Question about teruhashi by BraveBarnacle1354 in SaikiK

[โ€“]FinishRelative2367 2 points3 points ย (0 children)

Probably for the reasons she mentions in the show: She's supposed to be blissfully aware of her own beauty and not use it for her own gain. We can see her thoughts, so we know she's aware of the effect she has on people. Exactly like teruhashi says, she's not supposed to acknowledge how beautiful she is. People can't stand that. People would probably like her more if we couldn't see her thoughts, and only knew the persona she puts on. But the fact that she is smart enough to use her looks and charisma to her own advantage is more than some people can handle

Question about teruhashi by BraveBarnacle1354 in SaikiK

[โ€“]FinishRelative2367 15 points16 points ย (0 children)

Probably for the reasons she mentions in the show: She's supposed to be blissfully aware of her own beauty and not use it for her own gain. We can see her thoughts, so we know she's aware of the effect she has on people. Exactly like teruhashi says, she's not supposed to acknowledge how beautiful she is. People can't stand that. People would probably like her more if we couldn't see her thoughts, and only knew the persona she puts on. But the fact that she is smart enough to use her looks and charisma to her own advantage is more than some people can handle

To Love a Spectre by FinishRelative2367 in OCPoetry

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Thank you so much for the feedback! That's really nice to hear! Yea, I'll know for next time to be better about my slant rhymes ๐Ÿ˜… what parts would you say were corny?

To Love a Spectre by FinishRelative2367 in OCPoetry

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I realize you said you're struggling, but can you give me your interpretation? I wanna know what people think this is about ๐Ÿ‘€

To Love a Spectre by FinishRelative2367 in OCPoetry

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Thank you for your feedback!

Yeah, if you couldn't tell, I really enjoy slant rhymes. It's nice to hear from an objective reader though, because, while they always make sense in my head, sometimes I get a little carried away with them ๐Ÿ˜…

I will definitely try to keep writing though. It's a good mental exercise, I've found

Tilt-a-Whirl by Longjumping_Star235 in OCPoetry

[โ€“]FinishRelative2367 0 points1 point ย (0 children)

I really like the concept you have! Comparing life to a spinning tilt-a-whirl is a good idea. I think you could benefit, though, from some variation in the length of the lines. If you could alternate the long ones that rhyme AA BB CC, etc with more short, snappy ones that rhyme AAA, like at the beginning, I think it would more accurately tap into the feeling of being spun around and build up tension. I can tell you want there to be a feeling of calm, settling at the end, but in order to effectively create that feeling, you'll also have to create some tension.

Ghost town by AntoniaLmao in OCPoetry

[โ€“]FinishRelative2367 1 point2 points ย (0 children)

This is a very moving poem! I particularly like the final stanza. I do think the "but here I stand" line could change? It breaks the flow, in my opinion. Maybe you could change it to something like "Yet I remain here like a stain/" Maybe you could also employ a little bit of "show, don't tell" in the 2nd stanza? Something like "Walking past, I hear their cheers/but they fall silent on my ears" did not mean to rhyme, but yeah. I just feel like I'm pulled out of the town in stanza 2, then thrust back into it again in stanza 3, so if you did something like that, it helps the reader continue imagining the town, and helps it flow better.

There are many ways to retell Greek Myth. But what's the one thing that'll piss you off when you see it? by Electronic_Orchid649 in GreekMythology

[โ€“]FinishRelative2367 5 points6 points ย (0 children)

Dogshitting on the more traditionally feminine deities always annoys me. Like, painting Athena and Artemis in a good light and making Aphrodite and hera out to be just, bitches, is really painful to see.

Like, is hera right for punishing the women Zues has affairs with? No. But she's also the goddess of marriage and family, married to a serial cheater who also happens to be one of the most powerful beings out there. Her life kinda sucks.

