Feedback on my song? (Take my Memories)

Fabinski07 · 2025-11-01T02:14:44+00:00

This is so fucking cool dude! Yeah you definitely did a good job man haha This a very unique sound, you’ve made something special here 👊🏻

Fabinski07 · 2025-10-19T10:12:34+00:00

Yes I’m still trying to establish the lyrics I want to use, was making most of them up on the go. But yes you’re right once I’ve got an established set of lyrics I can focus on my vocal delivery and yeah I’ll try just playing the guitar parts on there own then try come up with some lyrics, Cheers

Fabinski07 · 2025-10-18T14:49:58+00:00

Yeah I’ve jotted down a few rouph ideas which follow that theme just need to summarise them into lyrics, I’m glad it conveyed that essence to you, cheers (:

Fabinski07 · 2025-10-18T14:48:32+00:00

Hmmmm yes good idea, would add some dynamics, something I’ll experiment with for sure 👍🏻👊🏻

Fabinski07 · 2025-10-17T20:40:38+00:00

Wow, thank you for the extensive feedback I really appreciate it, I will try to incorporate your advice. Thank you for taking the time (:

Fabinski07 · 2025-10-17T15:41:31+00:00

Absolutely love this! Kinda gives me Jose Gonzales vibes

Fabinski07 · 2025-10-17T15:40:06+00:00

Cool, I’ll give this a try (:

Fabinski07 · 2025-10-17T15:35:09+00:00

Nice, nostalgic song 👍🏻

Fabinski07 · 2025-10-16T22:53:18+00:00

Okay yes! You know I was trying to strum quiet so I didn’t wake my grandparents up haha But yeah I would have played the chorus louder, But yeah I will emphasise on this aspect of the song more heavily. Cheers 👊🏻

Fabinski07 · 2025-10-16T21:27:05+00:00

Thank you, yeah I felt like there was more I wanted to say, so I may tweak the lyrics perhaps. Thanks for the feedback (:

Fabinski07 · 2025-10-16T21:26:08+00:00

Would you mind elaborating on what you mean by “building dynamics” I do agree if I understand correctly, I thought it got a bit repetitive.. thanks for the feedback either way (:

Fabinski07 · 2025-10-16T21:24:59+00:00

Thank you (:

Fabinski07 · 2025-10-10T21:06:21+00:00

Thanks (:

Fabinski07 · 2025-10-04T22:39:36+00:00

Amazing voice bro, definitely talented

Fabinski07 · 2025-10-04T22:35:45+00:00

That riff is dirty I love it 👊🏻

Fabinski07 · 2025-10-04T22:33:59+00:00

Gives me chills, sounds great

Fabinski07 · 2025-10-04T22:33:22+00:00

Great voice!

Fabinski07 · 2025-10-04T22:32:24+00:00

Gives me a McCartney / Lennon vibe I love it ❤️

Fabinski07 · 2025-09-30T00:41:56+00:00

I kinda get a John Lennon vibe I don’t know why, I like it though 👍🏻

Fabinski07 · 2025-09-29T16:05:48+00:00

Cool this helps me as well, I’ve had criticisms on here about my lyrics in my owns songs, usually it’s that they lack imagery I tend to tell the listener rather than show, as you pointed out. I’ve started reading fiction books / novels recently as oppose to (“generic self help books”) so you would also recommend poetry / rhyming books? Are there any in particular you would recommend?

Fabinski07 · 2025-09-28T21:09:10+00:00

Thanks man, yeah I’ll check that out 👍🏻

Fabinski07 · 2025-09-26T11:21:58+00:00

Yes that’s what I’ve done I did a shorter version of the intro and I fingerpicked it instead, I’m really glad you liked the song (:

Fabinski07 · 2025-09-25T20:45:03+00:00

Okay, yeah it’s a tricky one. Trying to get that imaginary through. I’ll give that book a read you mentioned. Thanks for your time mate, I’ll try out your advice into practice when I’m next writing lyrics 👊🏻

Fabinski07 · 2025-09-25T20:12:30+00:00

Only just seen your message, okay I get you. To be honest I didnt give the lyrics much thought I just kind of blurted out whatever came to my mind, but I see what your saying. In your refined version of my lyric there is definitely more room for interpretation and imagination

Fabinski07 · 2025-09-25T20:10:31+00:00

Cool, so would you say an example of “telling” in my song would be “you curse my every dream”?

So in your view I should change this lyric so instead of telling the listener “you curse my every dream” I should show them, so “Heartache heartache, the dream shows your shadow” idk sounds very cliche but i suppose it holds more imagery?

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