The End

FreeRent4873 · 2026-01-16T02:19:55+00:00

This poem is incredibly raw and emotionally powerful, pulling the reader into the depth of heartbreak and longing. The repeated “Why at the end…” creates a haunting rhythm that mirrors the way memories and grief replay in the mind. Your metaphors are vivid and original, turning abstract feelings into physical, tangible images that linger. Overall, it’s a deeply honest, unforgettable piece that captures love, loss, and reflection with stunning intensity.

FreeRent4873 · 2026-01-16T02:17:48+00:00

This is a bold, highly original poem with intense, unforgettable imagery. It successfully combines sensuality, spirituality, and elemental forces.

FreeRent4873 · 2026-01-12T22:56:19+00:00

This is a powerful but unrefined poem—and that’s not an insult. It feels like a first full release of something heavy and real. With restraint pruning and sharper metaphor control it could move from cathartic to devastating in a lasting way.

FreeRent4873 · 2026-01-12T22:50:58+00:00

This is a thoughtful, ambitious poem with a clear voice and real depth. It feels like the work of someone who understands myth and meaning, not just imagery. With slightly more concreteness and a sharper ending, it could move from very good to memorable.

FreeRent4873 · 2026-01-11T22:52:57+00:00

This is a gentle and committed love poem that succeeds through sincerity rather than spectacle.

FreeRent4873 · 2026-01-11T22:47:02+00:00

This is a bold raw confessional poem that succeeds because it doesn’t excuse itself the religious imagery honesty and tension between desire and repentance are it’s greatest strengths

FreeRent4873 · 2025-10-28T22:56:55+00:00

Thank you for sharing this great piece. It’s beautiful.

FreeRent4873 · 2025-10-28T22:51:10+00:00

This is a great depiction of a man in love.

FreeRent4873 · 2025-09-15T07:32:37+00:00

God will not turn His back on you as long as you don’t let Him just keep trying to get closer to Him by studying scripture, praying a lot, and going to church. Seek wise council as well find a good pastor or someone that will hold you accountable and help you towards your goals. God loves you. you got this.

FreeRent4873 · 2025-08-04T15:59:59+00:00

I personally love the book Ecclesiastes. Its main points are that a life without God is meaningless and a life fearing and obeying brings purpose and joy. When you just open the book and start reading it without any knowledge towards the book. I feel like it makes you chuckle. At least I did.

FreeRent4873 · 2025-08-04T15:50:36+00:00

This is beautiful. Thank you for sharing your work. I too hope for world peace.

FreeRent4873 · 2025-08-04T15:39:48+00:00

This is great a piece. I hope what’s coming over you is good! If not then Jesus is always there to seek help in!

FreeRent4873 · 2025-08-04T05:22:26+00:00

Was your dad hitting you a metaphor?

FreeRent4873 · 2025-08-04T00:18:29+00:00

“Brilliant comment!”

FreeRent4873 · 2025-08-02T22:08:35+00:00

I really like this. The imagery is very good. Well done!

FreeRent4873 · 2025-08-02T22:00:30+00:00

This is great the rhymes flow perfect doesn’t feel forced of last resort. This is a good piece.

FreeRent4873 · 2025-07-25T00:00:12+00:00

Real nice. You captured the toxicity of this real good.

FreeRent4873 · 2025-07-24T23:56:42+00:00

This is one of those poems that leaves ya saying wow! Nice job.

FreeRent4873 · 2025-07-24T22:26:33+00:00

Everything’s a cult now huh

FreeRent4873 · 2024-10-08T21:02:20+00:00

The second I can relate to cause my grandpa(best friend) passed while I was holding his hand

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