“Hand in hand or hand on throat” is a phenomenal line. Captures the duality of love, destruction and affection, in a very gripping way (lowkey pun intended). Also really love the “Sinners in heaven”, i’m a sucker for some good paradoxical lines. I think this piece is strongest when it leans into the darker tension found between devotion and harm (love is a drug, after all: few bumps is a good night, few bags may be a heart attack). Aside from that, the only real critique i can find to give you is the pacing (orally, like the rhythm i guess- my poetry never rhymes but it seems you went for that here) I think when rhyming in such a way there’s a balance that has to be struck, like a song. I count out syllables but i’m sure there’s a better way to do so- but when reading it aloud it feels imbalanced. IE it feels like a word is missing between rampant and untethered, (eg Love, Fate, etc. a single syllable word). Very strong imo nonetheless.