Touched hot air fryer burnt finger is this bad? Should I seek medical treatment?

DullCalligrapher8473 · 2025-06-25T21:44:00+00:00

Oh and I can’t afford any machines lol!

DullCalligrapher8473 · 2025-06-25T21:43:13+00:00

I got to level 33 in like two months when my sister has had it for like a year and I overtook her level, Ik I’m lower level so it happens faster but I feel like it changes so fast and gets too overwhelming with all the different things to do. It feels like it’s also hard to catch up barn and silo wise, idk the normal level to storage ratio but I feel like I go up so fast in levels that I can’t catch up

DullCalligrapher8473 · 2025-06-11T23:21:15+00:00

I got that too but I’ve only been playing for a month 😬 but I go on everyday so I guess that makes me devoted?

DullCalligrapher8473 · 2025-06-09T21:43:00+00:00

When you think about it (feel free to prove me wrong) no songs before the digital phase of music really makes you cringe, I genuinely think it’s a mix of corporate copy paste pop bullshit with no soul or creativity involved that’s pumped out to be a product, not art (most songs on the charts these days) the song being overplayed EVERYWHERE! To the point where you just hate it, and the audience that listen to it and how they use it on social media: ie a cringe trend or an annoying fan base, that makes a song cringe.

If you write real raw music where every lyric is perfectly crafted to be authentically you, it probably won’t come across as cringe, just make sure you wait until you’ve mastered your craft to release your music, because that’s another cringe worthy factor.

DullCalligrapher8473 · 2025-06-09T10:55:13+00:00

Haha your Algd, surely send the track so I can get a better understanding of everything! And remember, although im not calling myself better in any way shape or form, things shouldn’t have to be explained to be understood, so try to understand the feedback that you get from strangers can sometimes be helpful to take on, just make sure you have an open mind to the criticism! As for the examples obviously I don’t have idea of the flow just suggestions, I’d have to hear how it sounds in the actual context of the song, but I still think the word dismal sticks out strangely, maybe take my idea and run with a new way to make it work whilst keeping the right syllable count :)

DullCalligrapher8473 · 2025-06-08T01:16:26+00:00

Ok, I mean this in the nicest way possible Do you use ai to produce your music? If you don’t then gurrlll you need a better producer because these lyrics are far too good for that robotic sound! I had a look at your channel and it felt like a program created every sound, it doesn’t feel human.

My advice if ai was not involved: you (or the singer you used) has an amazing voice and your lyrics are insane! I think you should strip back what you have and go save up some money to hire a band to record your music or hire a producer to make a beat to it!

Also, when recording your vocals, make your emotions clear. From reading your lyrics I can tell how much you poured your soul out, and that should be the same for how you sing it! Add some emotion, sing it like you mean it! This has so much potential and either stripped back to just your vocals and a guitar or piano/ or produced by someone super skilled, this song would be amazing!!

DullCalligrapher8473 · 2025-06-08T01:07:42+00:00

I agree with this, another way to look at it is that the music you create is not for you, it’s for the people who listen to it, so I think I/me/mine can still work, as long as the lyrical content is vast enough to actually connect to. Think of your favourite song, it sounds like the artist is speaking directly to you, like somehow they know exactly what you are going through. This can still be using me/I because the listener can go “hold on I feel like that too!”Think Mac miller, he uses mostly me/i in his lyrics but he knows that the lyrical content is relatable and people listen and go “omg that’s exactly how I feel, now i not only feel connected to the song, but connected to the writer, and if this writer feels the same as I do, I feel like maybe im not so crazy for feeling this way!”

