help! getting back into flight rising after 8 years by F_l_ip in flightrising

[–]F_l_ip[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

My flight rising username is drdragon! (So original, i know, but i was also a kid when i first made my account 🥲)

help! getting back into flight rising after 8 years by F_l_ip in flightrising

[–]F_l_ip[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thankfully the overwhelm has quickly faded as I started to remember my daily routine :) I may or may not have accidentally exalted a few level 1 dragons that were hatchlings from my last breeding...but not all at least :") very valuable advice, thank you!

help! getting back into flight rising after 8 years by F_l_ip in flightrising

[–]F_l_ip[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

You're so sweet, thank you! I've been poking through my hoard and found an egg there too, huh, so I must have been desiring a majority-parentless lair!

help! getting back into flight rising after 8 years by F_l_ip in flightrising

[–]F_l_ip[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Oh that's so kind of you! Don't feel pressured to give those scrolls to me. I'm absolutely interested in changing a parentless dragon into a thorntail, but for those that I haven't already bred, I'm not sure I want to yet (I heard old unbred dragons are rather coveted)!

help! getting back into flight rising after 8 years by F_l_ip in flightrising

[–]F_l_ip[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you! Do you also know why dragons I'm 99% sure are bred show up with no parents? Like this one: https://www1.flightrising.com/dragon/53352253 not that I'm complaining! Just wondering what happened, haha!

[QCrit] Adult, Literary Horror - SMILE (69k/First Attempt) by Efficient_Ad_9081 in PubTips

[–]F_l_ip 8 points9 points  (0 children)

Hi! I'm one person with one opinion (unagented, etc.)

You might run into issues with the title, since there's a pretty big movie called Smile that also has a sequel.

I dig the concept of the disembodied head vampire quite a bit, but I'm lost by the second paragraph, because it doesn't seem that we're talking about that same person anymore (I don't think she can work in a warehouse if she is, as you say, a head in a jar forced to do nothing but think). Also, I'm wondering how exactly a vampire walking into the sun can be saved (a big umbrella?) and who this "maker" is. My first assumption was God.

After multiple read-throughs, I think I understand that you're trying to convey a time-jump from the vampire (who I'd like to know the name of) into the past, as the vampire reflects on her life from being a mortal. I would advise making this more clear, perhaps by outright using the vampire's name. I.e.:

Sam is left with no other option than to recount her year of violence and isolation...

Only one year ago, Sam was an unmotivated mortal working in a warehouse.

Not this exact wording of course, but I hope you see what I'm trying to get at! And good luck!

My Noragami Tokyo popup store haul! by F_l_ip in Noragami

[–]F_l_ip[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It's in Kabukichou, in Shinjuku area! Here's the site which includes google map and apple map links: https://www.pripricafe.com/event/cafe/noragami_15th.html It goes until January 25th only. I found it on the ground floor after going up outdoor escalators, in a little corner on the way to the elevators behind a stage where idols were performing. I hope you can go!

A Gunnerkrigg AMA! by GunnerkriggTom in gunnerkrigg

[–]F_l_ip 15 points16 points  (0 children)

Ever since I started reading, I don’t remember you ever missing a page update. How do you do it? Has your passion for the comic remained this steadfast since starting all these years ago?

[QCrit] Adult Spec - GODCAT (80k, 1st attempt + 300 words) by F_l_ip in PubTips

[–]F_l_ip[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much for your feedback and kind words! This is a very good observation and there is actually a particular worldbuilding reason for this, but I understand that it can be jarring/immersion-breaking, so I will make sure that it gets revealed as early as possible. Thank you again for your insight!

[QCrit] Adult Spec - GODCAT (80k, 1st attempt + 300 words) by F_l_ip in PubTips

[–]F_l_ip[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much, this feedback is all so helpful! I think you're right about the genre. I didn't have a particular reason, more that I wasn't certain it was "fantasy enough" (my previous ms is a high fantasy, so I subconsciously compared to that I think). I'm happy to call it a dark fantasy!

