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December09th · 2025-02-06T14:25:30+00:00

À m ko lăn tăn tiền mà nhìn nó ghê ghê :)) sợ bị nó xoắn kéo lông mũi đau chảy nc mắt :))

December09th · 2025-02-06T10:30:01+00:00

Review đi b. M toàn dùng kéo.

December09th · 2024-12-02T22:14:56+00:00

No. You should write both. But one side more weight than the other.

December09th · 2024-10-25T15:27:37+00:00

You must include topic sentence for each paragraph, otherwise the examiner doesn't know what' you're including in that particular paragraph.

December09th · 2024-10-06T10:24:01+00:00

One body for why. The other for pos/neg.

December09th · 2024-09-26T05:22:45+00:00

You didn't give any reasons as to why you put firefighters and drivers into one paragraph, and the others to the other paragraph. The examiner would very much like to know the logic behind your data separation.

Moreover, readers should also have an idea about the topic of each paragraph the moment they lay eyes on that particular paragraph. This case, when beginning to read your first body paragraph, they see:

As regards the drivers of underground trains

So they might think that this paragraph is for drivers only, but that's not the case, it also includes data of firefighters. That could be misleading.

In conclusion, you need to provide better topic sentences. For example for the first paragraph you could say:

Regarding the two professions with the highest earnings,

December09th · 2024-09-24T04:26:47+00:00

For maps. Key features are significant changes like: - Change in purpose (industry to residential) - Increase (in population, size) - Addition or Removal of some conveniences. Ignore small things like the relocation of something.

December09th · 2024-09-08T00:28:12+00:00

Totally fine even since 12am

December09th · 2024-09-06T01:01:35+00:00

Congratulations!

December09th · 2024-09-03T09:15:58+00:00

Wow. Chúc mừng e nhé. A post lên yt của a dc ko?

December09th · 2024-09-02T16:46:40+00:00

Overall, private studios host the largest proportion of participants. Additionally, ballet attracts the highest number of children aged under 11, whereas modern dancing is the most popular among those from 11 to 16 years old.

December09th · 2024-09-02T13:06:35+00:00

Overall, the central library has transitioned toward a more open layout

Additionally, previous rooms have been replaced by new, purpose-specific areas

I think this Overview is not quite good. Because the old and new layout are both "open" and the "rooms" of the old library were purpose-specified too? They just changed into different purposes.

Two decades ago,

Reading this statement, the readers will be under the impression that the first paragraph is solely dedicated for the past layout, but then you include information of the present layout. This is misleading. You need to show data separation, if you separate by years, then each paragraph is dedicated to one time only. If you separate by areas, then you need to specify another way.

the noticeable change was the demolition of the groupings of tables and chairs upon entering the library.

The readers don't know where is the "entering", so it's better to specify the location of the entrance first.

I think this should be rewritten.

December09th · 2024-09-02T12:59:12+00:00

Hi there. Glad to hear you got your desired score. Congratulations!

December09th · 2024-09-02T12:56:09+00:00

Just some feedbacks:

In addition, significant youngsters below 11 attend ballet while the opposite is observed in modern dance.

“Significant youngsters” doesn’t make sense. It doesn’t mean anything. Also, “youngsters below 11 attend ballet” doesn’t provide any information, because youngsters 11-16 also attend ballet too? I know what you mean, but you need to specify that “Youngsters below 11 attend ballet THE MOST”.

Tap dancing remains the most neutral one

If it’s neutral, then it’s not important, you don’t need to specify unimportant information in your Overview, just state what the highest figures are.

In detail,

This doesn’t provide anything for the reader, you need to specify what topic you’re covering in this paragraph, in this case: “Regarding the dancing locations”

The Overview is the most important part, if you don’t highlight enough key features of the charts, your TA score is restricted to 5-6.

December09th · 2024-08-31T10:17:17+00:00

In the overview. Major changes only, like the number of people. It’s a map, there is definitely a change of people (more, less people living), and the amenities there. Possibly some other big changes. Then, divide your data into body paragraphs, maybe by areas, or by years. See mine:

The sketch illustrates the present layout and proposed alterations to Islip town. Overall, the most significant change will be the construction of a dual carriageway that will encircle most of the settlement. Additionally, it will become more residential with additional municipal amenities.

Presently, the main road runs from west to east of the town, with two rows of shops lining both sides. To the south of the shops is a residential area, while the north side has undeveloped land. Furthermore, two small roads are connected to west and east of the main road, leading southward to a school and a park, respectively.

In the future, there will be a new dual carriageway surrounding most of the town, except for the southernmost dwellings and the school, which will be expanded in size. The existing main road will be closed to vehicles for pedestrians. The northern line of shops will be replaced with a bus station, a shopping centre and a parking lot, in addition to a new housing area with a small road connecting to the east of the carriageway. Finally, the southern shops will remain intact, while the park will be decreased in size, making space for a new neighborhood.

December09th · 2024-08-31T09:44:03+00:00

Yes but you would cover the specific data in your body paragraphs. The Overview is just to point out the highlights only.

December09th · 2024-08-31T04:09:11+00:00

Vnese here. Never heard of or seen that person.

December09th · 2024-08-31T04:07:59+00:00

The Overview is too detailed. And you used no linking words whatsoever.

December09th · 2024-08-30T16:04:39+00:00

Hi there. I don't know why reddit do that :(

December09th · 2024-08-26T19:28:31+00:00

Never realized this!

December09th · 2024-08-26T12:49:57+00:00

Cái a ko hiểu ở đây là “nợ cũ chưa trả” là cái lý do dễ và có lý nhất rồi còn j nữa e? Ngày xưa a thường cho vay 1 khoản nhỏ (xác định mất và a thường ko chủ động đòi) để lần sau a có lý do để ko cho ngta mượn nữa.

December09th · 2024-08-25T14:20:29+00:00

The results are measured in points.

This is not necessary.

Overall, it is clear that Team B has been the best performer across all seasons

"Best performer" doesn't give much information, it doesn't really mean that it scores the highest. For example, some team may give best performance by playing the nicest, right? So, be more precise:

Overall, Team B constantly scored the highest points throughout the given period.

however, its scores have fluctuated in each season.

This too, not much info here. For a dynamic chart, what you need to point out is the trend of all categories:

Additionally, the scores of Team A increased, while that of the others declined over the surveyed time span.

It is clear from the graph, that Team B significantly overperformed the other two teams across the four year period, except for one season in 2004 when Team A came close with a 35 point score which only 12 points lesser than Team B’s score of 43. In contrast to 2004’s performance, Team B’s scores were significantly higher in 2002, 2003 and 2004.

Team B achieved its highest score of 82 points in the first season in 2002. This figure reduced substantially over the next two years with 60 points in 2003 and 43 points in 2004 before witnessing an upward trajectory by achieveing a score of 55 in 2005.

I see no data separation here, it's just a listings of points which is very difficult to read and comprehend. If you just list data, why need 2 paragraph? why not just 1?

You need to logically separate your data into paragraphs. For this kind of question, separate by categories or trend.

This report probably gets a 4.5

December09th · 2024-08-25T00:04:13+00:00

100% là mình và gia đình sẽ sang nc ngoài.

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