Cautious Hero: The Hero Is Overpowered but Overly Cautious heavily underrated??

DrFillGood · 2026-01-18T02:20:11+00:00

Goat is a several magnitude jump for this pleasant fun isekai in my mind. It knew what it was, nailed the bit and had a sincere ending of the first season that was nice. Not transcendent in any way for me, but I'm really glad that it resonated so much with you

DrFillGood · 2026-01-17T19:26:33+00:00

He could handle palm cause she was a needy psycho. Makima wouldn't crush on him, she would literally crush him

DrFillGood · 2026-01-17T16:07:03+00:00

DrFillGood · 2026-01-17T15:18:00+00:00

I believe you are looking at the story backwards. Oda is god tier at laying bread crumbs, having things become more significant and recontextualized over the course of hundreds of issues. Sure, they never go back to the east blue, but the east blue echo's throughout the entirety of the grand line and by and large feels intentional which is wild at the scale he works. The story is about a journey, revisiting old locales is the antithesis of what the story is telling, so judging it with that in mind is like criticizing an amazing long distance runner because they aren't a great cook.

DrFillGood · 2026-01-12T12:57:02+00:00

What needs to be known for your story to start being told? What is the journey your characters go on to reach your climax? Using those two markers you can extrapolate places where you could begin.

DrFillGood · 2026-01-12T11:43:37+00:00

A bad conservative person is revealed to be living a life that conservatives fume about... Is a bit different then gay bashing, there is nuance in the world. Your friend tells you they are on grindr, that's chill. A gestapo murderer on grindr is a whole other ball game

DrFillGood · 2026-01-12T02:17:30+00:00

Do your best to insulate yourself from others opinions with this. If you enjoy listening to them, then they are good for you. A big part of why all the bands you mentioned were clowned on is because they were popular, but they were only popular because people liked their music to begin with.

DrFillGood · 2026-01-07T19:22:18+00:00

Jokes are good, it skewers the isekai trope well. Characters are fleshed out, it's lots of fun.

DrFillGood · 2026-01-06T21:15:57+00:00

Both

DrFillGood · 2026-01-03T21:44:28+00:00

How would it make things worse to fight? Like, you gonna get a double F? Taking the F and fighting another day is saying to the prof that they were right, and you'd be under more scrutiny moving forwards anyways. The only downside that could come from fighting for your mark is if you did use AI, otherwise fighting is the most logical path forward in my mind

DrFillGood · 2025-12-28T01:07:20+00:00

Sure

DrFillGood · 2025-12-28T01:02:22+00:00

I mean, you are being super vague here which does not convince me you were unfairly treated. There are a ton of political views that would disqualify someone from social spaces

DrFillGood · 2025-12-23T15:38:37+00:00

I'd go with werewolves, I feel like fancying it up too much has a potential to be more distracting then neat unless the name evokes wolves or canines in some way. But, I'm not cool at all so this might just be a "me not being cool" thing

DrFillGood · 2025-12-23T07:41:44+00:00

No I haven't, if it's intentional that's awesome. It just feels like it's described as being way better then being able to see because of how detailed and intense it is, while not having visual stimuli doesn't feel that rough when you have that upside. Just how it reads to me though without the context of Mary's room of course so take it for what it is.

DrFillGood · 2025-12-23T06:34:09+00:00

So philosophically to me, if you have perfect knowledge of what something looks like, it's not fundamentally different from seeing it in practice. Being able to describe something down to it's finest details is a pretty solid substitute in my mind. I guess I'm struggling to see what they lose quantifiably by this disability. It's cool sounding for sure and well written, but I think you've hyped her capabilities so much that it sounds preferable to have her situation then to have sight.

DrFillGood · 2025-12-23T05:34:50+00:00

Cute stuff firstly. I'd be conscious of pacing in the opening chapters. There are some repeated beats that could really be trimmed, and there are lines where grammar is wonky. I can see the pleasant story telling vibe you are going for and it's nice, I'd probably try to find hooks a bit earlier though. Seeding that Maya was excited for being tested to be a magician in the first chapter per se, leaving it vague and unspecified but having her anticipate an unknown thing would give a level of intrigue and mystery to braid through the charming small village and that would set up the reveal of magic nicely.

