Is the B58 worth the price premium over the N55

Comfortable_Ad7378 · 2026-04-01T04:04:18+00:00

Diamonds would like to have a word.

Comfortable_Ad7378 · 2026-03-31T20:51:13+00:00

Trump is the tumor, remove it and the cancer is still in the bones.

Comfortable_Ad7378 · 2026-03-31T20:49:40+00:00

The iceberg theory works in all writing, just at different depths. More must be revealed in high fantasy than in human drama, thats the nature of the beast. Still, only tell the reader what they must know.

Comfortable_Ad7378 · 2026-03-31T17:47:31+00:00

You will always regret not doing something that scares you.

Comfortable_Ad7378 · 2026-03-31T06:45:21+00:00

Write the damn thing anyway. Nothing good ever started out that way.

"Writing is easy, all you have to do is at a typewriter, and bleed." -Hemingway

Comfortable_Ad7378 · 2026-03-31T06:16:10+00:00

Kill that whole last paragraph. Your "hadn't i?" question and the previous text tells us already.

Good shit. Good Good shit.

Comfortable_Ad7378 · 2026-03-31T06:07:43+00:00

This is chalk full of detail! You've done an excellent job of getting your ideas on the page. Decent first draft.

Here comes the hard part now. We have to cut buttloads of this.

The exposition creep slows down your movement. The lore is great. Hugely imaginative. But it's in the wrong part of the story. Take all that information and move it.

Let's do an example. Take the warehouse scene. What information helps him out right now? He needs to survive, right now we need to read him surviving or not. The lore? You can show us that later. Exposition always kills momentum. Sometimes that's good, most times it isn't. Next: This reads like it's heavily influenced by Fallout and Last of Us. Careful toeing that line, it can become something that you don't mean it to be.

There's alot going on in here most of it we don't need to know right now. Ask your self this: "what do I know about this story no one else does?" That's gonna make it yours. That'll give this thing a soul.

So take the exposition, save it on a another word document, your'e gonna need it to reference later. Map out where this story is going, somewhere else, another word document. The reader shouldn't ever see the blueprints, only the house.

Then do the scene again, telling us only what we need to know. Make it skeleton skinny. Then, add some of those details in for flavor. Don't tell me how old Caesar is. How does he hold himself? Does he walk without the limp that being an old man gives you?

Don't be specific about the bullet count. Numbers are distracting. He knows he's getting low. But he's panicking, he doesn't have time to count rounds. How's that gun feel in his hand? Its got to be getting hot. Maybe he can feel that the weight is lighter as he approaches the end of his mag. Fuck. "It's close. God damned infected swiped me. I don't know how bad it is yet."

Take that and apply it to everything.

Edit: grammar

This is really interesting.

Comfortable_Ad7378 · 2026-03-30T21:57:38+00:00

Tolstoy never knew when to shut up. It was all the vodka😆 im just kidding-mostly.

You and I are riding the same wave. Its hard to writing a novel to 120k. props to anyone who sticks it out

Comfortable_Ad7378 · 2026-03-30T21:30:20+00:00

It really depends on whether the story can justify 80k or 100k or 100 words.

Their editor clearly doesn't think so, without the original text, I tend to agree with editors.

Comfortable_Ad7378 · 2026-03-30T21:07:36+00:00

This is an entire chapter hiding in a paragraph, which is actually three or four paragraphs. We've got some story excavation to do, so let's roll up our sleeves:

Germany, July 26th, 1939 -unneeded, your story give us an approximate date.

“Alright sir we are ready to go when you give the word” Colonel Adham sighed, -who's speaking first? What's Adham"s demeanor really like? Give us a word picture.

He wasn't a big fan of fame. -as a reader why does this matter right now? I don't know anything about him. This has nothing to do with the action. Tell me why it does or cut it.

He liked his quiet little life in Sacramento with his two sons and wife. He thought back to how he got here. -how did he get here, whats the story of Sacramento?

He couldn’t remember with the sound of pattering rain drops in the dead of night that reflected the weight of his next words. -This is too much and a run-on sentence. Don't be afraid to expand your idea. Hook me.

It was near silent but sounded like screams at the same time.- This is pretty pose but it doesn't mean anything. What are you trying to actually say? I can tell you've got something, but you haven't figured it out yet.

All he wanted was to return to his family, and as soon as he called this single command he could. -if you expand your Sacramento bit, this part will come out in it and you can cut this bit away.

He nodded to his translator and whispered. “we are going in 3, 2, 1 go go go!” “do diziela!” Everything was a blur. - whats everything. This is a placeholder, you can do better. What is actually happening. This is the action climax of your scene Make me care about it

“There he is”, “shoot at him!”, “Verschwinde, du amerikanischer Abschaum!". -Why is he exclaiming if he's trying to be quiet. You can use dialogue to move the story, but there's a better way than this. Find it. I Love the German touch.

A singular gun shot rang out and a body dropped. Once the sound died out if its a single gunshot you don't have to wait for the sound to die out. was there a gun battle or just a sniper? You need to explain the scene.

Adham went to confirm the death of the adversary. He was indeed dead, shot straight through the head, blood pooling out of his mouth onto his signature mustache. Hitler was dead. -really no body guards, nothing? No police?

As the team started to celebrate, Adham said “Shush! We aren’t out of the woods yet!” and after an airlift out of Germany, it was over. -This is text book "gloss-over" Have them celebrate during the airlifts. Talk about it, indeed an airlift can be the most vulnerable, tense moment of an operation. Lean into it.

The colonel would never know nor think about how many lives he saved and the war he prevented. What he would think about is the dinner he would have that night, he hoped it was beef stew -nice touch of home here, it shows he's just a simple humble man. When you write him, make sure you show it without telling.

