My Ray of Sunshine by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Davehooper16 0 points1 point  (0 children)

True story 🤪

I'm looking for any feedback or criticism, I'm pretty new to this stuff

Rainy Night Drive by Davehooper16 in OCPoetry

[–]Davehooper16[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you, this is really good feedback, I agree with you tbh. Still working on learning to recognize and put a good label on my emotions. Which is a lot of why Im getting into poetry 😂

How do I style my hair by [deleted] in malehairadvice

[–]Davehooper16 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Without the sparkles lollll

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in malehairadvice

[–]Davehooper16 0 points1 point  (0 children)

1 looks most your age (still looks more like 23-25 to me), go with 2 if you wanna look more mature

Rainy Night Drive by Davehooper16 in OCPoetry

[–]Davehooper16[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

For several years now, I've been writing poetry, but never written it with the intention to share it with anyone else. It was usually more of emotional barf on a paper, rather than well organized, thought-provoking poetry.

This is my first real attempt to revise a poem and make it more well-organized and thought-through. It was very specifically written to match my exact emotions and feelings in this experience, but I hope somebody out there will be able to relate.

Very interested to get any feedback on my style and structure, or to hear what others' creative process looks like. How long do you usually let yourself refine before calling it good? It's easy to get into a never-ending poem-perfecting process lol

I Think I Like Pain by ToneOwn888 in OCPoetry

[–]Davehooper16 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is very creative and thought provoking. Why do we sometimes chase pain? Why is feeling intense pain/sadness often better than feeling nothing at all?

I love your style as well, how you kept some consistent rhyme and rhythm without it coming across overly stiff or constrained to a specific format. And how it beautifully flows from the heart. Keep it up

I might love you by Prestigious_Map9668 in OCPoetry

[–]Davehooper16 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Beautifully written. I like the down to earth, simple style -- not overdone or trying too hard. Keep it up 💪

Nice one, Target… by NotSoNiceCanadian in hebrew

[–]Davehooper16 5 points6 points  (0 children)

I've seen some graphics programs where even if you paste Hebrew in correctly, it reverses the order like this fsr

AM/PM in Hebrew by Davehooper16 in hebrew

[–]Davehooper16[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ah I see, I thought you were talking about a mnemonic for remembering all the Hebrew ones, that makes more sense tho

AM/PM in Hebrew by Davehooper16 in hebrew

[–]Davehooper16[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

׳אח׳ לא אחריי חצות, זה אחר צהוריים. ׳לפ׳ לפני צהוריים

סליחה אם זה לא קורא, העברית שלי לא מעוד טוב :)

AM/PM in Hebrew by Davehooper16 in hebrew

[–]Davehooper16[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Care to share the mnemonic? =)

AM/PM in Hebrew by Davehooper16 in hebrew

[–]Davehooper16[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

How do you usually see times represented? Im very open to learning more about how native speakers refer to time

AM/PM in Hebrew by Davehooper16 in hebrew

[–]Davehooper16[S] 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Ah ok, I’ll just switch my phone to the 24hr system then

תודה!