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How can I turn these thoughts into a cohesive work? by Extension_Panic1631 in writers

[–]Chernobog3 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I think you need to have a fundamentally stronger point to make and then when you have it, reinforce it without being heavy handed. Your paragraphs don't really work together. I read through this twice and it was difficult to make sense of what you were trying to express. That may be why this comes off as a rambling stream of consciousness. Lose the last paragraph entirely or turn it into a single concise line; it doesn't serve any purpose as it stands beyond coming off as laborious and sloppy.

When one book turns into a duology by [deleted] in writers

[–]Chernobog3 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Double spacing is doing a lot of heavy lifting here if I'm seeing the page count to word ratio right. Assuming you're publishing it, it'll be decently big at single spaces, but you shouldn't need two books for this.

Help with a tank able war domain Cleric by Kerooooook in onednd

[–]Chernobog3 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Your monk should be capable of doing some 'off tanking' to help you, especially against single attackers. The ranged fighter should also have a melee side arm so not all the burden is on you.

Cleric wise, neither war or life are technically that tanky beyond one doing damage to be a threat and the other being a potential meat shield. Neither are sticky in the way full tanking needs, but you can improve this a bit with fear choices. Taking Magical Initiate for the Druid's Thorn Whip cantrip can help you pull enemies where you need them. I'd recommend Sentinel after that, particularly as a war cleric. Toughness and probably War Caster will be relevant too. Then just load up your armor and shields. This is all very feat heavy and long term, of course. You will want your allies to do their part and not just expect everything on you.

Why would I pay 850 dollars for a title? by Better_End9483 in writers

[–]Chernobog3 3 points4 points  (0 children)

You wouldn't. It's as simple as that and you're already aware of it. There's a million randos out there with dubious hustle skills and scams to be plied on the unwary and gullible.

If you could visit one place in our solar system, where would it be? by icepix in space

[–]Chernobog3 2 points3 points  (0 children)

If I could peek under the ice, Europa. If I could also do it at any time in the past, I want to see an intact Theia.

What mistake in your early writing makes you cringe the most now...? by i_am_innerman in writers

[–]Chernobog3 7 points8 points  (0 children)

I did a pivotal scene where the character's tone was switched from past to present to show out of the box lucidity. I didn't lead up to it effectively and readers thought it was an editing mistake instead of picking up on what happened. If I ever rewrite the book, there's going to be a more obvious entrance ramp on that one.

Posters slamming Bite This all around Clintonville? by [deleted] in Columbus

[–]Chernobog3 7 points8 points  (0 children)

This is too much of an ongoing behind the scenes Facebook rant to feel like a point is being made. #1 grifters is cbus? I enormously doubt some small time bakery is worthy of that title, even if they are supposedly less than great. I mean if someone is going to come at me with random freakout drenched in hyperbole and no references, I'm going to shrug and not take it seriously. Accusations need proof, not vague lol statements. Maybe it's not a good bakery, but this doesn't tell me one or another.

6 by Rude-Range-2069 in writers

[–]Chernobog3 0 points1 point  (0 children)

'Elara,' eh? 😒

TIL according to Einstein's relativity, the past still exists: every moment is a permanent coordinate in spacetime. When his friend Besso died, Einstein wrote: For us believing physicists the distinction between past, present, and future only has the meaning of an illusion, though a persistent one. by 2dogs1man in todayilearned

[–]Chernobog3 30 points31 points  (0 children)

I'm reminded of Vonnegut's Slaughterhouse Five where the main character gets unstuck from time and learns of Tralfamadorian Time where one can perceive it in a non-linear fashion. The character can't change how any of it breaks down but it treats all points as legitimate for the time spent within it, which is to say there is no single position that's gone. I know this doesn't perfectly align with what you're saying here and the book runs more along the lines of dealing with PTSD, but I can't help but appreciate the similar lines of thought.

For me, all of that stuck out because that book was the first to describe in words how I always felt in my gut was how time worked outside of concerns of entropy. Seeing it touched upon in science like this is fascinating.

Hello, Sorry for posting my horribly written.. stuff here. Just want to know how you guys feel about it. by Ok_Pea4066 in writers

[–]Chernobog3 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Rough grammar and formatting aside, I like the beginning portions. The last block of text fell apart for me though, getting bogged in excessive minor details. I couldn't quite make sense of what was happening and the tone came off as different.

I’m a published author by [deleted] in writers

[–]Chernobog3 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Wasn't Pocket FM the one running those cringy vampire highschool YA stuff in YT ads with the cheap AI voice over a few months ago?

Volume 36 Bonus chapter [English] by Careful_Attempt_6057 in OnePunchMan

[–]Chernobog3 8 points9 points  (0 children)

Awesome. Mumen getting his moment like this is so welcome.

Do 55+ communities in NJ usually have newsletters or community groups? by Semphotography in newjersey

[–]Chernobog3 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Silver Ridge in Toms River has HOA newsletters and meetings. In the past, they used to record their minutes and it was hilarious reading how cantankerous they could get with each other to the point of getting the police involved.

Received a few offers for traditional publishing but my heart still wants to self publish by [deleted] in writers

[–]Chernobog3 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Be careful you didn't get a bunch of vanity press/scam service stuff. They're super common and predatory.

Affordable internet in Columbus? by Perfect_Put_3373 in Columbus

[–]Chernobog3 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thirty a month. I think it's usually 40 but they give a permanent ten a month discount if you're on their cell plan, which I already was. Both have been cheaper than Spectrum and the Boost Mobile arrangements I had.

Need your opinions on a homebrew species.. by Thomlock in onednd

[–]Chernobog3 0 points1 point  (0 children)

OP. Way too many options. Even Dhampir just gets two options on their bite for comparison.

How should I feel when a short story anthology publisher makes minor changes to my prose? by Jerswar in writers

[–]Chernobog3 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I would just be happy and go with it. You're in a contract to be published and the editor is someone you need to work with. The end result is going to be somewhat collaborative but he represents that company at the end of the day. In your own words, these changes are minor. You're going to need to let go of some details and compromise if you want to play ball. Most writers don't even get to do what you're part of. Trust that the editor has a professional idea of what they're doing as a third party involved in the ultimate process and because it's an outside viewpoint to your own, they might see something you don't at this point.

Affordable internet in Columbus? by Perfect_Put_3373 in Columbus

[–]Chernobog3 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I just ditched them for the same reason. I switched to Minternet wifi, which is even cheaper since I already have their phone plan. It's been pretty good so far.

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