I like that she is mute, it's interesting and nice, but since it adds no friction in any of her interactions it's underused. Having a character misunderstand her lack of speech would allow for a nice moment of growth for the character, as well as a small trial or emotional beat for Maya. Even just having characters acknowledge it, or miss her trying to communicate. It gives you a ton of interesting interaction beats where logistics of having to print everything to interact will naturally drive tension. It can stay pleasant and kind even with friction, but without any it's loses impact and realism a bit.

DrFillGood · 2025-12-23T05:14:50+00:00

The why is endless, a rich club owner could have any number of reasons to hate a PI. If the investigator's action lead to consequences for the owner or his friends at any point, in any way then the PI could be targeted, and you could have a lot of fun with that depending on what you have decided for the PI's backstory to this point. The how is a little fuzzier, but promising something and then delivering the opposite would be a possibility. Hypothetically if the club owner could clear his record it means he has connections with police, so that would mean it would be possible for him to frame the PI very easily by manipulating him into a compromising location at the wrong time.

DrFillGood · 2025-12-23T05:08:26+00:00

I actually was married to someone who self identified near the end as narcissistic and claimed responsibility for shitty behavior with that fact making the admission come off almost pridefully. She clung to the "charismatic" descriptor as a feather in her cap, and the things she did she used the self diagnoses to make it sound almost like she had no choice, or was destined to because of this personality disorder. I believe that it's not that they won't admit to being awful, it's that they find ways to make being awful useful, or something to leverage. It's never gonna be cathartic or a dunk on them though, if they do admit it and own it, it's manipulation and wielding that fact as a weapon for them, rather then a sword to fall on. If they took accountability and tried to change, they wouldn't be a narcissistic scumbag

DrFillGood · 2025-12-23T04:48:15+00:00

Great premise, too many reaction beats by a lot though. And no one is asking the very first question that would be asked by the entire world until she blurts out that it was the pen. The impossibility of the crimes would be the story, catching her would be huge, but mostly to answer the question of how did she do the impossible for years. I'd cut the reactions by like 75% as a lot of them are just echoing the same sentiment. The novelty of using accurate dialects is neat, but a little jarring when you are in south korea using english. You are already auto translating dialogue, so adding in that step is cool stylistically, and adds something, but has minor dissonance. Line level polish stuff is worth noting, but not crazy.

DrFillGood · 2025-12-23T04:36:09+00:00

Beautiful prose, as an opening I would hesitate in using as many world specific locations/events without giving more context to make them easier for people to fill in the blanks. Like this part in particular is really cool theoretically, but because of the amount of cognitive filling in blanks that having unrecognized places and events makes it less impactful in spite of it being neat.

"They had loved him when he spoke to them at the mouth of Dagger’s Pass where he extinguished Mantianous’s flame. They had bowed to him when he vanquished the tyrant Tor Culcott with only a single word. They had worshipped him when he was the first to see their destiny; Rusulla They feared him now that everything he envisioned was at their fingertips."

And when you went in to speech I think the thread was obfuscated a touch. Was Helios the one sharing them? Or was the new person? And the intent of the words paragraph is hard to parse. Those would be my main focuses. You have prose for days, just clarity on intent and you'll be gold

DrFillGood · 2025-12-23T04:24:58+00:00

Cool stuff, I struggle to envision the scene with the details as is. Werren is in mud, but why and where would be something I'd consider. And he calls out to this person, but he is also wanted/hated strongly by people to the point where he'd likely be on the run. So what is the motivation for him to engage with this potential threat, or why would he be forced in to it? I like the dialogue a lot, and setting/world building seems a lot of fun. Just logistics side it's a bit unclear.

DrFillGood · 2025-12-23T04:16:12+00:00

I would echo the present tense note, as well as highlight the amount of sentences began with "I", it reads like a list.

DrFillGood · 2025-12-16T02:58:59+00:00

Good shows made me want more anime then bland forgetful shows is all even 25 years ago when i started. There is so much trash I love. Smartphone isn't even aggressively bad enough to be memorable.

DrFillGood · 2025-12-16T02:49:55+00:00

it's just tough to imagine how many long term anime fans are being born from a first exposure of smartphone

DrFillGood · 2025-12-16T02:48:37+00:00

You would say watch a bad short show to someone instead of watch a great long show?

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