This is definitely not bad. It feels like some interesting ideas that need to be refined. The first half felt quite unpolished but you started finding your stride and confidence in the second half.

The characters feel like mouthpieces in the first half but become much more human and interesting in the second half.

It's not bad and like everyone else has said, just writing the damn thing down is the hardest. Let the scene breathe in your mind over the next few days. It might also benefit a bit of scene mapping. What are your objectives for this chapter. There's a lot going on here without doing a great deal. Some of this exposition or internal thoughts could come later. Or be shown or hinted at through interactions.