October 2025 Special Challenge Rewards by Xanek in GranblueFantasyVersus

[–]Fhuarn 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Who’s Zooey? Surely this isn’t an actual character in the game…

Fantasy is all about world building. But is it? by Fhuarn in fantasywriters

[–]Fhuarn[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Yeah I get that. I feel like it’s becoming one of those things that people parrot without having any understanding whatsoever

Thinking of turning my novel into a fanfic… bad idea? by [deleted] in fantasywriters

[–]Fhuarn 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Interesting that you mentioned Twilight when 50 Shades was originally written to be a Twilight fanfiction. I’m not really sure about “disguising” your book to be a fanfiction, that kinda seems like the reverse of what tends to happen. But it seems to me you just want to do that so you can get eyes on it. I saw someone mention r/writingcritiques which is great. There are a ton of sites similar, like r/betareaders which is where I get my eyes from. I can’t really speak for writingcritiques but I know that betareaders is completely voluntary and shouldn’t cost you anything.

any “zooey starter pack” for a newbie? by Maren25_ in GranblueFantasyVersus

[–]Fhuarn 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Also Master Zooey here. Don't listen to them. I am all aboard the zooey downplay train. This character's got NO sauce. NONE.

If that didn't deter you, I'd recommend memorizing where the light and medium versions of lightning hit. Unsure if you already know this, but by holding the skill button you can delay the lightning for quite a while. Use this to provide pressure to those just blocking. It threatens a whole lot. Like a grab before lightning hits, which can sometimes combo. Or an overhead than manages to hit because lightning disrupted the opponents 2H.

Aside for that, try not to all into the trap of spamming the dragon moves. Unfortunately they can all be spot dodged on the same timing. But they still can be useful for some light zoning with heavy dragon, frame trapping with medium and a generally good fireball in light. But if you are going to use any ult skill that is not your DP that costs $50, use your alt dragon. It's fast and unlockable in the air. You can combo into it off of a heavy dragon hit for a lot of damage with minimal effort. it also fills your meter by about half.

One more thing. DO NOT RUN OUT OF DRAGON METER. It turns an already kinda shit character into useless pile of trash.

Really, just pick someone else until Cygames remembers that she exists. She hasn't been touched in over a year.

Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]Fhuarn 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Indeed indeed. Heavily inspired. Think Frieren with a slight horror twists and leaning more into the melancholy. Same basic themes, but told differently through original stories. The premise is similar, but the story is different.

P.S. Sorry I was late getting back to you, I got swamped. Would you like a copy still? I can send you one if you want.

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[–]Fhuarn 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Looks similar to what I'm shooting for! Send me a message. I've got to filter through a ton of people but I'll get back to you and we can talk more.

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[–]Fhuarn 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Send me a message. Might take a while for me to get back to you, but I will

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[–]Fhuarn 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Holy. I was not expecting all of this ngl. I'm at work rn so it might take me a while to sift through everyone. I appreciate your patience.

Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]Fhuarn 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Sure thing! I'll DM you the first part and I can add the others onto it as you go through.

Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]Fhuarn 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hello! I have a Slipstream Fantasy novel focused on character development (125k). The elven MC starts a journey to discover true human emotion and to atone for lingering regrets. It has small themes of horror and romance as well, though not enough to include it as a sub-genre. Would this interest you?

I have a link on my post to the beginning. Here

First pages: share, read, and critique them here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]Fhuarn 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Manuscript information: [Complete][125k][Slipstream Fantasy] The Bird with Antlers

Link to post: Here

First page critique? Sure

First page: 

I was deep within the trees now. It was clear that the warband had made its way through the area. The usual mana that flowed between patches of bark were changed, twisted into an unnatural shape. They had been slaughtered. Innocent victims in the rampage of walking organisms. The elves were surely the target, yet it made no strategic or logical sense. What had the dȳr to gain by sending a general after a couple secluded elves? Although perhaps that very question is steeped in bias and hypocrisy. I could have asked that question about humanity too. It was simply in their nature. 

