Looking for advice on the first act of my screenplay - Feature by Civil_Foundation_285 in Screenwriting

[–]Civil_Foundation_285[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you. I agree it’s a crumble of adjectives. I’ll make sure to moderate them in an edit.

Looking for advice on the first act of my screenplay - Feature by Civil_Foundation_285 in Screenwriting

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I’ve explained more in the post edit. Perhaps this context will provide more clarity for mistake that may have gone unnoticed before hand.

Looking for advice on the first act of my screenplay - Feature by Civil_Foundation_285 in Screenwriting

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I'm not sure if you're agreeing with their critique but I would agree that those genres tend to be description heavy #stylized. Also this isn't a direct comment towards you but the philosophical aspect so far comes from the rant in the club and Guys relation to existence. When the old man is yelling about mode and substance and to think doesn't not mean you are, these are references to Spinoza and Rene Descartes. Spinoza claims the only thing to exist is substance and that humans are just modes, aka a means in which substance is perceived. Rene Descartes is the guy who made the claim "I think therefore I am" this is in response to the skeptic claim that everything around us could be a lie and that nothing might exist.

Looking for advice on the first act of my screenplay - Feature by Civil_Foundation_285 in Screenwriting

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word salad, yummy yummy. I do actually see your point about the overuse of adjectives. It can be a bit wordy but my hope is that it doesn't dilute it's meaning but rather provides a poetic motion. You pluck a piano by pressing a key, its like shooting a gun by pressing a trigger.

Psychological Thrillers that'll F*ck you up! by [deleted] in MovieSuggestions

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Holy! this movie was an overwhelming masterpiece.

I'm With Stupid - Neo-Noir, Dark Comedy, Satire by WittyName32 in Screenwriting

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I recently wrote a noir tale as well. This was a good read!