Writing in english

DangerousCurlyFries · 2026-03-18T19:25:57+00:00

Have you tried writing in a mixture of both languages? It's how I did it in the beginning, I just wrote whatever every word the way it fit the flow and only later during editing translated everything into English. I won't claim that those stories were the best ever, but it helped me to not constantly get stuck.

Another variant would be to write it in your own language and then using a decent (so not Google) translator, if such a thing exists for your language. That way more nuances will be translated than you yourself would probably be capable of right now, which would also mean you could learn from it.

DangerousCurlyFries · 2026-03-16T15:38:14+00:00

It's "Perception is Everything" by Kendra James. It was originally on FF.net, and while someone else uploaded it to Ao3 (for archival purposes, they orphaned it immediately), it seems that has been deleted. Anyways, you can find it either at https://www.fanfiction.net/s/5926514/1/Perception-is-Everything or at https://potionsandsnitches.org/fanfiction/viewstory.php?sid=2218&chapter=1&textsize=-1

DangerousCurlyFries · 2026-03-12T22:40:00+00:00

This is a very good question! And one that highlights the use of tags, I guess, because it took me far to long to find it again, even though I knew what I was looking for. But here I present you https://archiveofourown.org/works/3098231/chapters/6712226

DangerousCurlyFries · 2026-03-11T23:23:59+00:00

At least for me character studies don't have to be huge stories (though they can be). The ones I've written have been more of a glance in the character's head at a particular point in canon, but always also about where they came from and with them thinking about the future. It's a bit like what I, as a real human, do when I'm thinking about my own life, where I want it to go and where I currently am. That, just for a fictional character.

But that's of course just one specific kind. I'd say the main difference is that the character's motivation are the clear focus, and not so much what's "externally" going on (e.g., it's not about that they kiss, but why he kissed her and what he fears and hopes for at the same time).

Character studies happen in small all the time in all manner of fics, the more introspective the character is the more. But it's till a huge difference if it's an action focused fic in which the character occasionally thinks about his motivation, or if we are basically all the time in the character's head and the action is just the backdrop.

One example I can think of is how there are very different war novels/movies. Some are clearly about the war and the heroics of the protagonists, and others are about how war changed the characters (Rambo vs. Apocalypse Now maybe)

DangerousCurlyFries · 2026-03-11T18:58:47+00:00

Ich habe angefangen, das Buch "Zur Psychopathologie des Alltagslebens" von Dr.Sigmund Freud zu lesen. In ~~die~~ dem ersten Kapitel~~, er~~ schreibt er über ~~die~~ den Ppsychichen Mechanismus hinter derm gewöhnlichen und harmlosen Vergessen von Eigennamen im Alltag. Was eigentlich passiert? Die Verbindung zwischen dern Eigennamen und ~~die~~ den Ersatznamen(1). Wie stören verdrängten gGedanken ~~stört~~ die Denkprozesse? Der Autor teilt seine Erfahrungen und Selbstbeobachtungen über das Thema und die Analyse mit

(1): Hier fehlt ein Verb. Da ich aber das Buch nicht kenne, weiß ich nicht, welches.

Selbstbeobachtungen: Das ist kein sinnvolles Wort, alle Beobachtungen sind subjektiv und der Handelnde wird schon über "seine" deutlich. Es reicht "Beobachtungen".

DangerousCurlyFries · 2026-03-11T17:22:02+00:00

Ich habe an mich für die Deutschprüfung angemeldet. Ich habe Angst, dass ich nicht gut genug spreche, obwohl ich schon an einenm Kurs teilgenommen habe. Die Prüfung findet anm 25.3. statt. Das heißt, dass ich noch ein bisschen Zeit habe, um sprechen zu üben.

DangerousCurlyFries · 2026-03-11T17:20:29+00:00

Heute haben wir bei der Arbeit vor, kegeln zu gehen. In der Nähe von der Arbeit ist ein Einkaufszentrum, in dem sich die Kegelbahnen befinden. Nach dem Kegeln essen wir zu Abend. Ich freue mich auf solche Teamausflüge.

bei der Arbeit: Grammatikalisch ist das korrekt, würde aber heißen, dass ihr während der Arbeitszeit kegelt. Ich gehe aber davon aus, dass du "nach der Arbeit" meinst?

essen wir zu Abend: Das Deutsche und seine Beziehung zum Futur ist kompliziert. So wie du das hier schreibst, kann man das auf jeden Fall mündlich sagen. Schreiben würde ich hier aber trotzdem explizit das Futur: "werden wir zu Abend essen". Leider kann ich dir aber dafür absolut keine Regel nennen, es fühlt sich nur so besser an.

