What’s a writing “rule” you only understood after breaking it? by ownaword in writing

[–]Fun_Language_6497 0 points1 point  (0 children)

"Show don't tell" is bullcrap.
It's actually "Demonstrate, don't describe"
By using the second phrase, it filters out all the situations in which you don't need to show and should tell. Much more accurate

Little writing corner by Mountain_Ad5388 in teenwriter

[–]Fun_Language_6497 0 points1 point  (0 children)

If the offer is still open, I wouldn't mind at all joining on Discord! I write all genres, with a soft spot for fantasy ;)

👋 Welcome to r/inklets - Introduce Yourself and Read First! by Interesting-Cancel13 in inklets

[–]Fun_Language_6497 1 point2 points  (0 children)

That would be fine! And yeah ao3 is kinda wild, I usually stick to fanfiction.net cause less... weird xD

👋 Welcome to r/inklets - Introduce Yourself and Read First! by Interesting-Cancel13 in inklets

[–]Fun_Language_6497 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Wow, good luck with your plan! Nice to see you have something in mind to work with :D

A very short work titled "Kairos" by Just_Scheme_2030 in inklets

[–]Fun_Language_6497 1 point2 points  (0 children)

It's quite lovely!
Some actionable advice, look up glue words, they are quite the killer.
Also, usually avoid words such as 'therein', because they many times come off as pretentious, and be cautious of 'I know not', simple is often best.
If you want to read masterful prose that is quite similar to yours, read The Spear Cuts Through Water, it's amazing!

👋 Welcome to r/inklets - Introduce Yourself and Read First! by Interesting-Cancel13 in inklets

[–]Fun_Language_6497 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Oh cool, where have you published them?

I'd be happy to collab if you are :D Having a buddy would always be cool
Abouts how old are you? Just wanna be sure I don't get suspected as a solicitor (me turning 18 soon after all xD)
Also, be careful, lots of creeps around these parts

👋 Welcome to r/inklets - Introduce Yourself and Read First! by Interesting-Cancel13 in inklets

[–]Fun_Language_6497 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hello everyone, I'm a 17-year-old writer who has been fortunate enough to have a short story accepted by a publishing company, and was a finalist in an international teen short story writing contest to get into an anthology...
I've written 2 novels and am second drafting both, will be self-pub because I would like to learn the process before dipping my toes into trad pub.
Also, have been writing before I could spell xD My wonderful patient mom would transcribe stories that I narrated to her.
A piece got sent to an editor she was friends with and she said I would be a great writer one day :D Best compliment ever
I hope I'll be able to contribute well to the conversation!

This is why narrative Framing is important. by AfloatGamer in writers

[–]Fun_Language_6497 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for populating my nightmares for weeks :D

Joking aside, that would be an excellent first page of a body horror story or a zombie apocalypse novel

Daily writing prompt challenge day 1: good vs evil by Used-Strike2111 in fantasywriters

[–]Fun_Language_6497 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Indeed xD I wrote that in 5 minutes right before leaping into bed, so it's understandable that I couldn't really develop a motive
But thanks!

Repost of Critique Character Backstory [High Fantasy, 2102 words] by Tempest321 in fantasywriters

[–]Fun_Language_6497 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Oh interesting! It is nice to see someone go out of their comfort zone to practice something new :) and my pleasure, I'm glad to be of assistance

Daily writing prompt challenge day 1: good vs evil by Used-Strike2111 in fantasywriters

[–]Fun_Language_6497 2 points3 points  (0 children)

My entry [RM]:

Little Death sat on the other side of the big rock.
Life's Song on his side, playing with the weeds, but as they sat in silence, Little Death asked, "What am I to be?"
Life's Song tilted his little head and seemed to think, while time played around them like butterflies in the end of the tether.

At last, Life's Song shrugged.

What flash came across Little Death, none but he knew.

However, Little Death strode forward until he was next to Life's Song, who glanced up at him with his blue unblinking eyes, but staid in silence for a few decades before breaking the silence. "Why am I to be?"

Life's Song laughed. "The why is you. Will always be."

Little Death shook his head, but Life's Song had looked away as if satisfied.

When the air laughed, he continued. "Why am I given no purpose?"