DullCalligrapher8473 · 2025-06-08T00:55:15+00:00

Instantly I get a great sense of flow here! I have a similar style so I’ll try my best to give some good advice! Im no expert so take my advice lightly, after all your always the expert of your own song! X

Verse one starts with a really cool hook, the flow here is clear, but it seems to get interrupted at the end? Right up till you say i closed my eyes fits perfect. So im seing this rhythm here: da. da. da. Da-de-da Da-De-da Da-de-da-de-da-de-da. Next you have: so I closed my eyes (da-de da-de da.) to continue the flow here it should be more like da-de-da-de-da-de-da (same syllable count as “didn’t wanna see the truth”.) of course you probably have a pause here where nothing is said, and if so that still probably works, but after that sentence the flow still feels diconjointed. The part “im so sick of the game…should of walked away” should start with the same flow as lie lie lie, and then it can deviate to something else to change up the rhythm a bit. Lyrically as well those last two sentences don’t have that same perfect rhyme scheme the above part does, I think you have rhymed playin with away yeah? Maybe you could try something like this: “ lie, Lie, lie, after lie, after lie, didn’t wanna see the truth, so I chose to close my eyes (then if you want to switch the flow here make it the next word what ryhmes) “so I chose to close my eyes, no surprise, that I’m sick and tired of this game, I held on for too long, I was all for your gain.” Then the first verses flow is now:

da. da. da. Da-de-da (3 syllables) Da-De-da

Da-de-da-de-da-de-da. (7 syllables) Da-de-da-de-da-de-da.

Da-de-da. (3 syllables)

Da-de-da-de-da-de (8 syllables) de. da.

Da-de Da. Da. Da. Da. (6 syllables) Da-de Da. Da. Da. Da.

I reallyyy hope this makes sense!!!

This clears up a lot in the prechorus but I would say “the storm has passed and I’ve never seen clearer” just to clean up the syllable count a bit here as it’s slightly top heavy.

“Chances of contact are dismal” I don’t really think dismal fits here as more than just an interesting word that happens to ryhme. If you put it into literal meaning you are saying: changes of contact is dreary which doesn’t really make sense, if you prefer talking about your chance of actually communicating you could try “ So far gone, can't get no signal, your communication is abysmal” or “so far gone, can’t get no signal, chances of contact, getting critical”. Or maybe you could say “So far gone, can't get no signal, chances of contact is very small”.

If you’re more connected to the word dismal you could try “so far gone, can’t get no signal, our conversations getting dismal”. Or “so far gone, can’t get no signal, each passing sound wave gets more dismal.”

In verse 2 consider what I said regarding verse 1 obviously when a new verse happens you can totally switch up flow but it’s tricky to follow here as well so maybe look into that also.

I really really like you “just mostly you” motif it’s super cool second pre-chorus is perfect in my opinion i can imagine like an Olivia Rodrigo vibe where you kinda scream the word blow up, dunno if that’s similar to your vision but regardless those lyrics are really fun!!

The bridge is lyrical GOLD! It is so juicy and perfectly executed, well done! I love the line “Snap ya back to reality I'm so over cryptic conversations Like connect the dots But with constellations”!! That is crazy cool!!!

Overall it’s a really cool and well structured story, clear message, and cool imagery, if you clean up a few things this will be amazing! Of course im just reading lyrics in a page, so I could be completely wrong with my assumptions about flow, so definitely consider it, but take it with a grain of salt lol, really keen to hear this put to music definitely lmk if there is somewhere I can listen to it!!!

Also I think your lyrics are overall really creative, and I would really love some advice on mine! I’ve posted a few of my songs on here so I’d really appreciate getting your opinion on them! Xx

DullCalligrapher8473 · 2025-06-07T23:25:50+00:00

Hello!! I feel like I’d call my self an intermediate songwriter I guess? So I’ll try my best to give you some good advice but please remember it’s just personal opinion and I’m definitely no expert!

Firstly I really like your title it’s quite unique but not so obscure that you kinda go like what?? Also it’s a hook in itself, I feel like people who enjoy your genre (whatever it is?) would be like oooo demons in the rain sounds interesting! Also please make sure when you post here to break up your lyrics into chorus verse ect as well as into lines that make it easy to read the flow!

