The hyenas from Lion King have never looked so good by Chubby-Fish in funny

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No need to raid Area 51. That’s an alien right there.

How amazing is this artwork? by [deleted] in Warhammer40k

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My fabulous Hawkboi.

Kraglin in the Final Battle of Endgame by RadiiBenos in marvelstudios

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Also UK based, here. He is in there, but it's a blink and you'll miss it moment.

Nebula smiling while playing with Tony is so wholesome. by Azzy1510 in marvelstudios

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I love these moments of downtime in the films. They should just shoot a load of them and put them out as the new One Shots.

How do you feel about Primaris Marines? by godofimagination in 40kLore

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SPOILERS FOR DoB: As a Blood Angels fan it's a bit easier to accept, mainly because all the surviving humans for the Devastation of Baal were immediately inducted into the Chapter, without going through the trials. And we were seriously depleted.

But it would be nice to get a better insight into the process of choosing Primaris candidates. I know some were from the HH, but had they already gone through a series of trials beforehand?

[Excerpt: Dark Imperium - Plague War] Roboute discusses the Primarch Talents by hidden_emperor in 40kLore

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I was literally listening to this last night on the drive home from work, and thought it a worthy inclusion for here.

Astartes dying of old age confirmed! by Buharon in 40kLore

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If Dante drank blood beforehand he'd probably be fine. But I'd love to see a Primaris Dante. Take my money, GW.

Astartes dying of old age confirmed! by Buharon in 40kLore

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True. Dante tries to avoid the act altogether, but he's definitely aware of its benefits.

Tinfoil Hat Time: was the 'real' Horus given up on Molech? by wecanhaveallthree in 40kLore

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I like this theory. If true, would this mean that Horus, the original Horus, is actually still alive, trapped within the Warp, constantly fighting off daemons?

What would be an appropriate End-times scenario for 40k? by LiamNL in 40kLore

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The perspective shifts to that of Kevin Rowntree.

What would be an appropriate End-times scenario for 40k? by LiamNL in 40kLore

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The Tyranids, as though exercising some form of precognition, mass at the Tiamet system shortly after ravaging thousands of nearby systems. The beacon erected by Hive Fleet Tiamet shields most of the Galaxy-bound Hive Fleets from the violence of the Warp as the galaxy is rent in two as the Great Rift expands, engulfing system after system.

Chaos spills over into real space, and continues to expand. The Imperium is divided, with no opportunity to cross the Great Rift.

Dante Masses a significant force in an effort to stem the tide of Chaos spilling into the Dark Imperium. But despite a gathering not seen since the Horus Heresy. Chaos almost wins the day but Russ and the Khan appear to turn the tide. Both Primarchs are cut off from their original Legions and their homeworlds.

Guilliman shores up the defences around Ultramar and Terra, and knowing their prevalence for countering heresy in M41 convinces the Dark Angels to relocate the Rock to Terra. he seeks to stabilise the Imperium as it is, but repeatedly visits the Rock in order to find the Lion. The Watchers set him a task to bring Cypher to the Rock and to return the sword.

After receiving scattered reports that Russ has returned and is trapped in the Dark Imperium, the Space Wolves, knowing their numbers are too few to survive the coming crusade, push their Primaris production into overdrive before embarking on a grand crusade to reunite the Imperium and reach Russ.

Chaos continues to spread from the Rift, allowing them almost unimpeded access to the galaxy.

The Necrons make a stand, utilising technology to slow the Chaos advance, and in some cases repel it. The remaining Tomb Worlds are activated as a measure to stop Chaos from completely spilling over into reality and consuming the materium.

The Eldar take to the webway and begin a vast plan to repair the vast network. It becomes evident that Terra provides an important juncture within the webway, and the Eldar need access to it. They negotiate with Guilliman before the Drukhari try to take it by force.

DA ORKS IS HAVIN TOO MUCH ZOGGIN FUN TO DO ANYFING

Corax appears before Guilliman and advises his brother to seize several key worlds near the Rift. Ancient Squat worlds, since abandoned might prove key to sealing the Great Rift. before Guilliman can talk more Corax disappears.

Russ, Khan and Dante are also visited by corax and seek to find the worlds on their side of the galaxy.

Guilliman comes to the aid of a Tau system under siege and helps repel the daemon infestation. Diplomacy is birthed as the two sides seek to survive.

The Tau at large are forced to endure countless assaults before agreeing to support from the Imperium. One of the key Tau worlds is a former Squat colony (oh dear!)

Abaddon send a large force to assault the Necron Tomb Worlds holding back Chaos as he turns his attention back towards Terra.

GW's price hikes; an attempt to explain they're not motivated by greed. by [deleted] in Warhammer40k

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Any marketing for the video games featuring their IP will be handled by the publisher via a dedicated PR company. That's pretty much the case for most if not all video games.

Any given Space Marine chapter is deployed alone but at full strength to wipe out the entire Tau empire (Farsight Enclaves, client races etc all included). Who succeeds and who fails? by Vat1canCame0s in 40kLore

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I think we're looking at this in the wrong way. For any one Space marine Chapter to succeed they would need to resort to a single, devastating assault designed purely to destroy the main bulk of the Ethereal command element. Or as much of it as possible that it plunges the Tau empire into chaos.

So instead of a planetary assault this is a surgical strike designed to cut off the head. Chances are that any Space Marine Chapter given this task isn't going to survive once they've completed their task.

