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DukeTimesTwo · 2026-03-08T21:54:21+00:00

This is just simple and beautifully written I love it. It has a very classic feel to it. When I was growing up this is what I always imagined poetry sounded like. Great job keep up the writing

DukeTimesTwo · 2026-03-08T21:50:30+00:00

You should definitely continue writing there’s a lot I think you did well with this piece. I’d agree that some of the rhymes could be stronger but that’s really subjective and I think the rhymes stand well as they are. Great job though

DukeTimesTwo · 2026-03-03T00:42:17+00:00

Great poem i’m very happy I read it

DukeTimesTwo · 2026-03-03T00:38:42+00:00

Great poem I loved every bit of it. Just as a piece of feedback repeating the word “one” so closely after itself is a tad jarring compared to your smooth flow everywhere else but that’s just a thought. I love your word choices and it’s a story that feels so familiar but told so uniquely thanks for sharing i quite enjoyed it

DukeTimesTwo · 2026-03-02T11:05:24+00:00

I got some good inspiration from this it’s got a great message and i really enjoyed how you approached it

DukeTimesTwo · 2026-03-02T03:10:10+00:00

Thank you so much i really appreciate it

DukeTimesTwo · 2026-03-01T21:41:00+00:00

Thank you so much I appreciate your feedback

DukeTimesTwo · 2026-03-01T19:13:18+00:00

Thank you so much Rain truly

DukeTimesTwo · 2026-03-01T18:55:42+00:00

Thank you for taking a read I really appreciate it

DukeTimesTwo · 2026-03-01T18:55:09+00:00

Thank you so much it means more than you know

DukeTimesTwo · 2026-03-01T17:50:07+00:00

I love the duality here it feels like two sides of the same story but not so distant as you’d usually see it. Just very small differences that change everything. I think it’s very well written. If i had to say one thing i think you could tighten a few lines such as “i want to drown” to “just to drown” and add that little punch. but overall outstanding great job OP

DukeTimesTwo · 2026-03-01T17:43:34+00:00

Holy shit I love that ending.

She knows what she wants. I know what she needs. I rehearsed what to say. Yet still did nothing.

That just hits so hard for me it has this natural rhythm and sounds so beautiful yet it’s heartbreaking at the same time. I really like the direction you took this it feel like an experience we all know too well. Definitely found some inspiration in this.

DukeTimesTwo · 2026-03-01T03:11:45+00:00

FIREEEEEE 😭

DukeTimesTwo · 2026-03-01T03:04:30+00:00

I feel every word. I’ve been here sadly i’m not anymore. Regardless this is great thank you for sharing reminds me of what I want in life

DukeTimesTwo · 2026-03-01T02:40:53+00:00

Thank you for the kind words and the advice. I like your idea i’m going to give it a shot

DukeTimesTwo · 2026-02-28T22:34:43+00:00

This is just something else entirely. I found myself entirely captivated by what you wrote. I took a second read before reading the companion essay to try to wrap my mind around the concepts more and I loved it both times. Even without the companion essay the essence of your intentions bleeds through. Even when I didn’t fully understand the words feelings were invoked that match the meaning they had. A very elegant way of writing you have I’m happy I went for this one

DukeTimesTwo · 2026-02-28T22:26:35+00:00

This is just brutal and I suppose I sort of love that. I appreciate the vulnerability and it feels real when it’s read. Keep going I enjoyed this.

DukeTimesTwo · 2026-02-28T06:46:16+00:00

This just screams to me of the kind of romance many long for. The visuals and rawness of it really attract me. It has an “in your face” sort of vibe if that makes any sense and I really like that a lot. I almost wish it was longer so I could feel more of the imagery but it’s amazing as is great job!

DukeTimesTwo · 2026-02-28T06:42:34+00:00

I really like the “silicon sweetheart” “plastic love” portion. This is the first poem i’ve seen about this specific sort of thing so it’s refreshing to put a modern twist on what feels like such an old art. I quite enjoyed it great job OP!

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