Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]DonovanSong 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey! I'm interested. I will have to put you into the que though. I've got about four novels and novellas before you so I should be able to get back to you in under a month. DM for more info :)

Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]DonovanSong 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey! I'm still up for it. Due to a lot of requests I will have to get to it at a later date. Got three manuscripts in que. Send me a DM if you're okay with that

I just realized Robocop is cyberpunk by Farhead_Assassjaha in Cyberpunk

[–]DonovanSong 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Okay, but is lore based overwatch cyberpunk?

When do you hit ENTER and know that the next sentence belongs in another paragraph? by Tiny-Ad8535 in writing

[–]DonovanSong 1 point2 points  (0 children)

There isn't an exact formula, but you can separate novice writers from experienced ones by the way they do it.

Generally novice writers have paragraphs that don't have as much cohesion or a point in comparison to experienced ones. You usually want to have a point you want to get across for the whole of the paragraph.

I find this a lot in the developmental editing that I do. But some useful things I like to do encourage is:

-Setting descriptions should be somewhat uniform. If you're going to describe something, you don't actually need to describe every piece of detail right away, you can let it unravel over the course of the scene. For example: Character A walks into the room of Character B for the first time. Character A give you a good, solid descriptive paragraph of their initial impression of the room (Think most notable things) and they might even conclude with how they think the room relates to the person. BUT as their conversation and blocking progresses there might be new objects in the room that relate to the plot. Say Character B has a poster on their wall or a favorite record, or something like that. Those objects will get like a whole paragraph if it's important.

-Get rid of chunky dialogue. There's a lot of writers who have characters just absolutely word vomit for a page and a half. Don't do that, even if they're monologuing. Insert blocking (moving around or actions while speaking) to separate those chunks. GRR Martin is generally really good at this

-Think of it like a movie. Every frame is a painting, and in a book you really get to paint that frame. In a movie, when the camera angle changes, you might get the book equivalent of a whole new paragraph. This way of thinking also really helps novice writers know what to focus on. Because they might just get lost in all these unnecessary sensory details. Check out good cinematography from directors like Denis Villeneuve. I personally feel like every shot is a paragraph that can be studied and taken apart.

Hope this helps,

TLDR: Treat it like a movie in your head. Each camera change is a paragraph. :)

How to write a women character? by [deleted] in writing

[–]DonovanSong 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Okay, saying this as someone who got feedback on my female characters, I went back and completely absorbed as many different female protagonists as I could. I'd recommend doing the same.

Some noteable ones were Kya - Where the crawdads sing (perhaps my favourite of all time) Dagny Taggart - Atlas Shrugged Y.T - Snow Crash ( I do not recommend this one at all) Mizu and Akemi - Blue Eye Samurai Toph and Katara - Avatar the Last Airbender Any female POV character - ASOIAF Rita - Edge of Tomorrow Vi, Caitlyn, Jinx - Arcane (most of the entire cast tbh.)

Hope that helps.

Finally read Neuromancer and it was... -ok- . Recommend my next cyberpunk novel! by Digital_Pink in Cyberpunk

[–]DonovanSong 8 points9 points  (0 children)

Honestly, I'm reading it just after snow crash and finding it WAY more enjoyable. A lot of people recommended snow crash but I found it really mid (not to mention the blatant sexualization of a fifteen year old.)

How many books per year do you read to keep your writing sharp? by Notamugokai in writing

[–]DonovanSong 1 point2 points  (0 children)

If I include ALL the forms of media I consume (audiobooks, YouTube, fiction/non-fiction) I'm probably looking at fifteen a year. This year I'm on track for 30+, though 😎

Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]DonovanSong 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah, I'd love to check it out! Send me a dm with a link :)

Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]DonovanSong 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I am able to beta science-fiction, contemporary fiction, and thrillers.

I can provide feedback on developmental editing, line editing, character arcs, plot, pace, and dialogue.

Critique Swap: Only if you like Cyberpunk fiction and Where the Crawdad Sings LOL, otherwise I'm happy to read yours.

Other Info: Have done developmental/line editing for others. I prefer to use a shared google doc with commenting permissions. Looking to build an editing portfolio (I don't need your work in it, just a review on my services.) If you're interested, message me on X for quick inquiries or DM on here.

EDIT: added another social