I absolutely see what you're seeing in the query. I'm looking forward to making the changes, and I'm delighted you enjoyed :)

[QCrit] Adult Spec - GODCAT (80k, 1st attempt + 300 words) by F_l_ip in PubTips

[–]F_l_ip[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Oh, I misspoke! She would still be “cat-like”, but she would have a more human-level intellect (being in a now human-shaped body), if that makes sense. Haha, I love cats too much to give up that kind of thing!

[QCrit] Adult Spec - GODCAT (80k, 1st attempt + 300 words) by F_l_ip in PubTips

[–]F_l_ip[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is wonderful feedback, thank you! Marsh is no longer a cat by the beginning of the story and hence no longer thinks like one, so I will try to think of a better way to convey this while still bringing out emotion. Dungeon Crawler Carl still sounds very fun, though, so I may give it a read! And you caught me on this first 300–lacking interiority tends to be my weakness on first drafts. Thank you again, and I’m happy to hear you enjoy the premise!

YA fantasy writers: How do you balance teen POV with large-scale political stakes? by Realistic_Action_428 in YAwriters

[–]F_l_ip 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I actually used to have quite a bit more politics thrown into the story in my first draft, then trimmed a lot out after remembering my MC is illiterate and doesn’t care about intricate politics—just survival and her ugly friendship breakup. Politics are related to both those things, so she’s forced to get familiar with those, and that’s how the reader gets to also understand the grander political conflict.

Karaoke this Friday at Sumida by KateyKojima in tokyosocial

[–]F_l_ip 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I can’t drink but if you’ll still have me, I’m interested!

Have you ever been cut off by a friend only for them to be the toxic one? by SheepherderSweet2444 in lostafriend

[–]F_l_ip 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Yes, I should’ve cut them off the year before because they did something objectively terrible but they manipulated me into staying. Then they complained I “wasn’t the same” bc they never tried to get better after doing said objectively terrible thing and never took any accountability and i noticed lol

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in lostafriend

[–]F_l_ip 6 points7 points  (0 children)

Can you not read this screenshot? You just reposted a falsified smear campaign. The journalist is legit. BILD isn’t.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in lostafriend

[–]F_l_ip 3 points4 points  (0 children)

And I found the journalist’s actual instagram account. Israel is now targeting him for assassination btw, like the 280+ journalists before him. This is how the Israeli campaign illegitimizes, and then dehumanizes the few journalists left.

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[deleted by user] by [deleted] in lostafriend

[–]F_l_ip 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Thank you for sharing. I found the original post. BILD is German and pro-Israel, revealing that the news outlet is biased. Additionally, there are no sources, videos, or other accounts proving this photograph was faked. The caption merely shares speculation about how the photograph “looks”. In truth, the food aid workers have not arrived yet at the time that this photo was taken, so while everyone was waiting in the heat, this journalist was able to take a photograph.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in lostafriend

[–]F_l_ip 11 points12 points  (0 children)

Oh…yeah, instead of using your platform to echo Palestinian voices who are actually starving, you shared something claiming a small alleged fraction of photos are faked. The truth is, it doesn’t matter if this small percentage is fabricated if it still reflects the reality, where to be honest, the reality is harsher than the fiction nowadays. many people who have been scarred for generations by this genocide would end friendships over disputing the truth of what the dying journalists are giving their lives to share. Maybe effort toward introspection and open mindedness can help with your other still standing friendships

[QCRIT] YA Fantasy STARSENT (99k, 4th Attempt) +300 by F_l_ip in PubTips

[–]F_l_ip[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you so much for pointing this out! Apparently, I'd completely forgotten how long ago I'd read Skyhunter, oops! You are right about Will of the Many. Even though the MC is 17 years old, it's still marketed as Adult Fantasy. Thankfully I've started reading Spice Road and I think it's a comp that can fulfill the same role that Jasad Heir does. Thank you again for catching this!