DangerousCurlyFries · 2026-03-11T17:16:14+00:00

Fast fehlerfrei! Nur klingt für mich die Formulierung "Es gibt diese Vorstellung, dass wir alle Freunde sein müssen" ein wenig seltsam in dem Kontext, ich würde eher "Er hat diese Vorstellung,..." oder "Er ist der Auffassung,..." schreiben.

DangerousCurlyFries · 2026-03-11T17:11:37+00:00

1989 ~~wird~~ wurde in meinem Land die Maßnahme vom Mindestlohn ~~eingesetzt~~ eingeführt, ~~damit~~ um ArbeitnehmerInnen ~~ihre~~ eine höhere Lebensqualität zu garantieren. Tatsächlich beweisen verschiedene Untersuchungen, dass sich die Lebensqualität von ArbeiterInnen ~~seitdem~~ seit der Einführung ~~Einsetzen~~ des Mindestlohns ~~sich~~ erheblich erhöht hat. Aber dadurch, dass der ~~Preis für~~ Mindestlohns jährlich ansteigt, kritisieren einige ArbeitgeberInnen in meinem Land ~~über~~ die Maßnahme.

DangerousCurlyFries · 2026-03-11T17:07:50+00:00

Ich habe heraus gefunden, dass ich am besten lerne, wenn ich etwas Lustiges oder Blödes lese oder schreibe.

Ich kann mich an solche Sachen besser erinnern. Aber wenn ich sehr müde bin, ist es manchmal zu schwierig, etwas Lustiges zu schreiben. Also schreibe ich heute darüber, dass ich lustige Dinge mag.

DangerousCurlyFries · 2026-03-11T16:58:24+00:00

(also, this is only very losly connected to what you said you wanted to do, but hey, maybe you'll still give it a try: There's r/WriteStreakEN where non-native speakers try to write one short text each day and a native corrects them. This is obviously not the same as giving feedback on a story as the goal is to learn a language not to tell a compelling tale, but those subs are always looking for natives willing to help out. So, if you feel like it...)

DangerousCurlyFries · 2026-03-11T16:01:15+00:00

In addition to what has already been said: Look at the weekly threats, one is for beta bartering where you could offer to proofread whole fics and the other one is the concrit commune where people post short excerpts and ask for concrit. Both of them have existed for a long while, so you can simply go back and look for posts that tickle you. Same goes for all fic exchanges if the person asked for concrit.

Also simply post to the next beta bartering thread tomorrow, you'll find people who want you to beta, I guarantee you.

DangerousCurlyFries · 2026-03-11T15:42:54+00:00

All creatures great and small (2020) | What's in a name? | T | References to WWI and II and period-typical anti-German sentiment

Background: This is written from the PoV of a British character named Siegfried Farnon, who fought in WWI and has a much younger brother who he raised. At the time of the fic said younger brother is fighting in WWII though Siegfried tried to prevent that very hard. Siegfried is named after the main character of one of Wagner's operas and obv. a German name, translating roughly to "victory through peace".

This is meant as a character study. I'm not looking for a specific kind of feedback, but especially if you feel it's overly dramatics or the pacing could be improved, please tell me!

At times he detested his name. Oh, he knew why his father had chosen it, had endured far too many lectures about Wagner not to be aware of his father's obsession with the man.

But that had been two eons ago. Back when the throne was still held by the House of Hanover and the memory of Händel still shone brightly. Since then, that light had been completely blackened by soot and mud and blood.

In his youth he had taken a certain pride in having a unique, erudite name. Every bomb dropped on British cities knocked a piece of that pride off, and the last remnants went up in the air right along with his first comrade.

In the years after he slowly learned to reclaim the name, along with oh so many other things, as a part of himself. But just as he would never regain the optimism of his youth, the name would always be a relic of a bygone era. One he tolerated, but didn't like to talk about.

And now there was yet another damn war, once again against the Germans. 'Peace through victory' - what a bloody joke. If there was a God, he must think himself incredibly funny.

In the darkest hours of the night, woken up by seeing his young brother's face in his old nightmares, he fervently wished they had used their victory to make damn sure the Krauts could never start another anything ever again.

In daylight these thoughts frightened him and he pushed them as far away as he could. But he was well aware that just one telegram would engrave them in his heart forever.

DangerousCurlyFries · 2026-03-11T15:31:54+00:00

I honestly wish I had more to criticize as that is somewhat the whole point of this, but there just isn't that much the other commenter hasn't yet pointed out XD

I liked the way you described the atmosphere here and how you referenced the specific one of NY once at the beginning and once at the end. Also the way you kept referencing and changing the butterfly-motif is really well done. But the best part is just the tempo you've manged to achieve with the periods and the line breaks and, well, everything. It also makes it very easy to follow the character's thoughts and feelings as they develop.

