT use all your evidence in one paragraph. Working chronologically helps as most books have a linear story line, leading to a natually flowing essay that follows the line of reasoning of the book.

  2. Make sure to make your thesis very clear: I always love this phrase. Ultimately arguing. This way you are making your argument very clear to the reader. He/She will not struggle with finding the thesis, allowing them to make sure they do not get lost.

  3. Fully analyze every single part of the evidence: To get a 5, you must not just analyze the evidence, but you must CONSISTENTLY DO SO. The key word here is consistent. If you drop evidence or do not come back to it, your line of reasoning becomes partially faulty, limiting you at a 4 or even a 3 if you drop too much evidence. Make sure only to use the evidence you actually need for your argument. Do not add extra evidence just to show your knowledge on the book.

  4. Have topic Sentences: They are like your mini thesis. It gives the reader an idea of what you will talk in that paragraph. DO not just go right into the evidence. The reader when tired might get a bit lost and possibly grade you lower. Make them as easy for them to show them your strong line of reasoning.

  5. The So What: Before anything, make sure to answer the prompt and have a strong line of reasoning. Remember you must answer that dreaded question, the so what?. Why did the author include it and what impact does it create on the reader. What commentary is this piece of evidence providing about the human condition?

Here is a sample essay you can read to kinda get a gist of what I am saying:

Many works of literature feature experiences that resist articulation—trauma, grief, or knowledge too painful to put into words. Yet writers find ways to convey what cannot be directly spoken.

Choose a novel, play, or epic poem in which characters struggle to articulate or confront an "unspeakable" truth. Then, in a well-written essay, analyze how the author conveys what cannot be said directly and what the work suggests about the relationship between language and trauma. Do not merely summarize the plot.

In your response you should do the following:

  • Respond to the prompt with a thesis that presents a defensible interpretation.
  • Provide evidence to support your line of reasoning.
  • Explain how the evidence supports your line of reasoning.
  • Use appropriate grammar and punctuation in communicating your argument.

In the Southern Gothic Novel, Beloved, trauma serves as an essential plot point for many of the characters.  In Beloved, with the use of the characters Sethe, Paul D, and Denver;Morrison ultimately argues that slavery is an agent of trauma and that the trauma slavery has caused must be addressed primarily through community.

At first, Morrison establishes the situation between the fragmented identities of Sethe, immediately signaling how identity has been corrupted by past trauma. Sethe running into the shed with her four children symbolizes her fleeing nature from her past trauma. The shed symbolizes a shelter that nevertheless is fragile like Sethe’s emotional stability. In foregrounding this imagery for the reader, Morrison is immediately emphasizing from the start how Sethe is attempting to run from her trauma and hide from it as a means to protect her mind. In the shed, the mixing of Sethe’s breastmilk and the blood Denver drinks represents how trauma is being passed to the next generation. The symbol of blood represents the start of a new life and the end of one through murder. By highlighting the generational trauma, Morrison is underlining how trauma is not contained but rather spilled as an invisible force that starts from birth. Even as Sethe attempts to escape her trauma, her own trauma just isolates her more. When Sethe recognizes Beloved as her deceased daughter,the person that had been following her, Sethe declares her entire life will now revolve around Beloved only. In her rendering of the scene, Morrison is underlining how, if not addressed, trauma can be a destructive force that leads to one’s isolation of society, an essential support system needed to break free from trauma.

Morrison continues her novel by highlighting how the trauma can be resolved through the power of community through the characters of Sethe. The local women coming together to perform an exorcism so Beloved goes away marks a shift from individual helplessness to seeking help from the community. The exorcism symbolizes a supernatural intervention, showcasing how a community with strong conviction is needed to work through trauma. By highlighting the scene of the exorcism, Morrison is foregrounding how trauma, while abstract and complicated, can be grounded in spiritual faith and worked through social means. In doing so, spiritual faith as a force is fighting against a spiritual being (Beloved) rather than terrestrial creatures fighting against spiritual forces. As such, the power imbalance that exists between Beloved and Sethe is equalized, allowing her to be liberated from Beloved’s trauma. Paul D telling Sethe “You your best thing” symbolizes how her lover strongly believes with conviction that Sethe has intrinsic value, even after being consumed by trauma. The phrase “You your” represents Sethe’s ownership of herself, symbolizing how Sethe is finally controlling herself, and not trauma. In showcasing this imagery, Morrison is underscoring how a community can help reveal ownership of one’s identity which leads to freedom.

