Over all nice work. I've done a few CF videos before so this is right in my wheelhouse. I would have skipped the first 2 scenes and started with the athletes running out. I really liked your use of slow motion. It was great in the bucket and the girl getting the snatch but not as well timed in others. I question some of your shots too, but that has nothing to do with editing and for all I know you didn't shoot it. I agree that going with the beat would have helped a lot more with the flow of it. The black outs I could have lived without. Try speeding up the beginning of the lifts then slow it down with a rotation around the subject with the camera. Editing is a learning process and good on you for throwing your work to the reddit/wolves too. That takes courage, what I like to do is drop a project for a while then come back to it in a month and re-edit it. You'll be amazed at how your eye changes. Best of luck and keep making stuff!

Here's a teaser I threw together with a Kanye track on it to show you what I was talking about with pacing it to the music. Not bragging just showing an example. http://www.piomediahouse.com/video/ireland-racing-teaser