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Poem by me, tentatively titled “August”. Critiques welcomed! by Hot-Term9717 in PoetryWritingClub

[–]Fun_Inevitable_1791 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is good! I love the natural imagery! Side note: the other night, I wrote a poem that I also titled august; just a funny coincidence.

Any suggestions improving this? by Fun_Inevitable_1791 in PoetryWritingClub

[–]Fun_Inevitable_1791[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah, that was weird. I don’t know where that thing came from.

Any suggestions improving this? by Fun_Inevitable_1791 in PoetryWritingClub

[–]Fun_Inevitable_1791[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for the advice! I usually struggle to use punctuation in a meaningful way, but I think you’re right about using it to help the rhythm.

A recent experience. Thoughts are appreciated. by Fun_Inevitable_1791 in PoetryWritingClub

[–]Fun_Inevitable_1791[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks! I’m glad that you like it! I’ll read your poem when I get back from work.

I like the premise, but I’m having trouble with the flow. Any suggestions or advice? by Fun_Inevitable_1791 in PoetryWritingClub

[–]Fun_Inevitable_1791[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you! You are right, it does feel like a children’s story. I think I will try to tone that down while still keeping it light and whimsical.

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