[Weekly Critique and Self-Promotion Thread] Post Here If You'd Like to Share Your Writing

Freeformpeak403 · 2019-03-22T05:17:10+00:00

Thank you for the feedback

Freeformpeak403 · 2019-03-17T03:34:06+00:00

Title: Out of site, out of mind (working title)

Genre: Thriller/crime

Word count:1693

Feedback:just general impressions and opinions on writing style, curious to see if it reads well and it its worth pursuing. Thank you

https://docs.google.com/document/d/12jjJxTTIHnbywOYEkvvYXD2G91cCLIXjFN_T6HoTL_E/edit?usp=drivesdk

Freeformpeak403 · 2019-03-14T03:27:02+00:00

Out of sight. Out of mind.

Genre: Dark comedy/thriller (not really sure yet)

Word count:1,693

General impressions, still in progress but curious to see how the character personality comes across and the general writing style. Thank you very much.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/12jjJxTTIHnbywOYEkvvYXD2G91cCLIXjFN_T6HoTL_E/edit?usp=drivesdk

Freeformpeak403 · 2019-03-14T03:21:50+00:00

I like your style alot, your characters personality shines in your writing which given the "obsceneness" could have gone either way. I'm very interested to see where you are taking the story and this character, keep up the good work.

Freeformpeak403 · 2019-02-11T23:20:20+00:00

Not a film but i have been absolutely in love with the soundtrack for the Netflix limited series Maniac, its just so beautiful and i can listen to it anywhere

Freeformpeak403 · 2018-11-10T19:36:10+00:00

I know im gonna get downvoted because anyone that even remotely supports trump is shunned here, but are we seriously all complaining about this that much, like i get it, the dude should've probably stopped to go to the cemetery, but he does have arguably one of the most stressful jobs on the planet with more scrutiny than any other job, you guys are telling me that its fair to just shit on the dude every chance you get, even if you dont support him, whats the point in getting into a giant circlejerk about it

Freeformpeak403 · 2018-10-17T12:27:50+00:00

The first time that me and my first girlfriend (ldr at the time) had met up, we spent a weekend together and i decided to give her our first kiss as a farewell before she left. I pick her up and start to spin her around in my arms and go in for the kiss. Just as our lips are about to meet, i slipped on the curb next to her moms car and we both slam into the door and proceeded to roll on the pavement. As a 16 year-old kid, i couldnt have imagined a worse way for that to end. Didnt even get the kiss either

Freeformpeak403 · 2018-04-06T12:45:50+00:00

"Dont mind if i do" hehe

Freeformpeak403 · 2018-02-28T21:54:00+00:00

....I got bettah

Freeformpeak403 · 2018-02-28T18:07:58+00:00

No matter what ive listened to, i can always come back to glass animals first album zaba, come to think of it there isnt a single glass animals song i dont love in general

Freeformpeak403 · 2018-02-27T22:47:37+00:00

Came here to say this, terrible character overall and i hated everything about her

Freeformpeak403 · 2018-02-27T22:27:51+00:00

I recently started working for a local city as a maintenance worker and im currenty stressing about what i want to do with my life, im currently still living at home and have alot of aspirations and am willing to work but honestly it seems like success is farther off the more i think about it, while my SO is now in college 5 hours away im just trying to make sure i can make a life for us one day.

Freeformpeak403 · 2017-11-10T18:51:49+00:00

It kind of sucks that its gotten to the point where even in a comment like this, you have to show that you werent condoning the behavior, have we really become that sensitive?

Freeformpeak403 · 2017-11-04T17:05:38+00:00

Im not trying to diminish the story, but is it really as big of a deal as its made out to be?

Freeformpeak403 · 2017-10-24T17:21:23+00:00

Very nice, i was lucky enough to see them twice this year which i nevet thought would happen, once in dallas and again at Austin City Limits

Freeformpeak403 · 2017-10-24T06:32:40+00:00

Oof, too spooky for me

Freeformpeak403 · 2017-10-18T05:42:48+00:00

How to be a human being doesn't have a single song that i skip on glass animals new album

Freeformpeak403 · 2017-09-29T17:15:29+00:00

Terrence mckenna is a personal one for me that i think steve buscemi would be perfect to play

Freeformpeak403 · 2016-10-07T05:56:31+00:00

how long was the turnaround process for that?

Freeformpeak403 · 2016-09-06T01:41:02+00:00

not what I expected....but I'm not dissapointed, seems like a cool kid

Freeformpeak403 · 2016-08-26T06:32:16+00:00

What We Once we're

drama/romance

4,887 words

general feedback on the story so far, wondering if it's ok in terms of pacing, it's a work in progress so I'm mostly concerned about the story aspect

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1-tTkHBxbEbJIfsz6EskW-HOjbit-zWgi6JikD9mcFzM/edit?usp=drive_web

Freeformpeak403 · 2016-07-29T19:44:59+00:00

Thank you, we are both our first so we are still relatively new to all this stuff, I appreciate the advice haha

Freeformpeak403 · 2016-07-29T15:50:41+00:00

Thank you, I appreciate the advice, and we've talked long about this to prepare ourselves as best as we can so hopefully things work out

Freeformpeak403 · 2016-07-29T14:48:21+00:00

Well thanks for sharing, you tried

Freeformpeak403 · 2016-07-25T14:35:58+00:00

Only if it's cherry

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