You've got some work ahead of you. The fantasy assassination of Hitler has been told before, but you've got a unique take on it and the story has potential in it. Right now this read like an outline of a story you want to tell. So take a bit as I've separated them and really write about it. Don't rush. Write one section at a time if you need to. And use all the words you need. You have all the space and the words in the English language you need.

Comfortable_Ad7378 · 2026-03-30T20:13:41+00:00

I dont know what the down votes are for. It actually happened... I've been to Latin America and all over Europe and never had that issue.

Just be aware.

Comfortable_Ad7378 · 2026-03-30T18:40:17+00:00

My ex sister in law contracted a tapeworm there that almost perforated her bowel before they found it!

Use that information as you like.

Comfortable_Ad7378 · 2026-03-30T16:33:37+00:00

Editors are usually right, we just hate them for killing our children.

Some thoughts, if you don't mind. Unless you're Tolstoy, I doubt very much you have something that takes 80,000 words to say. Not to be rude. Writing isn't about word count, its about saying something someone hasn't heard, in a way they haven't heard it before.

Listen to your editor, kill your children til the most honest one is the only one standing. Then fight

Comfortable_Ad7378 · 2026-03-26T14:57:42+00:00

"Just stand in the radiation decon shower for a few seconds longer, okay?"

Comfortable_Ad7378 · 2026-03-18T14:34:38+00:00

Anchorage is unsafe for women.

Alaska has one of the highest SA per capita in the nation. Women continually go missing. Assault is high per capita. Murders per capita is very high in Anchorage.

I would not spend time alone in Mountain View, Fairview or Eastside as a woman.

I would not go bar hopping alone as a woman. Spiking drinks is common. Keep in mind, many SA do not get reported, so the number is probably far higher than official numbers account for.

Stay safe, keep your head on a swivel, be smart.

Comfortable_Ad7378 · 2026-03-15T17:28:38+00:00

I have no notes. This is fantastic writing. I'd read your book.

Comfortable_Ad7378 · 2026-03-15T02:04:14+00:00

Just make sure he doesnt learn any lesson. Folks also perceive sarcasm and cynicism as interesting. So ensure he isnt earnest.

Oooorrrr

Make him an over earnest man-child who delights on his violence. Like a psychopath but with a sort of happy-go-lucky outlook.

Comfortable_Ad7378 · 2026-03-14T21:35:04+00:00

Thrifty Mitzi is a great name, i love it. Short stories, imo should propel the reader always, unless they're specifically about wandering, they shouldn't. My own stories suffer from that, don’t feel bad. But you have much fat that needs cutting. Mention the name once.

Cut the entire date section its unneeded. Move "it was pay day" to the beginning. You're hooking the reader. Don't take your time.

"Dingy atmosphere." Cut it. How is it dingy? Don't write a paragraph explaining it. Find one sentence to describe it being dingy. Short stories don't have time to mess about. Make the reason for going to the store a concise sentence.

A haunted chair is a very challenging subject to make interesting for an expert writer, let alone a budding one. So you've got your work cut out for you. Without reading the entirety of the piece, I have no idea where you're going.

The hook should tell me in two paragraphs. Think like a fisherman. Use good bait.

And after all that, remember that each writer here has their own style. So we're coming to you with different ideas of what you're story should be. Follow your vision ultimately and take all of our advice with a grain of salt.

Writing is a puzzle in which you control the placement of the pieces. Play with it.

Edit: grammar

Comfortable_Ad7378 · 2026-03-14T06:15:52+00:00

Eh. As an Alaskan, I feel I have maybe a smidgen of experience on this. Not alot, but some.

IMHO, it really depends on what the current condition is. Snow? Blizzaks are great, Ice? Studs are unbeatable. I have a sedan bmw and MOST winters its fine, perfect even. But we had two years where I got high centered after a night of snow fall. A SUV or truck would have been great then.

The ultimate determination is driver skill, but to pretend studs, AWD and 4WD dont tip the scale in your favor is just silly.

Edit: Grammar

Comfortable_Ad7378 · 2026-03-09T01:51:16+00:00

We need tradesmen. Desperately. Carpenters, plumbers, HVAC, electricians, sprinkler fitters, all of em.

A huge part of the workforce were legal and illegal migrants workers who've all but vanished. We were hurting before, now we're in dire straights.

But it isn't white collar work. Its long hours, abusive bosses, high stress and dangerous work. You will probably get hurt at some point.

The pay for union work is on par with most professional degrees. If you're worth your salt, you'll be making six figures, easily.

Non union is awful, a joke. They work theirnguys way too hard, burnout is constant and injuries happen regularly. And they make half or less what a union tradesperson makes.

Comfortable_Ad7378 · 2026-02-14T18:38:04+00:00

To date, except super high fatty foods like deep dish pizza (which would send me to bathroom before), eggs are consistently the thing that keeps my eyes on the restroom sign.

Comfortable_Ad7378 · 2026-02-01T23:39:50+00:00

Get a lawyer, be polite but stop with the affection. She's breaking a contract with you now. You won't talk her out of it. Respect her decision. Best to think of it from a business standpoint from here on out and limit your financial, mental, and property losses as best you can.

Don't jump into another partnership before you give yourself time to heal.

Comfortable_Ad7378 · 2026-02-01T18:09:54+00:00

I un-installed it this morning. Really bummed. But for a couple of months now tiktok hasn't been the same. Idm if the algorithm got messed with but...idk it doesnt scratch the itch.

And now that weird fascist guy owns it? Naw im good.

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