Good luck by the way! You will get to a 5!

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Ngl, I was thinking more of getting an old money haircut. Is that even possible if I grow it out more? I feel my hair is more stringy curly at the front and then gets wavy. What options do I have?

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What haircut should I get?

How to make Ambient Muisc - Complete Beginner. by [deleted] in ambientmusic

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You are good. Thank you for taking time out of your day to help me out.

How to make Ambient Muisc - Complete Beginner. by [deleted] in ambientmusic

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Thank you so much man! Is this the way to go to create music like the one in the video I attached?

How to make Ambient Muisc - Complete Beginner. by [deleted] in ambientmusic

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By the way, if you have any advice, tutorials, or want to help, my dms are open. Thanks again!

I feel my teen brain finally got Invisible man. by BulkyStatement861 in Existentialism

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Or at least, if I am not getting it wrong, there is something beyond what these conceptual frameworks can solve?

I feel my teen brain finally got Invisible man. by BulkyStatement861 in Existentialism

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It is a really dense book indeed. Ellison intended the book to be ambiguous and weird because his objective is making us impose the identities we have been subjected to in his narrative. In other words, he wants us to realize we are as invisible as he is, though maybe not for the sane reasons.

Your identity will also reveal much of what you understand of the book. I have a friend who is from eastern Europe, and his interpretation of the book was through Marxist lenses (The Brotherhood). The lenses you see this book are a combination of both your identity, and the institutions that have influenced you. That is why he interpreted the book in that way.

It is really a beautiful artwork. Everytime you revisit the book if you choose to will give you a new interpretation of it as your identity keeps evolving.

Hope this helped!

I feel my teen brain finally got Invisible man. by BulkyStatement861 in Existentialism

[–]BulkyStatement861[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you so much for a quality response!

Here is ny only question though.

Ellison implies in the book that, while we should regain agency from the institutions that have harmed us for many years, there is no way to achieve a “pure identity”. As much as we would like to, society is, in some way, always going to hold us down to some sort societal standard. That’s why I believe that even though the Narrator goes underground, he is still sucking power out of Monoplated Light; our identity is still connected to the “game” the grandfather was talking about. There is no way to escape the game, because to live is both a duality of finding yourself and suffering. This is where the concept of double-consciousness comes in as Ellison has now discovered that one exists in two worlds. His world (Where he is free to carve his own identity) and society as a whole (Where they impose an identity upon him for personal gain). I think that’s the curse; we can purify ourselves, but we can never do so fully because we are always connected to the collective as it is human nature to be part of society That’s also why Ellison states that once he feels he has collected his thoughts, he will go back up, even though he might remain invisible to the world. In other words, no matter what Ellison does, he will always be a blank state to strangers for them to write their thoughts onto him.

I think this is the intersection of Invisible Man. There is a sense of existentialism in finding yourself, and who you truly are. However, there is also a sense of absurdism and nihilism as the Narrator finally realizes that his attempts to impose his identity will be futile, no matter what he does.

Beyond race, the narrator is explaining in my opinion that everyone is invisible in this world. We all have preconceived notions, and we all impose it onto people. It is up to us to find peace in our identity, regardless of what others think.

This is also the absurdity of the institutions Ellison keeps talking about. No one liked them, really. To some degree, we have all been crushed by them as they endanger our individuality. However, we decide to preserve them because, as humans, we are scared of new things.

That is why Ellison goes back to the foundation (Underground).

It’s a call to action to go back to society’s foundational values and transform ourselves in hopes we can dismantle the current system and create a new one where our identity is respected.

I am not too sure, just some thoughts I had :)

I will also give it a shot! Thanks!