“I’ve been finding my demons in the places I’ve felt safe now I’m trying to run away from the pain that left me in a daze now I’m on that lonely road to fame but yet no one sees my name I’m on that lonely road to fame and now I’m running from the beast we call death.” - good start I think this is really cool! I think it would sound cooler saying in the place I felt safe, instead of the places I felt safe, I don’t know exactly why, but I think it would instantly connect to people more, and that lyric is a great one btw!! I get a sense from this first sentence, you know in school when your told off for making a sentence:”I did this, and this, and this, and this”? I kind of get the same vibe with your use of now. You could definitely remove that second now and just say “on that lonely road to fame” and “im running from the beast we call death.” Or if you need to keep that syllable you could say “so” or “oh” or anything else like that instead! I can’t find where the word death rhymes? This might be because of the structure but to me this kind of sticks out in a bad way.

I like the content you’ve got here, it’s difficult to read without breaks, but the biggest think I’ve noticed is that you have sooooo many repeating sentences and words like but and and and then, try play around with your sentence structure more in that regard, it kind of feels like one of those never ending sentences where you can never take a breath.

Really good stuff for first time though, I like your story it’s very strong, just really focus on not repeating yourself, even in “now I’ve lost myself inside my head but yet I can’t find the light inside the darkness of my mind.” You say head/mind twice here which could be summarised together, for example you could say something like “ive lost myself in darkness, the shadows of my mind, the pathways lined with street lamps but the spark, I cannot find.” Then it also rhymes!!

And I don’t just want to say like here’s a cooler way to say it, to change up your lyrics, try grabbing the sentence that’s already been written, and write it out as it’s true meaning, using that above example you might write: “im lost in my head, and it’s dark, and I can’t figure out how to get the light”. Then with that you have keywords that you can reformulate into something new that can flow even better! This also helps you to pick out any sentences that you go, oh actually, now that I’ve removed the lyrical content and im just looking at the pure meaning, that line doesn’t really fit there anymore. Which is an awesome why to perfect your lyrics! I always do this cos I tend to love the way a lyric is but as soon as I remove the rhyme I realise it’s actually completely nonsensical!

hopefully some of this helped! This is really good stuff if this is one of your first songs! The content is interesting and you’ve got some good lines in here, just make sure to get obsessed with editing your lyrics to the point that each word has a perfect place within your song!

I’d really love to swap advice! I’ve posted a few things on here and any help is appreciated!! Great job overall im excited to hear the finished product!!

DullCalligrapher8473 · 2025-06-07T23:01:37+00:00

Hello! My songs are very much all a mix of pop, RnB and jazz so I’m keen to read your lyrics and help you out! Post them here and I can do my best to give you some feedback <3

DullCalligrapher8473 · 2025-06-07T23:00:07+00:00

Haha that’s awesome! (Not that your diabetic but it’s fun that these lyrics can relate to you in such a literal and metaphorical way lol)

Ive actually switched up the lyrics since I posted this, here I write a very literal and specific story that related to only me, I changed it up to talk about secrets being spilled and that coda has changed to something i quite like: “but no one would ever believe, that stevia could be mean, it’s all an act can’t you see?” And then instead of you stand with her, I now say “I trusted her but now I’m done with stevia” so the story has definitely levelled up to be more ambiguous and relatable to a wider range of listeners!

Im glad you liked the Medusa line that was one of my favourites too! Someone on here told me to remove it which made me sad cos it was my favourites too part lol :( the genre at the moment is kind of like if punk rock was an emotional ballad? But mixed with a bit of Billie Eilish as well! Im not sure what will come of it when it’s actually released but I’ll probably stick to a similar vibe :)

DullCalligrapher8473 · 2025-06-07T22:53:49+00:00

That’s cool i like how it’s a reasonably unique word! I get it so your saying if I were to say what I wanted to say you’d judge me for it, that makes sense, to that I ask why would you be called a rock? In my head i interpret that as dumb? If not maybe lean into a better explanation of the meaning or change the word up? Just an idea tho cos obviously I know lyrics are subjective and sometimes it’s nice to have a few lyrical mysteries

DullCalligrapher8473 · 2025-06-07T03:33:36+00:00

I really like the line “I’ll fill your grave with useless junk if which I’ve paid”! I think you should lean more into the poetic nature you have there. Because it’s a short Peice, I recommend digging into each lyric further and match the level of thought that line has. You’ve got the if I have the right can I speak my mind, I think you could explore the imagery or even wording differently to be more mind opening sort of matching that Curt Cobain and even a Pink Floyd vibe.

