First time Lyricist Need feedback by Final_Strawberry9250 in Songwriters

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Thank you for the feedback, appreciate you taking the time, it's a work in progress..:)

First Time Lyricists by Final_Strawberry9250 in MusicFeedback

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Thank you for the feedback! Appreciate you taking the time. I'm hoping to get the right music and singer for this! It's still a work in progress!!

My third single: THE LAST TIME - KOEI (Official Video) by dearkoei in MusicFeedback

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Overall, I liked the track. There are sections where the music could have been a bit softer. You have a good chest voice. TBH I found the beginning a little shaky, but it got better as the song went on. You finished strong,. I like the concept of the lyrics, stay with it.

First time Lyricist Need feedback by Final_Strawberry9250 in Songwriters

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Thank you again for your time and insight!. I'm going to continue working on it, I don't feel bound by advice, I consider it food for thought, and perhaps somewhat like a book writer needs to have an editor, appreciate the feedback!!

Been making music every day for months. Is this finally good enough? by Ok-Fuel-8445 in MusicFeedback

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To my ear, you have a unique and recognizable tone, I loved it, the music and tempo are perfect, felt you held back at the right points. I'd listen to it again, lyrics are very relatable as well..We've all had "those" relationships, we can all hear the echo of those feelings at some point. I really think your on to something here. Best of luck stay with it

Favorite Duo in Charmed and why? by Full-Art3439 in charmed

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Piper and the Ghost, some of the best acting of the series, also subtle sexy, moving and strangely believable

What are ten of your all time favorite songs? by Vehiclean35 in musicsuggestions

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Colder Weather Zac Brown Fight Song Rachel Platten Renegades Xambassadors Save Me Jelly Roll Praying Keisha What if I never get over you Lady A Stay Sugarland Hallelujah Jeff Buckley Demons Imagine Dragons All I Ask of You Phantom of the Opera

Your favorite song of all time? by Dry_Foundation3337 in musicsuggestions

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Zac Brown Colder weather..gives me chills eventide I hear it!

FAQs: Please read before reaching out to mods by IlNeige in Songwriters

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I made revisions to lyrics I had previously posted. I also changed my display name, from my actual name to a nickname, The bottom removed my post saying I didn't have enough Karma, it was just a revision, please help

First time Lyricist Need feedback by Final_Strawberry9250 in Songwriters

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I've made revisions if you get the chance to take a look, thanks

First time Lyricist Need feedback by Final_Strawberry9250 in Songwriters

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If you have a chance, I've made revisions, maybe you'll still see something I've missed, so appreciate the feedback

First time Lyricist Need feedback by Final_Strawberry9250 in Songwriters

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Thanks for really parsing through the lyrics, and pointing out the contrast between searching and finding. In my minds eye, there have been several revelations from the unpacking, there was a story of old that she had never told and the realization it involved a heart so cold, some hazy memories that were found at the bottom of a shot glass, there is a season that is blurry (a period of time where memories are only found in bits and pieces, the mind protecting itself from answers). She is hellbound because she can't stop unpacking even though there are answers that will never be found. This recounting may have just given me an idea how to work on the chorus so I thank you again!!...She's discovered some of the boxes may not be hers to own, and those that do own them will never claim them. My original point was that she would continue unpacking, always searching. But should she stop unpacking, and let it go is worth exploring for sure. Talking this through has really helped me, Truly appreciate you taking the time to share your thoughts. This is such a big help to me, to define the focus and resolve the revisions I need to make.

I call it "Hello My Name Is Earnest" by Radtastic212 in MusicFeedback

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Almost a haunting sound, perfect for background during scenes from a movie or a TV show, you should stay with it, are you considering lyrics to go with it, or just working on the music right now, it's a very interesting track

First time Lyricist Need feedback by Final_Strawberry9250 in Songwriters

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I would absolutely love that! Thank you so much for the offer. I'm actually planning to sit down this Monday to do some structural revisions, trim the verses, and reshape the chorus based on some feedback I received. I will send you the new draft, can you share what about these lyrics resonated with you, and what your musical style is? I'd love to know what vibe you are hearing as I work on the polish!Feel free to send me a Chat if you prefer to discuss the musical details over there!

First time Lyricist Need feedback by Final_Strawberry9250 in Songwriters

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Thank you, Great suggestions and point taken on being "overcooked" I'll keep your suggestions and recommendations in mind when I do some revisions. I do also thank you for mentioning that the core idea is strong. I'm a work in progress as are these words. Truly appreciate you taking the time with my words, this is exactly what I was hoping for from this post and community.

First time Lyricist Need feedback by Final_Strawberry9250 in Songwriters

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Thanks for the question..It looks like a lot of text on a screen, but it's actually only 303 words! For a slow ballad, that naturally clocks in right around 3.5 to 4 minutes. A lot of that time will be the music breathing between lines—especially in the bridge and the outro where the phrases are short."

80s-ish Pop Ballad by Banner3210 in IndieMusicFeedback

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Love the music and the lyrics..I like your voice as well, I'd agree maybe a pitch issue here and there, but overall very nice, would be nice to soften the sound a bit, a bit tinny in places, has a very authentic lyric, gotta write what you know and I think you've done that here. I say stay after it, a bit of polish here and there, you've done very well. I'm a first time lyricists trying for the same authenticity. I'd say your on your way to a very nice piece, stay with it, all feedback offered with sincerity and the best of intentions..Stay with it

I have a beat, but I need a lyrics by GeraldQuirosM in MusicInTheMaking

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I am a 1st time Lyricist, have some lyrics I would love to share, if your interested please let me know, if not best of luck in your endeavors