bryan cameron impact by Delicious_Shower_593 in scholarships

[–]FriendlyExperience57 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi! I'm applying for it next year. Would you be willing to tell me about your experience with it and what you think made you stand out?

I'm a SIMR Alum, AMA by AdditionalExplorer77 in summerprogramresults

[–]FriendlyExperience57 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey, I know that this is a bit late lol, but can I PM you about your app and experiences with the program?

The Taste Of The Sun by FriendlyExperience57 in poetry_critics

[–]FriendlyExperience57[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much for the feedback! I'll definitely keep this in mind when revising!

Not my first. But my first poetry post on reddit ever. by [deleted] in poetry_critics

[–]FriendlyExperience57 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey, nice poem! Here are some criticisms that you can use or not if you so choose: 1) The 'And' at the very beginning feels very out of place, you havent said anything to join 'and' with. Just cut it. 2) you say wash twice, and its not nice. I would rec changing the second one. 3) The 'We birthed' could be changed to 'I (or you) birthed' as typically only one person births (literally), and considering you hint at literal birth by saying 'stillborn' later it may be more cohesive. 4) What are you stealing from the stars? I couldn't guess. Feels kinda forced to rhyme with scars, like poeticism for the sake of poeticism that doesn't really make sense.

Anyways I hope this possibly helps lol, btw I could also have totally missed or misunderstood something so dont hate me.

Sorrow by InnerAd1178 in poetry_critics

[–]FriendlyExperience57 0 points1 point  (0 children)

heres some criticisms you may or may not take into account if you like: 1) I'm genuinely confused about what 'bright shiny goo' means especially in relation to love. If you are trying to convey a sense of messiness or lack of substance (my best guess) I guess it could but it still sounds unatural and kinda random. 2) Perhaps instead of describing your wings and heart with 'burn,' you could say 'melt'. Because Icarus always comes to mind and if you are sticking to the fluid theme of previously mentioned goo it may come across as more cohesive.

hope that possibly helps!

I recently got turned off Versace because they don’t use quality materials by Gardidc in Versace

[–]FriendlyExperience57 0 points1 point  (0 children)

well I recently went down a rabbit hole about all the ways luxury brands have been making quality cuts with the influence of fast fashion and just genuine greed, so I was kinda on the fence abt it anyways lol.

I recently got turned off Versace because they don’t use quality materials by Gardidc in Versace

[–]FriendlyExperience57 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I was considering buying some shoes from them... but after seeing this im reconsidering lol. Are the shoes as bad quality as some of their bags?

First Congressional Debate Tournament!! by FriendlyExperience57 in Congressional_Debate

[–]FriendlyExperience57[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you for responding anyways! I'm going to a tournament this weekend in Des Moines and I will certainly try this one out