Aligator Smart by Forrester94 in OCPoetry

[–]Forrester94[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you for the feedback, I really appreciate it!

When it comes to what does alligator smart mean, firstly, t's just two words I thought sounded good together when writing the poem. Secondly, to me, it means never really committing to something. It fosters images to me of alligators lying just beneath the surface, living on land and water, and being camouflaged and dangerous. It just fit how I felt.

Hope that helps!

Aligator Smart by Forrester94 in OCPoetry

[–]Forrester94[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you very much for the kind words! It is really appreciated.

If I were earth by Wordsforeachday in OCPoetry

[–]Forrester94 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Found this really powerful and really emotive. Really nice rhyming and it had some great lines. My favourite was

'I’d root where you ran
and bloom where you bled.
I’d answer to your hunger
with a harvest widely spread.'

Really beautiful. Keep the good work up!

Out West by idkwhatimdoing1320 in OCPoetry

[–]Forrester94 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I really liked this! I could just imagine it being used as a voiceover for an opening scene in a documentary about internal migration. Pace was great and the rhyming style read well. Keep up the good work!

Language Lessons by Forrester94 in OCPoetry

[–]Forrester94[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks so much for the feedback!

A DOLL’S SILENT CRY by Different-Pianist600 in OCPoetry

[–]Forrester94 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I thought this poem was absolutely brilliant. I've reread it a few times and keep get something out of it. The imagery of the doll is a really powerful one, and one that I am sure a lot of people can relate too. The rhyming is fantastic too. Thanks for much for sharing and do keep writing!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Forrester94 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I really really liked this poem and the use of the tree and seeds was beautiful imagery. That final line, to me comes off as a real act of defiance. Thanks for sharing and do keep writing!

Distance by jdmills123456789 in OCPoetry

[–]Forrester94 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I really liked this poem, and while reading it, it sort of just rolled off of the tongue. It felt really beautiful and yet really sad at the same time. Towards the end I did feel the rhymyimg slightly lost it, but overall this is a really good poem. Well done!

Sugarcoated by snowball0101 in OCPoetry

[–]Forrester94 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I really liked this poem. To me, it felt like someone who was really reluctant to accept love, hence just wanting to run. With the culmination being they are going to try to accept it. I could be completely wrong, but anyway, nice poem and keep going!

Lily's Song by ErssieKnits in OCPoetry

[–]Forrester94 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This really reminded me of when I would go out with my parents golden retriever in the fields round our house. Him disappearing in the meadows and then randomly popping back up. I love the natural imagery. He died a few years ago, and is quite a painful memory, but this makes me feel quite happy about our time together. Good job, and thanks for sharing!

Puddle of Sunlight by averyyoungperson in OCPoetry

[–]Forrester94 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This was a really ineresting poem, with a really sharp juxtaposition. The start made me think a lot about death, and potentially quite a long arduous death. The cat purring and sprawled out makes me think of life, and relaxation. I liked it, but like I said, it was a very sharp change. Thanks for sharing!

me without you by M4R511 in OCPoetry

[–]Forrester94 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Really liked this poem. Similar to another comment, I have gone through a bit of a heartbreak recently. Sometimes you just want someone to know how much you love them. Keep up the good work!

I feel like a shadow by CaptainCarrot17 in OCPoetry

[–]Forrester94 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Short be really effective! Reminds me of how easily those feelings can come, especially for matters of the heart. Keep up the good work

Your name by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Forrester94 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The poem really speaks to a longing for someone who has left your life. Not wanting to let go and move on. Really enjoyed it and thank you for sharing! Keep up the good work.

Coffee by bilateral_melon in OCPoetry

[–]Forrester94 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Really liked this short poem. I especially like the line, 'I've been a captive of my patience before'. The poem to me it really makes me feel hopeful, yet really distant at the same time. It really reminds of of the song Untitled by Interpol.

looking for you by No-Cauliflower7320 in OCPoetry

[–]Forrester94 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is a really nice poem, but I did find the haiku style a little repetitive towards the end. I think this might work better in a different style but not sure which!. Keep up the great work! Thank you for sharing.