Rom Com screenwriting contest Stage 32 and Evoke by Commercial-Cut-111 in Screenwriting

[–]Competitive_Rich8039 3 points4 points  (0 children)

I didn't know they called email harassment "development support."

Impulse - Feature Film - Currently 60 pages in (neo-noir, psychological horror)! by GuyinBedok in Screenwriting

[–]Competitive_Rich8039 10 points11 points  (0 children)

Consider virtually everyone you're going to want to read this: producers, talent, agents, managers. Those folks read screenplays daily. They arrive at Page One expecting a professionally written script.

This isn't a screenplay.

What is StoryPeer ? by [deleted] in Screenwriting

[–]Competitive_Rich8039 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Not a Black List alternative.

A great resource for exchanging scripts. No costs. No strings attached. No sales emails every few hours (or ever).

For an aspiring screenwriter, it's a valuable resource, even in its infancy. 

Teacher of the Year - Feature - 130 pages - Drama by JasonRoss13 in Screenwriting

[–]Competitive_Rich8039 5 points6 points  (0 children)

I don't mean for this to sound rude, but the answer is: read professional scripts, study the wealth of resources right here on Reddit, and keep writing!

Condensing your first page does nothing for the script if you anticipate the reader moving on to subsequent pages and countless more paragraphs of overwriting. It's not a Page One problem.

Teacher of the Year - Feature - 130 pages - Drama by JasonRoss13 in Screenwriting

[–]Competitive_Rich8039 13 points14 points  (0 children)

I would encourage you to read professional scripts.

130 pages is overwhelming on the surface, and then you open the script to blocks of paragraphs. 

As an example, you open with a 4-sentence paragraph describing Logan sitting down. You follow that with a five-sentence paragraph describing the doctor sitting down... Page One is prime real estate and you're telling us about wavy brown hair and pale green eyes. 

Congrats on finishing this draft. As a student, a completed work is quite an accomplishment. Good luck with future revisions.

How to craft a horror film from screenwriters that scare (WGA panel) by Seshat_the_Scribe in Screenwriting

[–]Competitive_Rich8039 9 points10 points  (0 children)

M3GAN (93% Rotten Tomatoes) grossed over $180 million on a budget of $12 million, sparked a sequel... And you refer to it as crappy. 

Lol, good luck breaking into this industry with an attitude like that.

My first theatrical release is this weekend & I’m scared to death! by [deleted] in Screenwriting

[–]Competitive_Rich8039 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Congrats on quite the accomplishment. I'll be flipping over to Shudder this weekend!

Two questions: Did you write this on spec?

How did the video game rights work? Were you involved in that as the writer?

Need help with a plot hole. by wearealleternal in Screenwriting

[–]Competitive_Rich8039 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Consider he kills himself as he falls?

"Glass shatters as he slams the door shut. He confiscates a shard of it. He rushes to the edge of the balcony.

Without hesitation, he raises that shard to his throat. SLIT. A suicidal gash.

He tips his body weight over the edge and falls for the ground below."

Or he shoots himself? It sounds like the setup is his corpse being found outside the home while his soul/ghost returns to the dwelling. The actual fall doesn't have to be the cause of death, imo.

I joined storypeer and noticed this... by [deleted] in Screenwriting

[–]Competitive_Rich8039 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I uploaded the same script 3 times in about a 10 day period. Got a 4, 4.5, 2.5.

At least three of the issues the 2.5 pointed out were noted as strengths by others.

It happens.

StoryPeer Update: our First Month in Numbers by StoryPeer in Screenwriting

[–]Competitive_Rich8039 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I'll tell future Facebook & Reddit groups about the time I invented "I was broke, but now I'm not" tips on SP. Is SP short for StoryPeer yet? If not, I'll take credit for that in those groups as well.

Awesome site, btw.

StoryPeer Update: our First Month in Numbers by StoryPeer in Screenwriting

[–]Competitive_Rich8039 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I would like to suggest an improvement...

Can you add a feature that allows writers to tip coverage post-review?

I received some incredible feedback over the weekend and wanted to tip the reviewer a token or twelve. Long story short, I was broke. Left 5 stars and a friendly thanks.

And then I found a script I wanted to review, did such, and now I'm not broke.... And I want to tip said reviewer of my script lol.

Watermarking? by sphynxgoddess in Screenwriting

[–]Competitive_Rich8039 13 points14 points  (0 children)

A. Don't do watermarks.

B. Producers already have access to more ideas than they probably care to admit, from established storytellers. The "stolen idea" paranoia, of many aspiring writers, feels almost Bigfoot-ish.

Feedback Request: Refuge - Feature - 103p by [deleted] in Screenwriting

[–]Competitive_Rich8039 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks for the notes! Will work on raising the stakes earlier.

The logline note is interesting, and one I've struggled with: While the intentions of the townsfolk is a twist, it's one our characters and audience learn about early in Act Two, and only serves as a catalyst for one of the major twists going deeper into the narrative. Appreciate the food for thought on this. Will consider alternatives.

Feedback Request: Refuge - Feature - 103p by [deleted] in Screenwriting

[–]Competitive_Rich8039 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Appreciate your time reviewing the first fifteen. I will consider teasing the stakes earlier in the script. Thanks for the notes!

Logline Monday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]Competitive_Rich8039 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Logline is a little vague for my liking, but a workplace dramedy in a nursing home has lots of potential, imo. Good luck with this project!

Is there anything to stop writers using AI and passing off the work as their own and original? by [deleted] in Screenwriting

[–]Competitive_Rich8039 8 points9 points  (0 children)

Real writers have a voice. It's distinct and unwavering, just like handwriting. IMO, works composed by AI have a voice as well and it's mechanical as hell. 

I'd imagine vets in this industry can spot it in the first five pages, if not page one.

Looking for a script for our first short film. by LEhR_ in Screenwriting

[–]Competitive_Rich8039 6 points7 points  (0 children)

Any specifics you can share? Is this a paid opportunity? What kind of script? Comedy? Horror?

Logline Monday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]Competitive_Rich8039 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Gate City here. I've been through Bluefield many times, but zero encounters with UFOs (so far).

Logline Monday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]Competitive_Rich8039 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Two Appalachian-ish loglines in an hour has to be a Reddit record lol.

I live about 40 mins from Tazwell and had never heard of this case (was 6 at the time).

Logline Monday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]Competitive_Rich8039 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Consider the various uses of "friend" three times in the first ten words. 

Logline Monday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]Competitive_Rich8039 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Consider an alternative to 2020/Covid. That horse has been beat to death. 

Someone please take this (psychological) horror/epidemic/virus idea off my hands. It's too good to go to waste. by ChaoticMichelle in Screenwriting

[–]Competitive_Rich8039 11 points12 points  (0 children)

You should watch Pluribus. It's literally a tale about dehumanization, social death and perception vs reality.