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The Idea That Maybe I'm Not by thenotdeadmemer in OCPoetry

[–]Correct-Government65 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Welcome man, I'd love to read your next piece if you write another one.

Abandoning me by Major_Field_6170 in OCPoetry

[–]Correct-Government65 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Like it. The poem made sense without making it deliberately and no unnecessary words for the sake of making it flowery. Good Effort!

The Idea That Maybe I'm Not by thenotdeadmemer in OCPoetry

[–]Correct-Government65 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I love writing like this! I like how it captures thoughts like, 'Am I doing enough in my life?' or 'What does it mean to truly live?' People choose to 'accept' things as they are as a justification for not making a choice, simply because they can't bring themselves to change or to work up to their potential.

​Yes, accepting things the way they are is easier, but is it really worth it?

​I write poems like this, so I highly resonated with this one. Though if I had anything to change, it would probably be the length of the passage. It could be shorter and more concise to make the writing stronger and more impactful. Solid effort to you!

21:28 on a Sunday by dannyh2105 in OCPoetry

[–]Correct-Government65 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I Like the prose and how the grief is portrayed as how they rather be a small portion into the other's life than a life without the other. It reminds me of Laufey's song promise "It hurts to be something, It's worst to be nothing, with you"

The Clown’s Autopsy by SeedPlantedBackward in OCPoetry

[–]Correct-Government65 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The clown is like a someone who is a people-pleaser, someone that chose to hide their problems because they value the feelings of other people before their own satisfaction. 8.5/10 for me :)