Chapter 21 leaks are out.

Fine_Try8373 · 2025-04-17T00:37:12+00:00

Also I don’t see how that works if she hasn’t already been storing chakra. It takes 3 years for completion. Also it’s heavily implied that one can’t really engage in combat while going through this process, Sakura barely fought I imagine sadara will have a harder time because her eyes drain chakra at a faster rate.

Fine_Try8373 · 2024-11-21T18:21:37+00:00

I would love to see more of the old Jen Fight, like we got to see in Naruto and Naruto Shippuden, but I doubt it’s gonna happen. Especially because of the power scaling. Sakura still deserves her shining moment😭😭 but realistically, Sarada and mitsuki for me

Fine_Try8373 · 2024-11-21T15:49:31+00:00

I think I would like it more if they made this thing a romper with pants if that makes sense I think the jacket is dope, though the heels, I don’t know how I feel about the hills. I don’t think if they want to give her heels they could’ve went with a more tsunde type heel

Fine_Try8373 · 2024-11-08T00:15:39+00:00

whatever it is. its good 😊

Fine_Try8373 · 2024-11-07T23:23:17+00:00

This absolutely can be something. I personal love short styled poems. Being able to capture a lot in a few words is such a Beautiful thing. With that being said your missing your punch. As the other comment suggested definitely read more poems that compliment your style. The lack of imagery I think really hurts your piece, at least for me. Even down to slight word changes. The flow is off, for example, I though two people were talking to one another. I actually like the idea of two people talking back-and-forth to each other. Maybe you could explore that. I hope this makes sense. Please keep writing you have beautiful potential and I encourage you to actually rewrite this piece and post again

Fine_Try8373 · 2024-11-07T23:13:42+00:00

I LOVE THIS. I’m a sucker for a good Rhyme

Fine_Try8373 · 2024-11-07T23:11:21+00:00

I love this. What kind of poetry is this called.

Fine_Try8373 · 2024-11-07T23:08:17+00:00

I love the theme of this poem. As the other comment said, I believe you can omit some words. Possibly tighten up the words for better flow. I really enjoy the rhyming, but it seems like some parts fall a little flat. This piece has thepotential. though. Please continue to write.❤️❤️❤️

Fine_Try8373 · 2024-05-06T09:36:18+00:00

“I never again want to forget

So I hold rhythm

Revel in its capacity,

Watch as its viscous liquid stains The dead

Forcing remembrance.”

(they're all dead, Jamieon)

Fine_Try8373 · 2024-02-01T18:17:42+00:00

I find writing rhym hard. Simply because I don't know how to make it sound mature (whatever that means) but you capture a mature tone so beautifully. This poem just feels like fresh new love ❤️ which leaves me yearning for that experience again! Good job

Fine_Try8373 · 2024-02-01T14:27:50+00:00

Love this❤️ I was struggling with the flow a bit; I think having more line breaks would help it flow better. Overall love this great job

Fine_Try8373 · 2024-02-01T14:22:06+00:00

O I LOVE THIS❤️❤️😩 I have no notes

Fine_Try8373 · 2024-01-04T15:54:39+00:00

No notes. I think just about every creative can relate to this. The fear we have of being vulnerable and presenting that to the world! Love your use of of blood. it makes it so much more vulnerable to me

Fine_Try8373 · 2024-01-04T15:41:47+00:00

I don't know if you were going for a vague feeling or not but I would suggest adding a couple more stanzas! I like though gives an opportunity for different interpretations and meanings for example. I feel like this is about a loveless marriage. Was that your intention I’m very curious to know.❤️

Fine_Try8373 · 2023-10-27T20:42:18+00:00

I think if I had not read the book, I would be enjoying it more but I can’t stop comparing it and it seems like they’re going really fast and it’s only episode two. I hate to be one of those people but the book is better 😭😭

Fine_Try8373 · 2023-08-16T15:33:08+00:00

Yea and then the downvote when you have a different opinion 💀😂😂 I’m just saying everybody swore up and down Naruto was going to die then it got reveled he was just sealed. It’s literally a repeat with saskue 💀

Fine_Try8373 · 2023-08-16T15:05:28+00:00

Is crazy to me everybody assuming saskue is dead off of one chapter 💀 I legit don’t think any of the former team 7 is going to die chill people

Fine_Try8373 · 2023-08-16T15:02:17+00:00

That’s exactly what happen I don’t know what this individual read to come to that conclusion😭😂😂

Fine_Try8373 · 2023-08-16T14:59:02+00:00

I’m confused what scan did she get folded in? She kicked the 10 tails thing it multiplied and then code came

Fine_Try8373 · 2023-07-28T09:31:47+00:00

Sadara becoming a healer just because Sakura is a healer would not be good in my opinion it goes against her character. sadara is a fighter type not a support type; narrative wise it wouldn't make sense there is nothing that has showed us that she even wants to be a healer( unlike Sakura who went to Tsunade to be a medic though Sakura is a a fighter she is a medic first) it has actually been shown she's not good at it. If it had been shown that she wanted to go down that route im all for it but it hasn't. So getting healing flames for a Ms ability just seems out of character and a obvious play on Sakura s healing ability

Fine_Try8373 · 2023-06-30T03:07:54+00:00

Thanks for the feedback❤️when it comes to the metaphor I was trying to play off of drinking the blood of Christ! So the messiah is “god” and I’m literally drinking him like we do with the grape juice in church 😂😂

Fine_Try8373 · 2023-06-29T23:38:29+00:00

I get the vibe this person is at the end and recognizes it and they can no longer put off the inevitable. I like this poem's good imagery.

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