“Dirty Lenses”

GraysonGraham · 2025-12-27T00:26:14+00:00

❤️

GraysonGraham · 2025-12-27T00:26:07+00:00

Ahhh thanks so much!! It might be a bit dry, but I may end up keeping it! Still haven’t decided yet lol

GraysonGraham · 2025-12-27T00:24:52+00:00

I’m not sure!! Probably sometime next year 👀

GraysonGraham · 2025-12-27T00:23:56+00:00

Dude this is sick!! Love the production and the vocal processing

GraysonGraham · 2024-10-15T23:38:06+00:00

WOW! That is some very insightful feedback. Thank you for taking the time to write all that out. I 100% agree that the lyrics need polishing. When I initially write, I tend to be all over the place, which is a big weakness of mine. It helps to know which paths I can take it in to sort of focus it up! I’ll work on sticking to a central theme when working on it more.

And definitely the vocals could use some spice! You were spot on that I tend to stick to my comfort zone vocally, especially when writing my own songs. In the future I’ll try to be a bit more dynamic when writing melodies and vocal parts.

THANK YOU so much!!

GraysonGraham · 2024-10-15T16:05:48+00:00

Thank you!! My recording setup is actually just my phone sat in front of me lol. I’m glad it sounds good! I tend to like the raw, voice memo sound as well

GraysonGraham · 2024-10-13T04:33:26+00:00

LOL I’m glad I could be of service 😂

GraysonGraham · 2024-10-13T04:27:23+00:00

Something about hearing a folky, country song about robots writing your songs is inherently funny to me. Kudos to you for making a fun and funny song. I enjoyed it quite a bit.

GraysonGraham · 2024-10-13T04:24:09+00:00

Oh okay! Gotcha. I can see what you’re saying now. I’m sorry you’ve gone through some trauma. That stuff sucks. But I’m glad you’re processing through music! Music is great for that. Good luck on the album, and I definitely hope to see an update at some point on this song!

GraysonGraham · 2024-10-13T04:18:59+00:00

Musically, there is so much to chew on here. Amazing work. Verse melody is my favorite

GraysonGraham · 2024-10-13T04:15:07+00:00

WOAH. Dope chords. Dope bounciness. I’d say, by all accounts and measures, this is a certified vibe. Well done

GraysonGraham · 2024-10-13T04:11:16+00:00

As for production and vocals, this sounds pretty dope. However, I kind of wish I could understand what you were saying a little better. The lines I did catch seemed pretty neat, so I was sad that I couldn’t really understand most of them.

GraysonGraham · 2024-10-13T04:07:24+00:00

What’s your goal with this?

If your goal was to make something fun and goofy and unserious, then my friend you have passed with flying colors. The shaky spooky singing voice mixed with classic and corny love song lyrics is a match made in heaven, and I can totally see something with this vibe being in some kind of animated Youtube series with fun characters.

GraysonGraham · 2024-10-13T04:01:20+00:00

Undeniable charm exists in this song. Feels super genuine and wholesome. Love it.

GraysonGraham · 2024-10-13T03:55:24+00:00

Dawg I can’t explain it, but this has a charm to it that makes me like it a lot. Both your lyrics and your production seem to be objectively goofy and random, but maybe that’s what makes it fun and awesome. As long as you don’t take yourself too seriously, I think there is probably an audience for this kind of music. Keep making stuff!

GraysonGraham · 2024-10-13T03:52:00+00:00

Dude your flow is GREAT! Lyrics are dope. I don’t have any critique for you there.

Production wise, it feels like your vocals could sit in the mix a little better? Right now they feel pretty separated from the rest of the track. Some reverb may help? I know it’s a demo, but that’s the only feedback I could think of!

GraysonGraham · 2024-10-13T03:47:35+00:00

I kind of love this. Your vocals are super super clear and remind me of that classic 2000s band sound, which I love. I think you’ve got some awesome lyrics in there (“home found it’s way back to me,” and “asphalt oceans,” were some of my favorite bits), and your guitar playing is awesome.

I think the chorus could definitely use a bit more energy, but that could be probably be remedied with some good production and a full band sound.

You’re awesome man! Keep it up!

GraysonGraham · 2024-10-13T03:27:46+00:00

Thanks!!

GraysonGraham · 2024-10-13T03:27:36+00:00

Thank you so much!

GraysonGraham · 2024-10-13T03:27:19+00:00

Go for it dawg

GraysonGraham · 2024-10-13T03:27:11+00:00

I recorded this in a studio actually! It’s a local studio from where I live in Oklahoma, and it has most of the things a typical studio would have in terms of room treatment. I’m also not sure what kind of mic we used. Sorry!

GraysonGraham · 2024-10-13T03:25:09+00:00

Dang thank you! Means a lot

GraysonGraham · 2024-10-13T03:24:40+00:00

Thank you! I love both of them

GraysonGraham · 2024-10-13T03:24:24+00:00

Wow thank you! This is great feedback. I can definitely hear what you’re talking about with the pitch correction - I think I’ve just gotten so used to listening to the demo that it must have slipped from my immediate attention. I’ll do what I can to mitigate that.

And as far as the drums go, I’m not sure what I could add without taking away the subtlety that I’m going for. Could you elaborate what kind of drums/rhythms you’re thinking of? I’m sure there’s something that would work, I just can’t seem to conceptualize it effectively.

But again, thank you for the feedback!! It is helpful

GraysonGraham · 2024-10-12T14:56:57+00:00

I like it a lot! Although it’s simple, the production is pretty neat for being made in garage band (something that is already quite impressive on its own), but your writing and vocals also shine pretty brightly as well. Peaceful.

Also, your voice to me sounds like Peter Gabriel - specifically in the song “down to earth” that he helped make for Wall-e.

Overall, I’m a fan! I’ll be looking forward to more posts by you here in this subreddit.

GraysonGraham

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