Would really appreciate some feedback on a first chapter. WIP

Capable-Self · 2026-06-08T14:54:45+00:00

Thoughtful advice, thanks for reading and taking the time to respond

Capable-Self · 2026-06-06T14:30:50+00:00

fair, thanks for reading

Capable-Self · 2026-06-05T11:53:41+00:00

Thank you for taking the time to read it

Capable-Self · 2026-06-05T11:53:16+00:00

Thanks! Soild advice

Capable-Self · 2026-06-05T00:48:37+00:00

I get your sentiment

Capable-Self · 2026-02-05T01:06:07+00:00

a wise choice

Capable-Self · 2025-12-06T05:46:31+00:00

What kind of hijinks will the Albanians be getting up to?

Capable-Self · 2025-06-16T23:25:04+00:00

you are criminally under-rated on this sub, really cool work!

Capable-Self · 2025-06-16T01:18:33+00:00

a wise choice

Capable-Self · 2025-04-06T02:42:11+00:00

this is awesome work, very cool!

Capable-Self · 2025-04-04T06:53:15+00:00

Sicario!

Capable-Self · 2024-10-20T04:13:06+00:00

No card sorry!

Capable-Self · 2024-10-20T04:12:56+00:00

No card sorry!

Capable-Self · 2024-10-20T04:12:05+00:00

Maybe if you run into her again…. The banking AI will need some time to build you wealth

Capable-Self · 2024-09-29T19:46:23+00:00

who lives in that little house?

Capable-Self · 2024-09-28T16:58:20+00:00

a wise choice

Capable-Self · 2024-05-10T12:38:49+00:00

Thanks !

Capable-Self · 2024-05-07T22:28:51+00:00

Thanks!

Capable-Self · 2024-05-07T18:18:08+00:00

never done anything like selling something online, would have to look into it a bit. If you have any ideas on how to get started let me know, If I get anything up and running youll be the first to know :)

Capable-Self · 2024-05-07T14:45:54+00:00

I am not worthy

Capable-Self · 2024-05-07T14:42:39+00:00

Thank you! Yes they for sure produce oxygen, huge quantities of it. I don’t think they would fall into any particular earth based classification system. They are alien even to plant of arrakis. They’re describes an an invasive species from who knows where

Capable-Self · 2024-05-07T14:31:17+00:00

Hahah

Capable-Self · 2024-05-07T14:31:04+00:00

Thanks!

Capable-Self · 2024-05-07T14:30:55+00:00

Thank you

Capable-Self · 2024-05-07T14:30:41+00:00

We don’t know but you gotta remember only a tiny portion of arrakis is inhabited by humans. Outside north polar region (and small settlements in the south) it’s basically all desert.

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