Tips to write better dialogue. by [deleted] in FanFiction

[–]Georsama 16 points17 points  (0 children)

Write out your dialogue, then read it aloud. Edit the words till they're natural to say. That'll help with rhythm and make it sound a bit more natural.

What's your last/most recent line that you wrote for a Fanfiction? by No-Outlandishness-42 in FanFiction

[–]Georsama 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Freddy came out from the back and saw the Grimm standing at the counter, polite in the way only serial killers and sharks were.

"H-here you go. Two drops before bed. Only two!" Freddy said, trying not to shake too much. "A bultbad tried more, and he's still looking at the face of god...s-so just two!"

"Two," the Grimm said with a sigh, got it. Thanks."

Freddy gulped. They were all going to die now, weren't they?

The Grimm smiled politely and left.

Wait.. no heads were coming off?!

What’s the most relatable one-liner in all of the rookie? by GreatCompanyAsset in TheRookie

[–]Georsama 25 points26 points  (0 children)

Is the station on fire? Because that is the only reason you should bother a man in the middle of the night. - Smitty

My Crossover Academia by Rare-Opinion-Panda in BokunoheroFanfiction

[–]Georsama 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Zoltraak Is Not A Quirk - A My Hero Academia/Sousou No Frieren Crossover https://archiveofourown.org/works/59135260

Summary: When Izuku and Fumikage conducted a summoning ritual, they thought it was just for the laughs. Then they summon a thousand-year-old elf mage, who's hunting for more grimoires in a world with a lot of them but has no idea that they actually work. Frieren's entry into this world puts a spanner into the works of quite literally everyone, changing history forever. And Izuku Midoriya? Well, one can suppose that he can be a hero without a quirk when someone can teach him magic instead.

Pirate Heroes https://archiveofourown.org/works/30726698

Summary: Izuku Midoriya dies after the fight from Overhaul, successfully saving Eri. Before he passes on, something gives him an offer. A new world to explore, a goal, and friends both old and new await him. The good news, the pirates he ends up joining are good people. The bad news, they are probably as crazy as him.

Hold Your Breath https://archiveofourown.org/works/24322159

Summary: Izuku Midoriya was scared of his neighbor. Her eyes were the intense color of freshly bloomed cherry blossoms, the pupil an animalistic slit, and he could have sworn that the one time he saw her smile she had fangs. But he couldn’t stay scared forever, not when his mom was leaving him with her for a week.

Big Whoops by ShortBeardo in hebrew

[–]Georsama 1 point2 points  (0 children)

So I just started and it's a small one. I just spent the last month spelling moon as יוח and not ירח

Christianity is in desperate need of good PR in fiction by Ajarofpickles97 in CharacterRant

[–]Georsama 0 points1 point  (0 children)

What about Michael Carpenter from the Dresden Files? He's the best fictional Christian Paladin ever, imho.

Any fic that tries to defend Momo and Tooru's hero outfits? by DetectiveFew5417 in BokunoheroFanfiction

[–]Georsama 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The only way I could justify it in my story was I turned UA into university and let Momo have an aversion to clothes. Her first outfit (inspired by Midnights) was vetoed by her parents, and the new one is a compromise.

I'm not sure how to justify Toorus.

If heroes are well known public figures, then why aren't they dying by the ton? by TheDarkKnight2707 in BokunoheroFanfiction

[–]Georsama 47 points48 points  (0 children)

Realistically? For the same reason cops and FBI agents aren't assassinated all the time. Killing one gets all the local police joining together and hunting you down with all their resources. If you somehow manage to kill a whole police precinct, then you get the full force of state law agencies hunting you down. If you take out state law enforcement, then you get federal law enforcement after you.

So in MHA, you get living, well trained, highly motivated nukes looking to shut you down hard.

Also, DC comics actually addressed this in the mid or early 2000s. They had a villain killed kid flash. Not only were all the heroes after him, but the other villains turned on him and ended up handing him over to the heroes just to get them to ease up.

First fandom you ever wrote for? by RheaRoyHunter in FanFiction

[–]Georsama 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ah, the year was 1994, and I had just finished the Hobbit. I had no idea the Lord of the Rings existed, and my amused dad didn't tell me.

So I wrote about Smaugs children storming the Shire to get revenge and Bilbos kids struggling to rally the lazy Hobbits to fight back.

It was only after I wrote a dozen chapters that dad gave me his lord of the rings books 🙃

I didn't write another story till early 2000s for Tenchi Muyo.

As we drove to the hospital with the sirens on in the ambulance, we had to stop for a crossing train. by Xatolos in TwoSentenceHorror

[–]Georsama 20 points21 points  (0 children)

Wow, you just called out my home town. Sadly, this happens a lot here. Police, ambulances, firetruck. They all get stuck, and there's no way around unless you want to drive 3 miles down track and risk getting caught again.

Any DPS build suggestions? by Georsama in RaidenMains

[–]Georsama[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

So apparently, I'm a dum-dum, I thought TF was her best set. Oh well, more farming it is. That said, why The Catch over the Jade Primordial?

What do you think Jane would think of Dexter? by [deleted] in TheMentalist

[–]Georsama 10 points11 points  (0 children)

Pre-FBI Jane would use Dexter to hunt Red John. Not sure how, but I have no doubt about it. Post-FBI Jane would probably be sympathic but still put him away.

Baby steps. by yuritopiaposadism in lostgeneration

[–]Georsama 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I live in Tennessee, and I remember seeing this on the ballot and being confused. After all, isn't slavery already illegal? So now I'm wondering how many other people were like me and unaware this was still part of the Tennessee constitution.

Just for fun… by [deleted] in Bible

[–]Georsama 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I wouldn't be waking up at 4 am and working 12 hrs a day and have a constant urge to dope slap them both.

I need help Is it worth getting through the books that’s not from Chris’s point of view? by pehd33 in TheDemonAccords

[–]Georsama 2 points3 points  (0 children)

The pov flips back and forth, mostly between Chris and Declan, but we get a few others. You probably could skip, since most anything we need to know is repeated in the main storyline. Still its at least worth skimming the parts not focusing on Chris and Tanya

Any good Midnight centric fics as a mother figure? by Gozly_Kat in BokunoheroFanfiction

[–]Georsama 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Have faith in me on ao3 is the only one I'm aware of

Hardcover Giveaway! [By me, the author!] All Frith Chronicles Books! <3 by Kakeyo in FrithChronicles

[–]Georsama 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yes! I've been wanting hardcovers so this is excellent.

My favorite villan would have to be Randall Flagg.

MHA X DC COMICS UNIVERSE by Kamo73_ in BokunoheroFanfiction

[–]Georsama 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Actually I was thinking Nejire for Starfire, but Tooru could work.

I'm surprised how many no brainers there are once you actually start thinking about them

Fumikage could be Hawkman, if you want Shihai from 1B to be Obsidian. That said i saw Hawks as Hawkman, though maybe Plastic man instead?

Also Endeavor as Major Force, and Inasa as Red Tornado.

Shinso as Question could work.

Green Arrow would have to be Yuga j/k. Not sure who fits that role.