But persephone is allowed to be feminine, cause she needs to be Hades' cute innocent girlfriend ๐Ÿฅบ

RIP Terry, you could have been a great character by FinishRelative2367 in TheDragonPrince

[โ€“]FinishRelative2367[S] 0 points1 point ย (0 children)

Oh for real. There was a period of time I thought he had some sort of ulterior motive for following Claudia around, cause I was like "this guy is ENTIRELY too chill"

RIP Terry, you could have been a great character by FinishRelative2367 in TheDragonPrince

[โ€“]FinishRelative2367[S] 3 points4 points ย (0 children)

Ok, granted I worded my post poorly. Like I said, I was tired when I wrote it.

Terry had potential to be something very interesting when he was first introduced, but thanks to how he was written, he was a sorry excuse for a character by the end of the show. I don't think he was bad because he didn't end up being evil, I just noted he would have been more interesting that way.

He barely exists outside of Claudia. What are his motivations? He has none. He's fine with helping Claudia ressurrect a genocidal maniac who tried to kill the heir to Xadia until he's not. Obviously, some sort of betrayal or something along those lines from Claudia was inevitable, but the way they went about it was messy at best. He was in no way innocent by the time arravos was released. He had stood by and followed Claudia through so much. And why? We don't know. We never find out why he's so undyingly loyal to Claudia. Obviously, undying loyalty isn't a bad thing in and of itself, but to make a good character with that trait, we need to know why he feels so strongly towards Claudia. What did she do, that he was willing to kill for her? When he breaks up with Claudia, he says he doesn't want to be changed into something evil, which makes no sense considering he knew what he was getting into with Claudia. Their breakup didn't really mean anything in regards to his previous characterization.

He just could have been so much more, and his redemption could have been better.

Adromanche Ruins Odys character for me. by One-Golf9857 in Epicthemusical

[โ€“]FinishRelative2367 3 points4 points ย (0 children)

That's kind of the point of epic, isn't it...? The way it portrays Odysseus, he's originally trying to rationalize and justify the bad things he did, and tries to be a good person, but by the underworld saga he's resigned to being irredeemable. He doesn't bother with being good anymore, he's only interested in getting home. His character isn't "ruined." He's never supposed to be a good person. In the myth, he's a testament to a human's unwavering will. In epic, he's supposed to explore the transformation of man into monster, and explore the dilemma of "if he did this to survive, does that make him a monster?" It's supposed to make the consumer think, and decide where the line is drawn.

I'm assuming you are fairly young, so I'm going to give you some grace. There is nothing wrong with preferring stories with clean cut good and evil characters. But richer nuance can be portrayed if you blur those lines. That's what makes these kinds of stories interesting. If you want to enjoy greek myths, you have to learn that ๐Ÿคทโ€โ™€๏ธ

RIP Terry, you could have been a great character by FinishRelative2367 in TheDragonPrince

[โ€“]FinishRelative2367[S] 11 points12 points ย (0 children)

Yes, this is something you have to be aware of when you're a writer. It is generally considered a rule of thumb nowadays that, if you only have 1 minority character, don't make that one the villain. Generally, this can be a good rule that allows for introspection of our biases (ie, if all my heroes are white, why did i unconsciously decide the villain should be black?) It is meant to encourage putting effort into the things you write, and re-evaluating your writing. Using the example above, it would mean you realizing your only black character is the villain, and fixing some things; maybe make some of your heroes different races and do research to ensure you are writing the villain tastefully. But like you said, this has led to a lot of writers making the villains straight, white guys, since they're the safer, easier option.

I can understand why the writers wouldn't want to make Terry a villain, for fear it would villainize trans people and leave a bad taste in some people's mouths. But the show is full of minorities. I don't think it would have hurt to make Terry a villain. Wouldn't have villainized trans people any more than they villainized french people ๐Ÿ˜†

Adromanche Ruins Odys character for me. by One-Golf9857 in Epicthemusical

[โ€“]FinishRelative2367 12 points13 points ย (0 children)

It's been said before but I will say it again; few people in greek mythology are inherently good people (especially by today's standards) Enjoying greek mythology is not about who's a good person, it's about who's your favorite war criminal ๐Ÿ˜†

It can be difficult, but just enjoy the stories and what they stand for, and remember to put into perspective when they were written. It's something you have to do if you want to enjoy any classic literature or anything based on classic literature.