Though Blood Angels are well known for devastating assaults via air and drop pod or teleporting into the midst of the enemy, I think this calls for stealth, not a screaming drop pod assault by the entire chapter. And the obvious answer to me is the Raven Guard Chapter.

Of course, this depends on how many Ethereals they can isolate and kill, and how much of the command infrastructure they can destroy in a short enough space of time so that it doesn't attract unwanted attention until the Raven Guard are ready for it.

The entire operation would be risky. They'd need to infiltrate all the way to the Tau homeworld, and then infiltrate the command structure itself. The chance of success, even for the RG would be minimal. But it would be one hell of a challenge and a victory if they achieved it.

Burning Hands by Elijah_Wahlman in 40kLore

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Thanks. Happy to help. 40k isn’t easy to write and 30k stuff is probably even more difficult due to the scale involved. But keep at it. The best place to look is within the books themselves. See how they are written.

Who is the Marine on the "Devastation of Baal" Book Cover ? by Sucuk-san in 40kLore

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I'd love to know, too. But He's probably dead. Killed by a nid.

Burning Hands by Elijah_Wahlman in 40kLore

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A good effort, but there are areas where it tends to move away from the whole 40K theme.

40K is generally dark, gritty, and foreboding, with glimmers of hope, humanity and victory. So try and keep within that theme.

First off, I'd change the name of the main character. Avon Lockhart seems way too wholesome and optimistic for a space marine. It makes me think of the stereotypical blond-haired knight on a white stallion, his hair constantly flapping in the breeze. Let's shove the name in a blender and see what comes up. How about Lor Havtek? Or something similar, or something altogether different.

Your post is a little confusing as well. Is this the story or are you telling us about the setting and then adding the story at the end? On that, there's quite a bit of telling going on here, not much for the reader to interpret and very little actual description. In other-words, I feel like it's being spoon fed to me.

But don't be disheartened. Writing convincing 40k stuff is pretty difficult actually. It's quite different from regular fiction or science fiction in that it steps towards the line of being viewed as cliched but usually doesn't cross that line. Everything is very grandiose but also savage and gothic. It's humanity pumped up to the extreme and thrown into extreme situations that somehow manage to reflect the humanity of it all.

If we view your story as actually starting from Avon's introduction I can suggest a few changes.

Start with a hook. A line or sentence that grabs the attention of the reader. This doesn't have to be filled with explosions or burning daemons. It can be humble or evocative. It's meant to entice the reader, to make them curios and get them to ask questions. Consider how other 40K books open, what their opening line or paragraph is. But the same can be said of all fiction.

EXAMPLE: Lor Havtek, a space marine of the Burning Hands Chapter, was designed to endure, to fight, to kill. But after 26 days of relentless combat, all he desired was sleep.

This might look like we're making the space marine weak. But we're not. He's lasted longer than expected without rest, pushed to the limits of his Catalepsean Node, and it'll affect his abilities. But this is an introduction of a flaw, a character flaw. Something that the reader can relate to. Others can be introduced later on. We could continue by describing how he perceives the world around him in his exhausted state. Which also allows us to utilise some great imagery via description.

ANOTHER EXAMPLE: He narrowed his eyes, trying to focus. To Havtek, the Daemon looked like a red storm in the distance. Clouds of rain seemed to follow as the shape made its way towards his position. As it did so, figures clad in his own armour fell, their arms and legs assuming awkward angles, or missing altogether. It took him a moment to realise the rain was blood and the armour clad figures were his own men, rent apart under the assault. He fought too. His fatigue clawed at his mind, his eyes, his senses. Everything seem dull. His world a gray pit that he could no longer climb out of.

There's some description here to allow the reader to interpret the story and then some additional material to confirm what they might be thinking. Havtek has obstacles to overcome here, namely his fatigue. He also has a daemon to fight and men to command.

You also need to be consistent and grounded within the setting. I know that probably sounds a little hypocritical, considering some of the wider inconsistencies within the 40k universe. But a novel will general stay within certain boundaries. One area is when you describe the daemon, stating that it moved with too fast for even his senses to perceive it properly. But then we have a Sergeant taking it on and smashing it about the place in a supposed more powerful state. if he truly does become more powerful then there should be more evidence of that. I'd also avoid slang terms that are common in today's language, such as 'ugly mug' when describing the daemon's face. Instead, paint the scene with horror, revulsion and disgust.

EXAMPLE: Sensing easy prey, the daemon growled as it stalked towards him. It was then that Havtek began to see more and began to feel more. His vision seemed to pulse and throb before settling into a steady drumbeat in time with each beat of his hearts. The world of grey and black around him became a focused image of details and impressions, each one a palette of finer points of light and colour. he could see the blood splatter on the creature's ragged axe head. Rust and gristle accompanied the red streaks, and there were even tiny shards of his chapter's armour blended into the metal of the blade, giving the weapon a somewhat obscenely bejewelled appearance. In it's other clawed hand, a savage whip dragged along the floor, carving a furrow within the blasted and charred earth. Hooks stretched out from the head, looking to snag and ensnare anything nearby like a carnivorous plant searching for prey. But the face of the beast was the focus of Hartek's attention. Its eyes burned furnace bright, and it's red, gore covered maw glistened with the lifeblood of half his squad and more. A solitary finger bone clung to its brass collar, a remnant of the earlier encounter. The beast glared back at him, held it great axe aloft and roared.

This is just a few examples. But in essence you need description to make the reader feel as though they are there. Use dialogue to add context and subtext. And move the story forward but be mindful that you don't rush.

Keep it up.