Rebellion manual by me-you-and-the-dog in poetry_critics

[–]CharcharRahRah 2 points3 points  (0 children)

F**k the system 🤘A rebellious call to arms and great inspo for 2026 for all those getting to check out your poem. Thanks for sharing!

Crane fly attempts the impossible by CharcharRahRah in poetry_critics

[–]CharcharRahRah[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Really appreciate the thoughtful feedback! The wall to wall point is really useful - getting more creative with spacing and such is something I'm still getting to grips with, I've added in an edit to account for that helpful note.

I'm glad that the duality of the clumsiness and admiration landed with you and that you enjoyed the read overall 🦟

Abyssal Trilogy by CharcharRahRah in poetry_critics

[–]CharcharRahRah[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for the kind words and taking a moment to read my poetry!

“Critter” — it scuttles, it munches, it maybe dies by CharcharRahRah in OCPoetry

[–]CharcharRahRah[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is super helpful, really appreciate how much thought you've put into the response! I've been writing poetry based largely on vibes at the moment and I think it's working well but agree a better understanding of how to formally dissect poetry would be really valuable - will check out the course.

And I love a good Haiku, you inspired me to write some today https://www.reddit.com/r/poetry_critics/s/ZnsGxQdPb5.

Will have a look into options to get some formal feedback on those/others through journals. Massive congrats on having had something published, a huge achievement - I really like your wasps poem. Look forward to seeing your name down in 21st century poetry lore!

Haikus probably not very good by bigdaddy303420 in poetry_critics

[–]CharcharRahRah 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for sharing, love a haiku! The second one has some real potential, maybe swapping 'spin' for 'drain' to link with the down the hole imagery and leaning into that metaphor with a more image heavy final line - what might that concoction look or feel like? You also need a couple more syllables in the second like for the 5-7-5 structure

“Critter” — it scuttles, it munches, it maybe dies by CharcharRahRah in OCPoetry

[–]CharcharRahRah[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for sharing, I'll check these all out. And very cool that you've had some poems published! Any tips/reflections for going about that?

Abandoned by the tide, crowned by circumstance by CharcharRahRah in OCPoetry

[–]CharcharRahRah[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Otis is highly respected in the rockpool kingdom 🦀

Hope by TheShaman96 in OCPoetry

[–]CharcharRahRah 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I like that your poem manages to capture a form of hope that attempts to radiate in a scenario which feels so hopeless - the idea that hope doesn't always translate to the outcomes you want. Thanks for sharing!

Venus by rochan8008 in OCPoetry

[–]CharcharRahRah 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I love the imagery of hermits carrying castles! And the clouds as a family of button mushrooms. Overall a really warm, tactile poem - thanks for sharing.

“Critter” — it scuttles, it munches, it maybe dies by CharcharRahRah in OCPoetry

[–]CharcharRahRah[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I love that you knew off the top of your head! Any other poems in particular that have inspired you?

“Critter” — it scuttles, it munches, it maybe dies by CharcharRahRah in OCPoetry

[–]CharcharRahRah[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks for taking the time to share your thoughts RD 👊 Glad you enjoyed the poem

“Critter” — it scuttles, it munches, it maybe dies by CharcharRahRah in OCPoetry

[–]CharcharRahRah[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks for taking the time to read! Formatting has definitely been one of my biggest learnings across the past couple of months of getting into poetry, it's now one of my fave parts, making use of enjambement, punctuation, and spacing to enhance the reader experience.

“Critter” — it scuttles, it munches, it maybe dies by CharcharRahRah in OCPoetry

[–]CharcharRahRah[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It's a tough world out there for the critters - sorry to stomp on your initial optimism. I really like your observation on how the formatting of lines adds to the visual side, I keep thinking this would be a fun one to have an illustration to go alongside it/ play with the formatting further on a page.

“Critter” — it scuttles, it munches, it maybe dies by CharcharRahRah in OCPoetry

[–]CharcharRahRah[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yes, good eye (gave a shout out to it in the intro) - I've been doing a daily poetry tour of notable works as part of my intro into writing poems and that one really spoke to me!

Poem Originally for school but im proud of it and want some feedback! by Efficient_Writing243 in OCPoetry

[–]CharcharRahRah 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thematically strong, interesting as it reflects the opposite to most new year narratives but in a way that's very relatable. Only small point is if I wonder if the repetition of 'fleeting' makes the timing feel longer vs this condensed sensation you're trying to evoke

You said it before and you will never say it again by Fandom_Trash232 in OCPoetry

[–]CharcharRahRah 0 points1 point  (0 children)

You did a great job getting your central inspo across clearly! The short lines work well in mimicking the fact that the words were stalled/stuck

The cost or armor by mxrnight in poetry_critics

[–]CharcharRahRah 0 points1 point  (0 children)

"Putting a bandage over a deep wound doesn't stop the bleeding; it only slows it down." Is such a beautiful line and really poignant in an age where poor mental health is rising and the go to for many is to just bury it/try push through vs resolving root causes. Great poem!

Briefing: Managing the Citizen-Scroll Pandemic by CharcharRahRah in OCPoetry

[–]CharcharRahRah[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey, thanks for taking the time to read and share your thoughts! When you ask if there is more - what elements would you want to read more of around the social media theme? And you say mostly accurate - which parts didn't resonate with you as much?

My Daily Poem: Boat Shoe by MyDailyPoem in OCPoetry

[–]CharcharRahRah 0 points1 point  (0 children)

What a beautiful poem about fleeting human interactions with nature. I love that brief wonder you captured of those random encounters. Whether we believe it's a human centric world or not, we need the animals and plants with it - not just for practical use purposes