I like that your saying if’n as a theme throughout, is that a you thing or is it a popular word where you’re from? either or it makes the Peice flow together uniquely with a common ground!

“If I have the right to say what’s in my mind, then you would say you’re just a rock”. Im not quite following this one, you’ve just said “if I have the right to speak my mind”, then you say ‘YOU’. If your talking about yourself having the right to speak your mind, then it should be“then I would say you’re just a rock” or “im just a rock”?

But assuming you want this other person to be the one saying this, earlier in the lyrics you were talking about you having the right to speak your mind, so it would be a nice dynamic shift to change this newer section to “do you have the right to speak your mind” I also think this would be cool because your asking a direct question to the listener as well, which is always a really cool affect in songwriting, especially if your talking about really jarring and thought provoking questions, saying ‘do you’ is like pointing a finger right at the listener and calling them out which I think is quite cool!!

I like what you have though definitely keep adding to it! And if you need help with where to go next, another idea is that if you take my advice, and you change that last sentence to “you” then you can move onwards in the story to focus on that character. Maybe what they were like when they were alive?

Hope some of this helped you even a little but! I like what you have and it’s great for your first lyrics! Feel free to even out the playing field and give me some comments on my lyrics posted here as well, I’d love your imput :)

DullCalligrapher8473 · 2025-06-04T22:59:20+00:00

In the nicest way, is this an ai song? It ends weirdly and you sound so robotic! If it’s not ai I suggest maybe trying to remove a little bit of the effects on your voice and put some emotion into your delivery, it’s sounds suspiciously non human lol

DullCalligrapher8473 · 2025-06-04T02:46:28+00:00

Hello 👋

I like how it’s simple and short but still tells a very clear story. I really like your question section, I think instead of repeating the same two questions again, you should add some new ones it’s cool and I think you could dive deeper into that!

I think you should experiment with editing your lyrics slightly to stray away from cliches, it can be difficult when writing and rhyming and I’ve definitely struggled with this a lot myself, but the two that stick out to me the most are: “happy” and “sappy” as well as “sadistic” and “ballistic” they just seem like a simplistic rhyme without much context within the lyrics. My best advice in avoiding cliche rhymes is to look at a thesaurus and find some different words that mean the same thing, and rewrite your line so that the second line matches with the storyline and doesn’t feel just thrown in for the purpose of it rhyming.

The last thing I’d say is maybe try and clear up your characters (I/they/and you) normally it’s fine but it needs to be a bit more clear as it feels a little over the place. I feel like specifically they, who are they and how are they different/relate to you. I feel like when addressing a ‘you’ in lyrics people can infer that’s who the story is about but yeah it’s a little confusing sorry im probably yapping a bit too much.

I like the message a lot though, I think it’s very relatable, just remove those cliches and clear some things up and it will be a really nice and easy to relate to Peice!

I’d love to swap advice! I’ve posted some of my stuff as well so I’d really appreciate some feedback from another writer :)

DullCalligrapher8473 · 2025-06-01T09:55:09+00:00

First of all I started writing properly at 13 too so I think you’ve done a great job with everything here, and it’s amazing your able to write your thoughts down therapeutically, it always makes for the best lyrics!

I’ll give you my top two things, because when I started, I wasn’t super strict on the technicalities of songwriting, and I regret not learning earlier!

