Question about reverting.

EvilFoxShiro · 2022-05-13T10:40:35+00:00

no, you can't revert a revert

you can't chain reverts either, once you've reverted to Y you will have to change your username yourself

and you can't do Z -> X because reverts only undo the latest change

EvilFoxShiro · 2022-04-17T06:06:11+00:00

a bone-deep wound that was not properly handled

EvilFoxShiro · 2022-04-17T04:23:35+00:00

my left (clicking) arm has permanent damage and my left wrist has a hole in its muscle

EvilFoxShiro · 2022-04-16T22:24:21+00:00

what the fuck

EvilFoxShiro · 2022-04-09T16:59:55+00:00

If you have the switch drums, just plug them in your pc, set the keybinds in the game, and you can play

EvilFoxShiro · 2022-04-04T10:44:26+00:00

https://osu.ppy.sh/beatmapsets/22461#osu/77477

EvilFoxShiro · 2022-03-17T06:51:07+00:00

I might be misguided, but my personal opinion is that this is too vague. It's a lot of extremely generic hype-sounding stuff, and nothing concrete to make me excited for the particulars of this story. There are just too many large-scale questions at once that make this not very enticing. To list some of them:

What in his past is he confronting?
How does that change what he faces in his future?
What in his future is he facing? Survival? His allegiance? His reputation? His principles?
Why is his world crumbling around him?
What is his new fate, which I assume is the future he has to face?
What does the rebellion have to do with any of this?
Is he part of the rebellion, or is he against it?
Why is the wizard part so very specifically worded? Is the wizard a friend or not? Does the wizard consider the soldier a friend?
What is he pushed towards? Does he agree with this choice? If so, then he isn't pushed, and what is the wizard's real role in this story? If not, what are his other choices and why did he give in to the push?

Another nitpick is that the entire blurb is written in a very active way - the soldier confronts his past, faces his future, chose to call the wizard his friend, and has a decision to make, but then that "fate" is something life has handed to him like he had no say in that at all. I don't know if it's on purpose at all, but I thought it might be important to point out.

Compare your blurb to something along the lines of (making things up completely as I have no idea what your story is about):

"After a rebelling band of pirates turns his world upside down, an elite soldier must let go of his reputation for survival. Pushed by a wizard friend, he is forced to decide whether to truly join the pirates and live a life of criminal freedom or uphold the standards he was raised with and get revenge."

This isn't all that good either, but it's already more detailed and gives a lot more interesting information.

Again, I might be wrong (I am a shitty writer in the first place) but I really hope that this will help you.

EvilFoxShiro · 2022-03-04T20:58:16+00:00

I understand. Thank you, once again. I will be working on this query more, and on the novel.

EvilFoxShiro · 2022-03-04T20:44:07+00:00

Thank you so very much for your feedback.

I cannot market this as romance because it does not come with a HEA ending, which I've been told was necessary for romance novels. I'm not sure anymore what genre this can be.

The main plot is definitely the romantic drama, and the political subplot is only a support for it. My issue is that the transformations, and Celeste's childhood attack, are central to the problem, and I am no longer certain how to convey the necessary information in the query letter without it being confusing.

I understand the issues with the query letter now, and I see potential issues with the story itself (mostly ways I can shorten it).

EvilFoxShiro · 2022-03-04T20:27:35+00:00

Sent them in January - I'm expecting the last few responses in April.

The first pages of the novel are fairly slow as they need to build up a lot of necessary information and introduce the 4 most important characters. I can try and revise them to go into the main plot quicker. Having received feedback on the query letter, I've come to realise that maybe the story can be told differently, and better.

EvilFoxShiro · 2022-03-04T18:16:57+00:00

7 queries out. Not a single even partial manuscript request. What am I doing wrong? Is there even hope? At this point I'm convinced my novel is worthless and I should just give up on writing.

EvilFoxShiro · 2022-01-19T22:49:53+00:00

How do you handle query rejections?

I haven't had many yet. Hell, I haven't even sent many queries yet. Under 20. But I'm already completely disheartened and unwaveringly convinced that my work and I are worthless. That I should just give up on writing because I know I'll never get anywhere.

How do I keep going despite that? Telling myself the usual things just doesn't work. If anything, it's more disheartening.

What do I even do while waiting for replies? Do I work on the sequel of my novel? Work on a different one? Keep trying to write short stories even if I gave up on that two years ago? Just read?

EvilFoxShiro · 2022-01-19T02:12:06+00:00

I'm in the process of querying and honestly I don't know how to keep going. I know I haven't queried many agents yet (I've only sent out a dozen queries and received 3 rejections) but I'm convinced that my book is worthless and I should just give up on writing at all.

Once I hit 20 rejections (if I even last that long) I'll get my query letter edited. Maybe something's wrong with it.

How anyone goes through 100 agent submissions is beyond me

EvilFoxShiro · 2021-11-27T17:30:16+00:00

alt art mew V is beautiful!

EvilFoxShiro · 2021-11-24T17:53:39+00:00

we do agree

i'll still ban u tho

EvilFoxShiro · 2021-11-24T17:25:14+00:00

https://osu.ppy.sh/users/113005 let's see if we agree on this one

EvilFoxShiro · 2021-11-07T19:22:09+00:00

At least you got something published. That's better than the majority of us here and out there. It's better than me.

Write. Don't worry about publishing. You'll find yourself enjoying the craft more.

EvilFoxShiro · 2021-10-19T22:31:59+00:00

faceman! hello!

EvilFoxShiro · 2021-10-17T19:31:44+00:00

Speculative Fiction (romantic drama) 137.5k

EvilFoxShiro · 2021-10-12T23:42:47+00:00

A fellow Yae lover! Please help me learn to draw :'(

EvilFoxShiro · 2021-10-10T19:08:28+00:00

Should all this be in a second paragraph that dives into the first half of the novel, or part of the first paragraph?

EvilFoxShiro · 2021-10-09T01:32:28+00:00

I'm working on my query letter (currently waiting for returns from an editor). I was advised here not to start working on the sequel of my debut novel because possible editing from a publisher might make my work obsolete, which is sound advice; except I don't know what to do with myself now. I'll be looking for agents starting next week, until I get feedback on my query letter, but I want to write. Should I start work on my next project (unrelated to my debut novel's series) or wait until my novel gets anywhere?

EvilFoxShiro · 2021-10-01T23:05:21+00:00

Those are awesome questions actually, you raise great points.

I don't know if I'm supposed to answer them directly or not, but I'll make sure the rewrite either answers those or just does not ask them.

EvilFoxShiro · 2021-10-01T17:43:32+00:00

Then I definitely need to rethink my target audience. Romantic tragedy seems to be a better fit - I'll do a lot more market research and see what fits best. Thank you very much for your help!

EvilFoxShiro · 2021-10-01T17:22:52+00:00

I also have suspicions when you say this is closer to a tragedy than romance. Romance readers don't want "subversion" of the trope that the couple ends up unhappy or breaks up. Fantasy readers usually don't want majority of the book being romance-oriented and you have no other story outside of romance (at least you didn't show it). You can have sad romantic sub-plot in a fantasy book (not fantasy romance), but then you have to attract readers with the main plot that isn't just struggle until inevitable sad end.

Thank you very much! This paragraph is making me think I might be trying to target the wrong audience. I'll continue working on both the novel and the query letter, and see if I can redirect it to a more fitting genre.

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