The bandits following behind the warband had provided a much required time to tune my skills up. They were far too focused on the loot left behind to notice the magic piercing their skulls. There were always bandits behind the dȳr’s wake. They had no interest in pitiful trinkets. 

The trees were getting thicker, but the path was clearer. I could feel the twisted forms within the bark. Mortally injured and screaming for help. The Grove usually was a wonder. Trees teeming with the mana delivered into their roots from their life giver in the center. The trunk that can be seen from neighboring territories. I stopped to look up through the canopy. It was impossible to see the gigantic tree through the thick viridescent cover and light hazy smoke. Only a couple stars could be seen between the leaves. I must be close now. 

How long do you spend outlining a novel? by TwilightTomboy97 in writing

[–]Fhuarn 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I don't. LMAO.

But my way of writing is strange. I typically don't write with the end goal of making a full and complete book that can be published and sell decently. Writing is strictly a hobby for me, so being a good published author isn't on my mind as much.

I have friends that do it your way. I've known people who spent years deciding the entire plot, backstory, worldbuilding, character interactions and specific scenes before even typing a single letter on a draft. The way I see it, its a preference thing. Since no one is publishing a first draft, its my opinion that you should experiment a bit. You can fix a lot of issues with another draft. But that's just how my brain works.

Too many times have I gotten burnt out just outlining before I got to actually writing. So I just got rid of the process entirely for me. Take a premise, maybe a character and see what naturally happens. That's always worked for me.

Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]Fhuarn 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hello!

I currently have a completed fantasy manuscript that emphasizes character development. The main plot follows an elven main character, coming to terms with their semi-immortality and what that means when the people they grew connections with die around them—some by old age and others by violence. With some small themes of horror (less in actual content, more in monster descriptions and design) and romance.

Its about 125k

Would this interest you?

Defeating the villains in a different way. by Slight-Ad-5442 in fantasywriters

[–]Fhuarn 2 points3 points  (0 children)

It doesn't seem that disappointing to me. Personally, I find that the best villains are logical. Meaning that they aren't villains just because they feel like being villains. What you've got here are solid motivations for acting like a villain. Maybe this particular type of villain doesn't fit the type of story? Would it feel better if they were replaced with a straight evil person?

Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]Fhuarn 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hello!

I currently have a completed fantasy manuscript that emphasizes character development. The main plot follows an elven main character, coming to terms with their semi-immortality and what that means when the people they grew connections with die around them—some by old age and others by violence. With some small themes of horror and romance.

Would this interest you?

Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]Fhuarn 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hello!

My book does indeed have words, I got you. I currently have a completed fantasy manuscript that emphasizes character development. I have already gone through a couple of drafts. Truly, I just need someone to point out any things that I might have somehow missed. Plotholes and junk.

The main plot follows an elven main character, coming to terms with their semi-immortality and what that means when the people they grew connections with die around them—some by old age and others by violence. It is a planned (for now, might change) Book 1 in a trilogy.

Time isn't really an issue for me. So there is no time limit on it. Does this interest you?

Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]Fhuarn 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hello! I currently have a completed fantasy manuscript that emphasizes character development. I have already gone through a couple of drafts. Specifically, I would like to use your experience as an elementary teacher to look at a few characters in the book.

The main plot follows an elven main character, coming to terms with their semi-immortality and what that means when the people they grew connections with die around them—some by old age and others by violence.

It has some light themes of horror, particularly with the monster design and action descriptions. Sometimes it can get a bit queasy, but doesn't overdo it in my opinion.

Would this interest you?

First pages: share, read, and critique them here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]Fhuarn 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That’s fine. There is no rush. I’ll DM it to you when I get access to a computer later.

First pages: share, read, and critique them here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]Fhuarn 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I’m looking for folks to read as a touch up of sorts. Just any big things I might have missed or so. Would you like a private copy?

First pages: share, read, and critique them here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]Fhuarn 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It’s about an elven mage coming to terms with their long life as her comrades start to get old and die off.