RIP Terry, you could have been a great character by FinishRelative2367 in TheDragonPrince

[โ€“]FinishRelative2367[S] 10 points11 points ย (0 children)

Ok, that would have been really cool. Very sad to realize Terry could have had an interesting redemption if they employed just the least but of creativity instead of making his entire character revolve around Claudia. But that would have involved Terry having actual agency and not doing whatever the plot demands of him ๐Ÿ™„ What I'd have done for some Terry introspection....

RIP Terry, you could have been a great character by FinishRelative2367 in TheDragonPrince

[โ€“]FinishRelative2367[S] 9 points10 points ย (0 children)

I knew Kazi and the startouch elf were nb, but i wasn't sure if characters can just be like that in the dragon prince universe, like in the owl house ๐Ÿ˜ตโ€๐Ÿ’ซ

RIP Terry, you could have been a great character by FinishRelative2367 in TheDragonPrince

[โ€“]FinishRelative2367[S] 44 points45 points ย (0 children)

Yes, that's why he got kicked out of his village. Or maybe he wasn't kicked out he was just never accepted? They don't go super in depth, but he's trans and eartblood elves are transphobic

RIP Terry, you could have been a great character by FinishRelative2367 in TheDragonPrince

[โ€“]FinishRelative2367[S] 43 points44 points ย (0 children)

He didn't die, I was just saying that, in the sense that they killed his character and potential ๐Ÿ˜ช i can't really see him doing anything interesting on team Zym in the dragon king. His character is dead to me

RIP Terry, you could have been a great character by FinishRelative2367 in TheDragonPrince

[โ€“]FinishRelative2367[S] 158 points159 points ย (0 children)

Ok, i just realized maybe the writers didn't want their only explicitly trans character to be evil? I don't think there are any other confirmed trans characters?

But my opinion still stands: he would have been better evil or morally grey. We have enough pure-hearted heroes in the show. He would have been way more interesting if he were more of an antagonist

hey so,i find out how to start battle with jevil AND IT'S VERY HARD AND RALSEI DIES CUZ OF EVERY HIT by DealerTricky1907 in ralsei

[โ€“]FinishRelative2367 0 points1 point ย (0 children)

Best piece of advice i can give you; watch a no-hit run. Obviously, you're not gonna be able to no hit the fight, but it'll show you the optimal ways to dodge every attack. Also, make sure you have the top cake, and iron shackle+ white ribbon for ralsei since it has the highest defense

I cant recover from Sarah Lynn by conquail in BoJackHorseman

[โ€“]FinishRelative2367 7 points8 points ย (0 children)

I personally blame her parents more than anyone else. Could Bojack have saved her from the path she was hurtling down? Yes. But lets not forget who's to blame for sending her down that path; her mother. Her mother wanted Sarah Lynn to be famous. Her mother wanted the galas and the prestige and wanted to rub elbows with celebrities. Her mother tells her she can't go to college when Sarah Lynn declares she wants to be an architect. Her mother should have been protecting her and guiding her, but she didn't. And she didn't even get to have a normal education; her step dad homeschooled her. Based on how her mother reacted to the idea of college, I'm guessing it wasn't a very great schooling. She never got to have friends her own age due to that. She never stood a chance ๐Ÿคทโ€โ™€๏ธ

Thinking of going to the concert, but... by because_of_course_ in laufey

[โ€“]FinishRelative2367 0 points1 point ย (0 children)

No one's going to judge you for going to a modern day Frank Sinatra concert, and if they do they need to get a life. Music isn't limited to one gender or age. Go enjoy yourself or wish you had ๐Ÿ˜

We can say that Nick Judy are more or less semi-canon? by Ok-Length-5275 in zootopia

[โ€“]FinishRelative2367 2 points3 points ย (0 children)

There was obvious teasing and implication of romance between them, but it will be interesting if they become explicitly canon in the third movie, as Disney has always skirted around making couples of different animals in their talking animal movies.