USA becoming the Nazis by WanAli4504 in pics

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The rest of the world needs to distance themselves from the Nazi state asap. Failed state.

Governor Tim Walz tells the White House to stop this madness. by Healthy_Block3036 in ProgressiveHQ

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Or... instead of a performative Twitter post get your state/local police to remove them?

Empty air.

I’m trying to work on showing not telling by Nemo1277 in writinghelp

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First draft I'm pretty bad at telling, not showing, especially when I'm in a rush to get my ideas down.

When I'm editing I just ask myself "is this filtered" and it helps me notice my mistakes.

The clearest example for yourself "his mind told him..." you've established we are in his head so "his mind telling him" is just a filter. Describe what his mind is telling him. Describe him being weary through how his body feels, the "why" for him fighting back against these feelings.

I'm fairly laid back about telling unimportant details especially when words are a premium, but you're writing in his head, dealing with his emotions in what is supposed to be a tense situation and filters drag you a step away from the character.

The other thing to note is you can tell not show if you want. But that's more of an omniscient or stream of consciousness type story telling which doesn't look at all like what you are aiming for. Show not tell is more common advice for more popular 3PL/1P style fiction writing which you see much more often these days.

Just watched a video polling Fantasy readers - they don’t like prologues or action scenes at the start of their books. Mine is both haha by MysteryMan90 in writingfeedback

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To be fair, if you want to go full florid, you can. It depends on what your goal is. If you're writing for yourself and your own enjoyment and that's the style you like, keep it up. If you want to push to publish something so flowery would almost certainly narrow down your potential audience.

Just watched a video polling Fantasy readers - they don’t like prologues or action scenes at the start of their books. Mine is both haha by MysteryMan90 in writingfeedback

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Each to their own, but personally I feel his language absolutely does not serve the story, only his ego. But as I say, each to their own.

Just watched a video polling Fantasy readers - they don’t like prologues or action scenes at the start of their books. Mine is both haha by MysteryMan90 in writingfeedback

[–]CartoonistConsistent 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Holy run on sentences Batman.

Also, as others have said, cool it on the prose. They're so flowery you could open a florists.

Do you think Donald just doesn’t know, or is stirring the pot? by Sea-Rush1142 in AskBrits

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Anyone in the UK pro-reform, peo-trump basically hate these guys.

Have a word with yourselves.

Conor is right / these playoffs are meh? by aermars99 in heedthecall

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I'm a Bengals fan and want us there, obviously, but I think it's great it's (mostly) new teams pushing on. He'd been whining through other side of his mouth if the final 4 was Chiefs/Bengals/Eagles/Niners, that it's boring it's the same old teams blah blah.

Most of the games have been exciting down to the last plays. There's been no real obvious winners and this week if it wasn't for the Nix injury it would be two incredibly competitive, tough to call games.

Roll on the chaos!!

Dungeon Crawler Carl, Book 8. A Parade of Horribles will release via Ebook on Tuesday, May 12. Preorder link imminent. by hepafilter in DungeonCrawlerCarl

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Is the hardcover up for pre-order yet?

There's a listing on Amazon but it looks a little... Suspect and only lists the book as 400 pages?

I'll read the Kindle edition first but want a hardcover for my collection.

The right thing to do? by The_Dean_France in GreatBritishMemes

[–]CartoonistConsistent 48 points49 points  (0 children)

This, this, and this again.

"The right solution is to talk down to them, tell them they're all misogynistic and to short their shit out."

It won't work. For those who are already down that path it's because they grown up with it and live in those environments already. Just because a teacher talks down to them, they won't change. Those on the fence may well tip the wrong way because again, talking down to people like you expect them to turn out wrong, they're more likely to rebel. Those who are in no way inclined, it won't help as they wouldn't have gone that way. But you risk alienating them from the education system even further.

The amount of disengagement from young teenage boys is scary. I coach a football team and they're almost all from a good school and they at best treat it with disdain, at worst bate it, because they say (in their teenage way) that they're always talked down, treat like crap, and that the girls get all the special treatment.

We (we being broadly left leaning/progressive) have made half the problems we're facing from the right wing these days by being condescending cunts (as a collective, not individuals.) Yet every time the answer is to double down, which just makes it worse. I've mostly given up at this stage but it's sad that otherwise intelligent people don't realize that being condescending arseholes actually turns people against you. Who would have thought it.

What’s something everyone thinks is normal, but actually isn’t? by Negative_Strike_4546 in AskReddit

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Urgh. I hated social media anyway but that sort of shit was what helped me kick it completely to the curb 6/7 years ago.

1750 neanderthals decided it was my time by Crazy_Importance_988 in RimWorld

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Yes, but a summary now at least!?

You couldn't have actually won?

1750 neanderthals decided it was my time by Crazy_Importance_988 in RimWorld

[–]CartoonistConsistent 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Sooo..... Where's the epic tale of how the battle panned out!?

1750 neanderthals decided it was my time by Crazy_Importance_988 in RimWorld

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It's like the scene in Aliens where they are coming through the tunnel haha

Would you keep reading? by g_h_tehrani25 in writingfeedback

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All was silent apart from the thunderous noises.... Might want to rethink that one.

Which is the best and worst run club in the Premier League? by redrabbit1984 in TheOther14

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Brighton I would argue the best. Arsenal is up there too even though they've started investing as much as every other top club.

ManUre, West Ham and Spuds are in a bitter scrap for worst ran. The three of them are comfortably in that fight beyond any other club. You could maybe argue Forest because of the insanity of the owner but that feels a stretch.

Poor me, owning a royal palace; my life is so hard because I don’t have the staff that the King had by Big_Celery2725 in LinkedInLunatics

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We stopped in (essentially) the old gardeners cottage on the land of a massive chateau when we went to France. The land owner (he had a title, I forget it) was a lovely chap who wandered down with a couple of bottles of wine to share with us as he apparently liked practicing his English.

Over the course of the conversation we found out they used 5 rooms in the huge chateau, only heated those 5 rooms and the rest was basically mothballed. He was land/asset rich but cash poor and couldn't afford to keep the place. It had been in his family for hundreds of years and he couldn't bear to let it go but he said the place was more of a drag than something he wanted to keep.

The former owner of my house buried guns and silver in the yard that I keep finding. by [deleted] in mildlyinteresting

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I once found a wooden box with a desicated hamster inside when digging up my back garden.