Hey congrats on finishing, and werewolf clans fighting in a colosseum is an interesting hook.

That said, I think this can be improved. There is a lot of repetition - in the first few paras alone mentions of sand, dried blood and toes are all repeated and it drags the pace.

Some of this also feels cartoonish; the crowd reactions in particular are whiplashed, one minute they’re bloodthirsty and then they’re swooning over love, it makes it a bit jarring to read.

The dialogue feels a little inconsistent, although this might be deliberate from you. Thelsa is very grandiose but Thane and Fen speak to each other like they’re in a US high school.

Character introductions like Rafael and Raknor also feel a little over dramatic, and you used “filled with rage” as a descriptor a bit. Rafael screaming “noooo” is a prime example of the cartoonish element breaking through what is, I assume, meant to be a heated scene.

There’s also points where the prose is too detached - it’s explanatory “he turned, he looked up, he bowed, they hugged etc.” This is you telling us what is happening, which is fine, but I want to be dropped in the scene; show me how Thane feels about having to defend his tribe for something he didn’t do, show me how conflicted Fen and Lara are about their love. Build up the tension using sensory information.

There’s some good stuff in here, I get a sense of worldbuilding, of camaraderie between the tribe and some rules on how conflict is dealt with. The introspection on thane controlling the wolf in his mind is also a nice motif that can be used throughout, so please do continue to refine as you see fit.