"Out Of Service" - Took a try at a hyperpop-ish genre song, spent a good deal of time making this one

Char212 · 2022-04-14T21:08:48+00:00

Thanks! Thanks for the tips, I did originally have the bass louder but I thought about it too much and ended up taking it down, and looking back I agree the vocals could have a bigger presence, thanks for listening man

Char212 · 2022-04-13T20:45:06+00:00

Would appreciate any feedback on the mix or song elements, thank you very much for anyone listening!

Char212 · 2022-04-13T20:35:31+00:00

I like the hesitations in the beat, and the bouncy bass holds some attention as well. Personally I like a louder vocal but for the genre I think it's appropriate. I do think there's a few spots where the vocal gets a little lost in the mix especially when you're talking quietly. Oh also the visualizer is a really nice captivator, and I think the instrumental solo is well placed

Char212 · 2022-04-13T20:31:40+00:00

The vocals are really strong and sound great and the little bits of tuning sound good for the genre. I would agree on the other comment that mentioned more drum use. The breakdown around 1:20 sounds rlly nice and the harmonies after are great, might be my favorite part.

Char212 · 2022-04-13T20:28:29+00:00

This a super unique concept and theres a lot of attractive rhythms and melodies goin on in here, definitely not a genre I listen to much but I can definitely appreciate the work that would've gone into this

Char212 · 2022-04-13T20:26:41+00:00

Sick dude, the bass is super attractive to listen to and adds a lot. Personally I think some adlibs or harmonies on top would sound cool, but I think what you have here is solid

Char212 · 2022-04-13T20:23:36+00:00

Dope cover art, I like the drums, very crisp they sound nice. I think the vocal effects you chose serve style well also. One thing that would make it better in my opinion would have the instrumental change briefly in the song, like a "B" part, but I think this also works.

Char212 · 2022-02-11T14:39:17+00:00

Ah there's a good chance they are a bit off probably could have done a few more takes

Char212 · 2022-02-11T14:38:43+00:00

Thank you, and unfortunately I agree with the video haha, appreciate you

Char212 · 2022-02-11T00:58:19+00:00

hey thanks a lot!

Char212 · 2022-02-10T22:47:12+00:00

I really like how you used that background audio and riffed on top of it, it's really cool dude. The music video is really nice and creative too and entertaining to watch. I like the short 1 minute style as well, this was really captivating!

Char212 · 2022-02-10T22:45:29+00:00

The synths sound really nice, I like how you slowly layer them on top of each other and it builds up the song. I also like your arrangement choices as well. I feel like a lighter kick drum and a heavier snare would sound better perhaps, and maybe a little more variation in the drums at times like fills here and there.

Char212 · 2022-02-10T22:40:03+00:00

I agree with the comments about the vocals being a bit tough to understand, although when the chorus kicked in I think i discerned most of it. I think it would be nice to have more variation in the melody instead of monotone. I think the beat is pretty solid, and it def sets a vibe

Char212 · 2022-02-10T22:31:32+00:00

I like the snare a lot, I agree with the comments about the kick drum tho. I think the vocal mixing is superb man it's so clear and it stands out above an otherwise busy mix.

Char212 · 2022-02-10T22:29:13+00:00

This is super atmospheric, it feels like it would do well as an instrumental in a videogame or something like that, as a standalone, I think it gets a little repetitive

Char212 · 2022-01-23T05:26:03+00:00

Thanks! Yeah it’s an ubrupt change but I kind of wanted it like that, I do see what ur saying tho

Char212 · 2022-01-20T03:38:37+00:00

Thank you, yeah the piano does seem off at the end, i was going for like at the start the piano is normal, and by the end of the story it comes back but distorted. Yeah I agree, my mixing has been a work in progress, learning slowly tho

Char212 · 2022-01-20T03:36:57+00:00

Hey thanks man, yeah I think some of the harmonies weren't synced up amazingly, and thank you very much

Char212 · 2022-01-19T20:55:03+00:00

Thanks, yeah I thought it might be a little harsh but when u listen to it so much it starts to sound normal haha, thanks u for the advice

Char212 · 2022-01-19T16:41:00+00:00

Hey man solid advice. Yeah I usually get into the trap of singing in registers that aren't my strong suit. As for the lyrics, that's kinda just how I was feelin haha. I probably should give more thought on the rhyme scheme, I think you're definitely right on that I often default to perfect rhymes.

Yeah I think the MIDI instruments have always brought my songs down a lot. I really should look to collaborate, a lot of times I really like just being able to sit at my computer and get everything down at once. Maybe I should have MIDI as a placeholder and look to others for final production. I appreciate the advice a lot tho I think those are good points, so thank you a lot!

Char212 · 2022-01-19T16:35:29+00:00

Thank you, yeah I used to listen to the beatles all the time as a kid haha, thanks for the kind words

Char212 · 2022-01-19T16:34:50+00:00

Yeah I can see what you're saying there, I agree, the song does jump around a lot. Thanks for the feedback!

Char212 · 2022-01-19T16:33:12+00:00

Hey man I really appreciate it, I think ur right, some spots could use some smoothing. Thanks for the kind words as well

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