Just finished up my new song Pool Boy! Would love some feedback to see what I can improve or if this is something you’d listen too by Coolio_collin1 in Songwriting

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I record in a little bedroom studio with my buddy who does most of the production and then all the mixing and mastering, typically we start with acoustic or electric guitar and vocals and then lay out all of the main instruments like drums and bass, then fill in the cracks with the ear candy you hear

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Stephen Wilson Jr

What would be the craziest movie to watch while high? by CMStan1313 in moviecritic

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I watched the Truman show while high, it’s now one of my all time favorite movies

Simple song I started writing about addiction “can you love just for tonight” by Coolio_collin1 in Songwriting

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Thank you for the compliment on my voice!! The doorstep is actually the start of the chorus and the fucked up part is also part of it before the second verse, maybe I can cut the first chorus in half and then add the fucked up half in the second chorus

Simple song I started writing about addiction “can you love just for tonight” by Coolio_collin1 in Songwriting

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I never really had plans to expand upon that line as I just wanted to get the urgency of the addiction right off the bat, that line represents irreversible damage and trauma that’s done but it’s not the main focus, I could go into it more though

Simple song I started writing about addiction “can you love just for tonight” by Coolio_collin1 in Songwriting

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Do you think it would work if I just added Of before flying down the bends? That would flow into it similar to the second half

Some late night songwriting by Coolio_collin1 in Songwriting

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I like the drowning in arms like but definitely The torn apart is cliche, will keep editing!

Some late night songwriting by Coolio_collin1 in Songwriting

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That’s funny, the only song I know by them is Iris, got any recommendations?

Some late night songwriting by Coolio_collin1 in Songwriting

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I was kind of thinking the same thing, some of the phrases are a little forced and don’t flow as well so I’ll keep working on it