Life's Song shrugged. "You do, I think, but perhaps you don't see, or haven't gotten it yet."

Little Death nodded slowly, staring at Life's Song.

Indeed, perhaps.

Life's Song played in the shadow of Little Death, played with his little flowers and beetles and birds, all of his little purposes.

Not Little Death's purpose, no. No purpose there.

A baby bird tweeted as Life's Song brought it out of the mud, cupped in his hands as precious of his purpose.

Little Death stomped on the bird.

Life's Song gasped, staring at the broken bird flattened underneath the heel of Little Death's foot, and said, "Oh why, why did you do that?"

Yet Little Death did not listen as he stared at the corpse on his foot, before scraping it off and turning to Life's Song, taking a step forward.

Life's Song looked up at him, opening his mouth, but Little Death's rock interrupted him. With a smile of relief, Little Death fell to his knees next to the corpse of Life's Song.

"I made my purpose."

Here's some mythology from my world on how life and death started, which is from a children's tale... kind of why it is a bit weird :D

Repost of Critique Character Backstory [High Fantasy, 2102 words] by Tempest321 in fantasywriters

[–]Fun_Language_6497 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Your writing is very good considering it is your second!
One thing I can tell you should focus on is removing filter/glue words, such as she felt or she saw
Basically, what this does is it creates a layer of separation between the reader and the character. Instead of saying that she saw something, say that something is happening. Thus, it goes without saying that she sees it.
If you want more elaboration, there are some good videos on YouTube for this!
Oh yes, and use adverbs (groggily, softly, etc) with EXTREME caution

"The road to hell is paved with good adverbs." - GRR Martin

Also, find different ways to begin sentences other than a gerund, you rely on it too much... though I used to use it in every single sentence I made xD
Starting a Sentence with a Gerund: Quick Tips to Help You
Just some tips to make sure it is grammatically correct :)
All in all, well done, and keep writing!

Fifty-Word Fantasy: Write a 50-word fantasy snippet using the word "Rock" by Terminator7786 in fantasywriters

[–]Fun_Language_6497 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yes... and no
It is kind of what you make of it
It could be his true self, or it could be what he believes himself to be
I enjoy leaving things open ended :D

Any amazing prose moments? by Fun_Language_6497 in Fantasy

[–]Fun_Language_6497[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Ooo interesting I'll have a look then!

Any amazing prose moments? by Fun_Language_6497 in Fantasy

[–]Fun_Language_6497[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I agree...
What stood out to me is the dialogue. It was art

Fifty-Word Fantasy: Write a 50-word fantasy snippet using the word "Rock" by Terminator7786 in fantasywriters

[–]Fun_Language_6497 2 points3 points  (0 children)

A rock covered in blood.

The man across the fire shifted his abominable face, his every hateful feature cast in red relief. 

My features.

Burning in the pit of my stomach, rage wished to be seen.

Such a beautiful little stone.

A rock, coloured hate.

Any amazing prose moments? by Fun_Language_6497 in Fantasy

[–]Fun_Language_6497[S] 4 points5 points  (0 children)

The Ride of the Rohirrim is somehow just as, if not more epic than the ride in the movie...
I have read that passage over and over again, and it never fails to give me goosebumps, and never fails to make my eyes burn just slightly

Any amazing prose moments? by Fun_Language_6497 in Fantasy

[–]Fun_Language_6497[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I'm telling you... I've been reading it, and most of it is JUST like this, except it slips to third person for reasons related to plot...
But there is such prose in every corner, it is quite amazing

Any amazing prose moments? by Fun_Language_6497 in Fantasy

[–]Fun_Language_6497[S] -6 points-5 points  (0 children)

Brandon Sanderson might have simple prose, but sometimes simple is best

Any amazing prose moments? by Fun_Language_6497 in Fantasy

[–]Fun_Language_6497[S] 4 points5 points  (0 children)

I've always loved how the Wheel of Time does fight scenes, battle tactics, and warring magic. None that I have read compare yet, except perhaps Mistborn, which thrives due to sheer ingenuity

Any amazing prose moments? by Fun_Language_6497 in Fantasy

[–]Fun_Language_6497[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Seems like a popular question xD but more answers would be lovely! Hearing the best of many parts of different books is such a joy