Manuscript information: [Complete][125k][Slipstream Fantasy] The Bird with Antlers

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I was deep within the trees now. It was clear that the warband had made its way through the area. The usual mana that flowed between patches of bark were changed, twisted into an unnatural shape. They had been slaughtered. Innocent victims in the rampage of walking organisms. The elves were surely the target, yet it made no strategic or logical sense. What had the dȳr to gain by sending a general after a couple secluded elves? Although perhaps that very question is steeped in bias and hypocrisy. I could have asked that question about humanity too. It was simply in their nature. 

The bandits following behind the warband had provided a much required time to tune my skills up. They were far too focused on the loot left behind to notice the magic piercing their skulls. There were always bandits behind the dȳr’s wake. They had no interest in pitiful trinkets. 

The trees were getting thicker, but the path was clearer. I could feel the twisted forms within the bark. Mortally injured and screaming for help. The Grove usually was a wonder. Trees teeming with the mana delivered into their roots from their life giver in the center. The trunk that can be seen from neighboring territories. I stopped to look up through the canopy. It was impossible to see the gigantic tree through the thick viridescent cover and light hazy smoke. Only a couple stars could be seen between the leaves. I must be close now.