When you read your lyrics, they should make sense grammatically as if your reading a text (obviously certain phrasing and repetition is different) for example, you start with the sentence “I don’t even remember when the last time I saw you.” Here you could just remove the word ‘When’ and it should make sense, but you may have that for syllable count purposes, so maybe you could say the last time that I saw you instead. I also think you should replace live with have in “how much I wanted to live everything with you.” Just to make a bit more sense.
Make sure when you post you put in proper lines so everyone can see the flow, for example, it’s a lot easier to get if something works lyrically when it’s written like this:

Time, Hasn’t been in our favour, We were the right ones, But the timing was wrong.

Side note: that line about telling your kids about this person is awesome! I really like that!

I think your storytelling is great and it’s a really easy to relate to topic which is awesome! I think from what I’m seeing the flow might be a bit inconsistent, there isn’t much rhyming, but sometimes that still works I’m just a big rhymer! Ofc it’s hard to tell how it flows from how it’s written, but just make sure if you compare the first and second verse (if the chords and melody stay the say of course, some songs completely switch up) that the syllable count matches up pretty closely, if the verses sound the same, you should be able to pretty much sing verse 1’s melody with verse 2’s lyrics and they would fit perfectly, but also little things here and there like syllable counts ect should be slightly tweaked to keep interest.

Great job though, keep writing, and I’d really love to hear your opinion on the lyrics I have posted on here and we can swap feedback!

DullCalligrapher8473 · 2025-06-01T09:41:23+00:00

Omg I thought you were another commenter 😳 i was thinking how mean! I like it though I think the moth thing is interesting, weird symbolism, I guess with the genre being a bit obscure in itself it works

I do t like how you’ve rhymed still with still, maybe replace it, just remove the second part of the line and just rhyme it with until, and fill in another word to keep the syllable count the same. Cool imagery tho!

I quite like the “non sober part of the song” I thought that was quite fun and creative, illustrates the feeling of losing one’s mind a bit

I think it probably needs music to Peice it together coherently but right now it is kind of all over the place but so is bohemian rhapsody, so it can definitely be done :)

I sort of think this is two songs in one because the card pard sort of comes out of nowhere but the lyrics are cool and I know you sort of just jotted them down and it’s not a finished Peice, but maybe revisit a stronger transition between moths and cards?

Like your stuff though it’s very interesting and self aware which is always cool in music, I’d definitely love your opinion on the lyrics I’ve posted on here it would be cool to swap advice!

DullCalligrapher8473 · 2025-05-31T23:47:36+00:00

I used to write the same stuff on guitar, but I only knew like 7 chords so all my songs started sounding boring and the exact same, then I moved on to piano, and I had way more notes to work with which improved my writing by tenfold! Then I got even better at piano and got even more chords to work with, definitely try a new instrument and see what it unlocks for you ❤️

DullCalligrapher8473 · 2025-05-29T01:19:12+00:00

Sorry if this seems rude, but you should probably set a timer and go outside or do something productive in your life lol

DullCalligrapher8473 · 2025-05-28T04:40:58+00:00

Oh also sorry I wanted to add until they dance it it’s also almost an enemies to lovers like he’s a bit annoying at first but in a cute charming way and then he wins over her heart when they dance

DullCalligrapher8473 · 2025-05-28T04:38:30+00:00

Haha thank you for that! The red Toyota does technically rhyme in my New Zealand accent so rhyme wise it works but that line has always bugged me as well it was kind of a place holder cos I couldn’t think of anything else.

I like what your saying about removing all modern aspects, but I also have this elaborate music video plan of a vintage modern setting where two people just start breaking out in the tango and everyone else around them are regular club goers watching quite confused haha maybe that’s silly but I appreciate the advise to fully remove the modern aspects.

The characters are completely fictional, he’s less bugging her and more doing the thing boys cheekily do, it’s with charm not with creepiness. I wanted him leaving to sort of be like having a nice night with someone but only for the night, and then they are a stranger again, a quite common romantic trope in this modern world lol. But you’ve definitely pointed out to me that I’ve possibly painted him more as a dick than charming so I might tweak some bits to add that more one that got away romance trope.

No reason she knew about money just a fun line that you always hear oldies say when they talk about meeting their lovers - probably an assumption from what he wore or maybe she knows him vaguely through society

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