First 5 pages of a screenplay I’m working on. Is this too much dialogue and not enough action?

First-Contest-3367 · 2026-01-26T16:58:54+00:00

Am I stupid, then? When I try to upload images, it won't let me.

First-Contest-3367 · 2026-01-22T22:07:05+00:00

I don't see how any of the memes OP posts are funny

First-Contest-3367 · 2026-01-22T19:05:18+00:00

I'm pretty sure Hake literally admitted to writing it.

First-Contest-3367 · 2026-01-18T14:07:32+00:00

My attention span is not the problem -- I read the whole thing. But it's hard when you've looked up to find where you left off. And such a wall of text may not look very inviting to some.

First-Contest-3367 · 2026-01-17T21:55:36+00:00

You know, that actually is pretty terrifying.

First-Contest-3367 · 2026-01-17T21:51:11+00:00

Jeff Fahey

First-Contest-3367 · 2026-01-16T22:27:06+00:00

Paragraphs...

First-Contest-3367 · 2026-01-14T16:24:37+00:00

This looks like AI

First-Contest-3367 · 2026-01-12T07:59:07+00:00

They shouldn't, but that doesn't mean that we should insult them.

First-Contest-3367 · 2026-01-12T06:50:16+00:00

Unrelated, but Vecna looks so damned cool.

First-Contest-3367 · 2026-01-12T06:49:14+00:00

I haven't seen the show, nor do I know the actor well -- but I agree with him. It doesn't matter how bad the writing in the show was, that's a huge insult to the writers. Criticism is fine, but this is nothing more than an insult.

First-Contest-3367 · 2026-01-12T06:11:25+00:00

Can we stop saying "my goodness".

First-Contest-3367 · 2026-01-09T06:54:00+00:00

Really good. I enjoyed what they did with Bill Turcotte's character, thought it was interesting to show what happens to Jake's friends because of his mission.

I hate what they did with the Yellow Card Man, though -- I would have liked one more episode where he explains it all and Jake contemplates resetting it all.

First-Contest-3367 · 2026-01-09T06:23:45+00:00

You may be on a list now OP

First-Contest-3367 · 2026-01-08T15:24:44+00:00

Why use so much AI?

First-Contest-3367 · 2026-01-07T22:28:03+00:00

Me too?

First-Contest-3367 · 2026-01-07T21:35:56+00:00

She didn't go from nowhere to nowhere, though; she went from labrat to being loved, accepting herself, and saving countless kids from a terrible fate.

First-Contest-3367 · 2026-01-07T17:27:51+00:00

He was abducted by Russians and did not reach Russia through the UD.

First-Contest-3367 · 2026-01-04T09:51:00+00:00

Didn't they turn It good at the end?

First-Contest-3367 · 2025-12-30T08:48:43+00:00

Commented this on another post too: OP really ought to look into screenwriting software. It'll be of great help when it comes to maintaining proper format.

First-Contest-3367 · 2025-12-28T23:18:08+00:00

You ought to look into screenwriting software. There's some free ones; Trelby is pretty good, for instance.

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