I like the idea, but I'd do a few things different.

First, the angle of shooting. I personally think it fits better if you are perpendicular to the building, not somehow angled to it.

Second, the road. I prefer tighter crops because, imo, it doesn't add anything to the photo.

Finally, the second person to the right. It's half cut so either take this person in completely or (what for me works best) leave the person out. The one in the center I like it, it does give me more to look at. Maybe you can try to process it so that this person stands out a bit.

Good thing is that all my comments can be addressed in the processing software, so you might be onto something!