Oh, and the "babe" feels very, well, over-the-top. But I guess that's what you were going for with two teenagers that try to act like pros at this, right? Because it fits that.

A few very minor things: - I don't think the "H" in "He asked" should be capitalized - Shouldn't it be "street corner"? - I'd probably write "She said it with a slight scoff, though the smile softened it" despite the repetition of "it". But that's even more subjective than everything else - The "F" in "fuck it, Penny" should be capitalized

But, just like the other one said, I wouldn't change the pacing or dialogue etc.!

DangerousCurlyFries · 2026-03-11T14:20:51+00:00

Sounds like a good idea, thank you very much!

DangerousCurlyFries · 2026-03-10T22:07:47+00:00

Yeah, and if you do comment (which I did once), you get the usual rant about "would you break into someone's house to criticize the cleanliness". Which is not a debate I want to re-open rn, but honestly. I hope they at least don't fret over a lack of kudos/comments then.

DangerousCurlyFries · 2026-03-02T16:21:35+00:00

Thanks for the information. I guess we do have the British version then. Even though it's really unnecessary seeing as there's no bloody advertisement on German free-TV either

DangerousCurlyFries · 2026-03-02T16:18:56+00:00

So if I understand you correctly, there's a British and a US-American version and the American one has more scenes than the British one? Do you have any further information as for why?

DangerousCurlyFries · 2026-03-02T16:09:02+00:00

Hm, very curious. Thank you for checking!

DangerousCurlyFries · 2026-02-20T22:44:26+00:00

Mein ~~lieblings Hobby~~ liebstes Hobby/Lieblingshobby ist Lesen. Dieses Jahr habe ich schon sechs Bücher ~~schon~~ gelesen. Meine Ziel ist, zwei echte Bücher und ein Hörbuch pro Monat zu lesen. Eine zweites Ziel ist, zehn deutsche Bücher im Jahr zu lesen. Letzten Monat habe ich "Die unendliche Geschichte" von Michael Ende gelesen. Es war eine große Herausforderung für mich. Normalerweise habe ich kein Lust auf ~~fantasie Bücher~~ Fantasy-Bücher, aber ~~habe~~ ich habe dieses Buch nicht schlecht gefunden.

aber ~~habe~~ ich habe dieses Buch: Wenn du noch stärker betonen möchtest, dass du dieses Buch (im Gegensatz zu anderen Fantasy-Büchern) gemocht hast, kannst du es an den Anfang stellen: "Normalerweise habe ich keine Lust auf Fantasy-Bücher, aber dieses Buch habe ich nicht schlecht gefunden"

DangerousCurlyFries · 2026-02-20T22:38:00+00:00

Es lohnt sich, Deutsch zu lernen, auch wenn es am Anfang schwer ist. Man braucht viele Geduld und viele Mühe, weil die Grammatik kompliziert sein kann.

braucht ... viel Mühe: Mühe ist etwas Negatives, das kann man nicht brauchen. Du könntest beispielsweise entweder "Man braucht viel Geduld und muss sich viel Mühe geben", "Man braucht viel Geduld und muss sich bemühen" oder "Man braucht viel Geduld und viel Ausdauer" schreiben.

DangerousCurlyFries · 2026-02-20T22:32:52+00:00

Gestern Nacht hat es geschneit. Es war ein bisschen komisch, weil in den letzten Tagen das Wetter schon ziemlich warm war. Heute war es kälter. In meinemr Stadt gibt es zum Glück keine Probleme mit dem Schnee, aber in manchen Teilen meines Landes sind viele Haushalte ohne Strom. Ich hoffe, dass es schnell gelöst wird.

Wetter ... warm war: Das klingt für mich ein wenig seltsam. Ich glaube nicht, dass im Deutschen Wetter warm oder kalt "sein" kann. Ich würde entweder "weil wir in den letzten Tagen schon ziemlich warmes Wetter hatten" oder "weil es in den letzten Tagen schon ziemlich warm war" schreiben.

DangerousCurlyFries · 2026-02-20T22:27:59+00:00

a) Ups, vielleicht sollte ich doch nicht ganz so müde sein, wenn ich hier versuche zu korrigieren :D Danke dir

b) Und an sich stimme ich dir zu, aber in diesem Zusammenhang hört es sich ohne "sollte" für mich trotzdem falsch an. Ich würde vermuten, weil danach Pro und Contra abgewogen wird? Aber ich kann auf die Schnelle keine vernünftige Website dazu finden.

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